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Describe the age/stage you enjoyed most in your life. v.1

Describe the age/stage you enjoyed most in your life. v. 1
Describe the age/stage you enjoyed most in your life. You should say: what the age/stage was what did you like to do back then who you enjoyed spending time with mostly back then and explain why this was the best age/stage in your life.   Model Answer 1: To be honest, I don’t really like to subscribe to the idea that there is one best age or stage in our life because the truth is that we wouldn’t be able to grow as a “person” unless we choose to consider each age or stage of our lives as “special”. But, since, this cue card is asking me to do just that, I will try to make it as interesting as possible. Moving forward, I would say that probably the best stage in my life was when I was a child with an age range of 8-12 years old. This was the stage of my life when I could do pretty much anything and everything (nothing anti-social, of course) without having to worry about any major “reprisal”. However, back then, one of the things, which I really liked to do, was to go to a nearby open field/space and play football and volleyball with my friends and senior brothers after finishing the schools. Then, of course, I also need to mention here about our weekly “fishing activities” in the company of my elder brother which I enjoyed almost every weekend. But, the best thing of all, which I really enjoyed doing every weekend, was to watch the cartoon movies on television with my elder brother and sister while enjoying some special snacks together. By the way, my parents didn’t allow us to go to a movie theatre to watch movies back then. So, watching cartoons on TV was something which I really appreciated, especially, if I was doing it with my elder brother. After all, it was my elder brother, with whom I just loved spending my time. Anyway, I would consider this particular stage of my life as best because I didn’t have to worry about being “judged” by people around me. Besides, this was also a period of time, when I made some “lifelong” and true friends. Finally, I would consider this state as the best because I could enjoy the little things of our life without any “guilty feeling” in me.
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Describe
the age/stage you
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enjoyed
most in your
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life
. You should say: what the age/stage was what did you like to do
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back
then who you
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enjoyed
spending time with
mostly
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back
then and
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explain
why this was the
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best
age/stage in your
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life
.
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Model Answer 1:

To be honest, I don’t
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really
like to subscribe to the
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idea
that there is one
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best
age or
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stage
in our
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life
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because
the truth is that we wouldn’t be able to grow as a “person” unless we choose to consider each age or
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stage
of our
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lives
as “special”.
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But
, since, this cue card is asking me to do
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just
that, I will try to
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make
it as interesting as possible.

Moving forward, I would say that
probably
the
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best
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stage
in my
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life
was when I was a child with an age range of 8-12 years
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old
. This was the
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stage
of my
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life
when I could do pretty much anything and everything (nothing anti-social,
of course
) without having to worry about any major “reprisal”.
However
,
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back
then, one of the things, which I
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really
liked to do, was to go to a nearby open field/space and play football and volleyball with my friends and senior
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brothers
after finishing the schools. Then,
of course
, I
also
need to mention here about our weekly “fishing activities” in the
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company
of my
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elder
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brother
which I
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enjoyed
almost every weekend.
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But
, the
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best
thing of all, which I
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really
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enjoyed
doing every weekend, was to
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watch
the cartoon movies on television with my
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elder
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brother
and sister while enjoying
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some
special snacks together.

By the way, my parents didn’t
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allow
us to go to a movie
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theatre
to
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watch
movies
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back
then.
So
, watching cartoons on TV was something which I
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really
appreciated,
especially
, if I was doing it with my
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elder
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brother
.
After all
, it was my
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elder
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brother
, with whom I
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just
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loved
spending my time.

Anyway
, I would consider this particular
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stage
of my
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life
as
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best
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because
I didn’t
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have to
worry about being “judged” by
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people
around me.
Besides
, this was
also
a period of time, when I made
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some
“lifelong” and true friends.
Finally
, I would consider this state as the
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best
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because
I could enjoy the
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little
things of our
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life
without any “guilty feeling” in me.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe the age/stage you enjoyed most in your life. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
393 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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