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Describe something that you want to learn more. v.1

Describe something that you want to learn more. v. 1
Describe something that you want to learn more. You should say: what it is how you would learn it where you can learn it and explain why you want to keep learning it.   Model Answer 1: One of the best things about our life is that we can keep learning as long as we breathe, and the more we learn, the better it is for us, both personally and professionally. So, thank you for allowing me the opportunity to share here what I want to learn more. I like to learn about computer networking and internet technology more because it is changing at a very rapid pace. For example, in the beginning, we used a DSL internet connection. Then, we started using a broadband connection because DSL connection proved out to be too slow. But that too was not enough because it was not possible to provide a “wired” network in the rural and undeveloped areas. So, eventually, the expert came up with the idea of wireless, satellite and microwave internet connection. And, all these changes took place only over the last couple of decades mostly. Similarly, I wouldn’t be surprised if we suddenly see that broadband routers and other home gateways are disappearing because devices are able to communicate with each other and the internet directly without the help of any routers or gateways. However, I feel that it would be really difficult to understand about these technological trends and changes without professional help. So, I have decided to get enrolled for a diploma course on networking and internet technology. Besides, I am also planning to buy some good books on internet technology while also watching some educational videos online at the same time. Besides, I believe that I can learn many things on this subject by surfing the internet also. Anyway, I want to learn more about it because I find the internet and the world wide web to be very fascinating. After all, it only makes sense that we should learn about this technology which has already revolutionized the way we communicate with each other today. Besides, I want to learn it more because I want to be able to fix any kind of networking problems, not only at my home but also at my workplace so that I am valued more by my company.
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Describe
something that you
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want
to
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learn
more. You should say: what it is how you would
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learn
it where you can
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learn
it and
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explain
why you
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want
to
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keep
learning it.
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Model Answer 1:

One of the best things about our life is that we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
learning as long as we breathe, and the more we
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
, the better it is for us, both
personally
and
professionally
.
So
, thank you for allowing me the opportunity to share here what I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
more.

I like to
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learn
about computer networking and internet
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technology
more
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because
it is changing at a
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very
rapid pace.
For example
, in the beginning, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
a DSL internet
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connection
. Then, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
using a broadband
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connection
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because
DSL
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connection
proved out to be too slow.
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But
that too was not
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enough
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because
it was not possible to provide a “wired” network in the rural and undeveloped areas.
So
,
eventually
, the expert came up with the
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idea
of wireless, satellite and microwave internet
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connection
. And, all these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
took place
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only
over the last couple of decades
mostly
.
Similarly
, I wouldn’t
be surprised
if we
suddenly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
that broadband routers and other home gateways are disappearing
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because
devices are able to communicate with each other and the internet
directly
without the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of any routers or gateways.

However
, I feel that it would be
really
difficult to understand about these technological trends and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
without professional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.
So
, I have decided to
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get
enrolled for a diploma course on networking and internet
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technology
.
Besides
, I am
also
planning to
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buy
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some
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good
books on internet
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technology
while
also
watching
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some
educational videos online at the same time.
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Besides
, I believe that I can
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learn
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many
things on this subject by surfing the internet
also
.

Anyway
, I
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want
to
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learn
more about it
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because
I find the internet and the
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world wide web
to be
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very
fascinating.
After all
, it
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only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
sense that we should
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learn
about this
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technology
which has already revolutionized the way we communicate with each other
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today
.
Besides
, I
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want
to
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learn
it more
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because
I
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want
to be able to
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fix
any kind of networking problems, not
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only
at my home
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but
also
at my workplace
so
that I
am valued
more by my
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company
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe something that you want to learn more. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
389 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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