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Describe something special you brought home from a holiday. v.1

Describe something special you brought home from a holiday. v. 1
Describe something special you brought home from a holiday. You should say: what it was when and where you went on this holiday what you did with it after you brought it home and explain why you think it was something special. Model Answer 1: A few months ago I went to Switzerland on a holiday and brought home a painting from a local shop in Zurich. It was large painting and I had to pay a large sum of money as the tax in the airport to bring it home. However, it was such a nice piece of painting that it actually worth the hassle and money. It was a large oil painting that depicts a beautiful natural scenery common in Switzerland and not quite common in my homeland. I have hung it in my drawing-room and this is one of the most beautiful and cherished souvenirs for me. It was a 5 days holiday tour that was arranged by my office and we went to Switzerland on this tour. We went there in the early January and visited Geneva, St. Moritz, Zurich, three museums on different places  and Swiss National Park. The alpine scenery, picturesque villages, glittering blue lakes, beautiful lakeside and astounding tranquillity of the villages took our breath away. Luckily a festival was going on during our visit to Zurich and this was another pleasant surprise for me. I visited almost all of the stalls and enjoyed the exotic foods and items they were selling. I bought the oil painting from this festival and this was something I liked when I first looked at it. As soon as I brought it home, it became one of the best souvenirs for me and my family. I showed it to my parents and they also liked it very much. Then I decided to hang it in our drawing room. Every time I look at this painting, it reminds me the exciting and memorable days I had spent on our holiday in Switzerland. Apart from that, the painting is a bit different than the other paintings I have in our house. I do not know about the painter of this mind-blowing painting, but I am sure he or she must be a very talented artist who has an inherited talent for portraying the beauty of nature in a magical way. I have brought home some other souvenirs from my other tours and holidays from different parts of the world like a neckless for my sister, a set of fork for my mother, a few dresses for me and other family members, a wooden toy gun, a guitar, a wooden box and so on but painting I brought from Zurich festival is my personal favourite till now.   Sample Answer 2: Street shopping in Thailand is really an outstanding idea to collect home appliances. In my last holiday in Thailand, I brought an electronic stove. This really is of a great importance to me now. It helps to cook the foods early than the ordinary stoves.   Usually, I like to shop at the street markets wherever I go. And accordingly, I take some notes to buy the things I need from the street markets. Being a bachelor, it is really difficult to cook foods and it is hard indeed to manage time to cook foods in the morning. An electric stove was the best solution for me. So, when I got the chance to get it, I did not miss it. Besides, the street markets of Thailand offer a wide variety of the piece and within a reasonable budget. On the other side, in my native city Tokyo it is much pricy.   In each of the summer, I make a holiday visit in different attractive places inside the country, Japan. But this time I changed the plan and travelled outside of Japan. Thailand is a place of natural beauty and has many notable tourist spots. So, I moved to Thailand with some of my engineer friends. As this was a short visit of five days, I was unable to move in all the attractive places. I just have visited some of the notable places. Besides, I moved in the street markets and made a huge shopping for my parents and some of the close buddies. It was really an interesting experience for me to shop in the street. Actually, I am not habituated with such types of shopping. Besides, haggling appeared as one of the common features of the street markets. But everything went fine with me.   The electric stove is made by a reputed Korean manufacturer and it runs well. In fact, there are some magnetic mechanisms that help to cook faster than the other types of stoves. After bringing the stove in Japan, I started using it. I have my parents who live in the other part of the city and I live in the university dormitory. I do not prefer to take food out of the home, and thus I cook my own food. But the stove of the dorm was not up to the mark and I had to wait in a queue to cook my meals. As a result, I made late for my classes in the morning. Now, this is easier for me. I can cook my meals or anything whenever I want. I do not need to move in a queue with the other students and get the cooking done.   The electric stove is special in some aspects. First of all, it can cook very quickly that I want most. The taste of the foods remains the same. Further, it does not require any gas or oil. It completely runs on electricity. As a result, the maintenance cost is limited. Besides, I had burnt my hands a couple of time while cooking on the ordinary stoves. But there are no such risks. This is completely a risk-free device I can rely on. Based on such grounds, it appears to me that this electric stove is special to me.
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Describe
something
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special
you
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brought
home from a
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holiday
. You should say: what it was when and where you
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went
on this
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holiday
what you did with it after you
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brought
it home and
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explain
why you
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think
it was something
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special
. Model Answer 1:

A few months ago I
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went
to Switzerland on a
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holiday
and
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brought
home a
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painting
from a local shop in Zurich. It was large
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painting
and I had to pay a large sum of money as the tax in the airport to bring it home.
However
, it was such a nice piece of
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painting
that it
actually
worth the hassle and money. It was a large oil
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painting
that depicts a
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beautiful
natural scenery common in Switzerland and not quite common in my homeland. I have hung it in my drawing-room and this is one of the most
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beautiful
and cherished souvenirs for me.

It was a 5 days
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holiday
tour that
was arranged
by my
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office and
we
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went
to Switzerland on this tour. We
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went
there in the early January and visited Geneva, St. Moritz, Zurich, three museums on
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different
places
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and Swiss National Park. The alpine scenery, picturesque villages, glittering blue lakes,
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beautiful
lakeside and astounding
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tranquillity
of the villages took our breath away. Luckily a festival was going on during our visit to Zurich and this was another pleasant surprise for me. I visited almost
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all of the
stalls and enjoyed the exotic
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foods
and items they were selling. I
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bought
the oil
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painting
from this festival and this was something I liked when I
first
looked at it.

As
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soon
as I
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brought
it home, it became one of the best souvenirs for me and my family. I
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showed
it to my
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parents and
they
also
liked it
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very
much. Then I decided to hang it in our drawing room. Every
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time
I look at this
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painting
, it reminds me the exciting and memorable days I had spent on our
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holiday
in Switzerland. Apart from that, the
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painting
is a bit
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different
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than
the
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other
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paintings
I have in our
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house
. I do not know about the painter of this mind-blowing
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painting
,
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but
I am sure he or she
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must
be a
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very
talented artist who has an inherited talent for portraying the beauty of nature
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in a magical way
. I have
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brought
home
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some
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other
souvenirs from my
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other
tours and
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holidays
from
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different
parts of the world like a neckless for my sister, a set of fork for my mother, a few dresses for me and
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other
family members, a wooden toy gun, a guitar, a wooden box and
so
on
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but
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painting
I
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brought
from Zurich festival is my personal
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favourite
till
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now
.
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Sample Answer
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2: Street
shopping in Thailand is
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really
an outstanding
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idea
to collect home appliances. In my last
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holiday
in Thailand, I
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brought
an electronic
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stove
. This
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really
is of a great importance to me
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now
. It
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helps
to cook the
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foods
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early
than the ordinary
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stoves
.
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Usually
, I like to shop at the
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street
markets wherever I go. And
accordingly
, I take
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some
notes to
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buy
the things I need from the
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street
markets. Being a bachelor, it is
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really
difficult to cook
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foods
and it is
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hard
indeed
to manage
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time
to cook
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foods
in the morning. An
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electric
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stove
was the best solution for me.
So
, when I
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got
the chance to
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get
it, I did not miss it.
Besides
, the
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street
markets of Thailand offer a wide variety of the piece and within a reasonable budget. On the
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other
side, in my native city Tokyo it is much
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pricy
.
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In each of the summer, I
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make
a
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holiday
visit in
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different
attractive
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places
inside the country, Japan.
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But
this
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time
I
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changed
the plan and travelled outside of Japan. Thailand is a
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place
of natural beauty and has
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many
notable tourist spots.
So
, I
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moved
to Thailand with
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some
of my engineer friends. As this was a short visit of five days, I was unable to
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move
in all the attractive
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places
. I
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just
have visited
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some of the
notable
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places
.
Besides
, I
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moved
in the
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street
markets and made a huge shopping for my parents and
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some of the
close buddies. It was
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really
an interesting experience for me to shop in the
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street
.
Actually
, I am not habituated with such types of shopping.
Besides
, haggling appeared as one of the common features of the
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street
markets.
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But
everything
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went
fine with me.
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The
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electric
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stove
is made
by a reputed Korean manufacturer and it runs
well
. In fact, there are
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some
magnetic mechanisms that
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help
to cook faster than the
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other
types of
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stoves
. After bringing the
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stove
in Japan, I
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started
using it. I have my parents who
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live
in the
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other
part of the city and I
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live
in the university dormitory. I do not prefer to take
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food
out of the home, and
thus
I cook my
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own
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food
.
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But
the
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stove
of the dorm was not up to the mark and I had to wait in a queue to cook my meals.
As a result
, I made late for my classes in the morning.
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Now
, this is easier for me. I can cook my meals or anything whenever I want. I do not need to
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move
in a queue with the
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other
students and
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get
the cooking done.
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The
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electric
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stove
is
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special
in
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some
aspects.
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First of all
, it can cook
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very
quickly
that I want most. The taste of the
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foods
remains the same.
Further
, it does not require any gas or oil. It completely runs on electricity.
As a result
, the maintenance cost
is limited
.
Besides
, I had burnt my hands a couple of
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time
while cooking on the ordinary
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stoves
.
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But
there are no such
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risks
. This is completely a
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risk
-free device I can rely on. Based on such grounds, it appears to me that this
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electric
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stove
is
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special
to me.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
87Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe something special you brought home from a holiday. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
1009 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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