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Describe someone you know who is famous. v.1

Describe someone you know who is famous. v. 1
Describe someone you know who is famous. Please say: who this person is how you know him/her how long have you known him/her and explain how he/she is famous. Sample Answer 1: My uncle, Oliver, is a professor of our local college and he is quite popular in our town. Not that he is a national celebrity, but he is very famous in our area and I am proud of being his nephew. Instead of talking about a nationally famous person, I would prefer to talk about my uncle. He is my favourite uncle and I like him for his amiable behaviours and talent. He is a kind-hearted and benevolent man who is around 45 years old now. Since he is my father’s only brother and was very close to us, I know him my whole life. Personally, I am quite attached to this uncle and we often play chess together or enjoy movies in a theatre. As far as I recall, he has always been famous in our town. He is known to his student as a talented math professor, to his colleagues he is an excellent person, to us, he is a great mentor and to others, he is a helpful and kind person. However, his fame extended beyond our city area for his achievement of a national award as the best math book writer. His book is used in grade seven as a national textbook and this single achievement has made him famous among many literary and educated societies in the country.   He was once been in the headline of many national daily newspapers which I still remember very clearly. As far as I know, he is kind of an introvert and not after fame or popularity. He has very little interest in money or personal achievements. I had many long discussions with him and I have come to the decision that he leads an exemplary life and he is quite a happy person. Like many other famous people, he has no desire for personal achievements and his good deeds and talent have earned him respects and popularity. When people find out that I am his nephew they treat me differently and this single aspect clearly demonstrates how popular and respected he really is.
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who is
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.
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say: who this
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person
is how you
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him/her how long have you known him/her and
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how he/she is
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famous
. Sample Answer 1:

My
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uncle
, Oliver, is a professor of our local
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college and
he is quite popular in our town. Not that he is a
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national
celebrity,
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but
he is
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very
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famous
in our
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area and
I am proud of being his nephew.
Instead
of talking about a
nationally
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famous
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person
, I would prefer to talk about my
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uncle
. He is my
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favourite
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uncle
and I like him for his amiable
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behaviours
and talent. He is a kind-hearted and benevolent
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man
who is around 45 years
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old
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now
. Since he is my father’s
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only
brother and was
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very
close to us, I
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him my whole life.
Personally
, I am quite attached to this
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uncle and
we
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often
play chess together or enjoy movies in a
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theatre
. As far as I recall, he has always been
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famous
in our town. He
is known
to his student as a talented math professor, to his colleagues he is an excellent
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person
, to us, he is a great mentor and to others, he is a helpful and kind
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person
.
However
, his fame extended beyond our city area for his
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achievement
of a
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national
award as the best math book writer. His book is
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used
in grade seven as a
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national
textbook and this single
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achievement
has made him
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famous
among
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many
literary and educated societies in the country.
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He was once been in the headline of
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many
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national
daily newspapers which I
still
remember
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very
clearly
. As far as I
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know
, he is
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kind of an
introvert and not after fame or popularity. He has
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very
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little
interest in money or personal
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achievements
. I had
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many
long discussions with him and I have
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come
to the decision that he leads an exemplary
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life and
he is quite a happy
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person
. Like
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many
other
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famous
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people
, he has no desire for personal
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achievements
and his
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good
deeds and talent have earned him respects and popularity. When
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people
find out that I am his nephew they treat me
differently
and this single aspect
clearly
demonstrates how popular and respected he
really
is.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe someone you know who is famous. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
378 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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