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Describe a time when you got into trouble. v.1

Describe a time when you got into trouble. v. 1
Describe a time when you got into trouble. Please say: what it was how you got into it how you handled it and explain how you felt about it. Sample Answer 1: Well, getting into trouble and then surviving from the trouble is a basic human characteristic. I usually avoid chaos or trouble and that’s why I do not have to face a lot of them. However, I was in a great trouble when I was 11 years old and this event still gives me the nightmare. It was probably 1999 when I went to visit my grandparents in (…village name…) with my parents. It was a very remote area and we had to travel for more than 11 hours to reach there. I lived with my parents in (…town/ city name…) but most of my uncles and their families lived in the village. As this was a joint family, I had so many cousins and I loved to visit this countryside for that. My parents were busy on a hot summer day during our stay there and I got the chance the play with my cousins. We played several games and got quite tired and then all of a sudden one of my cousins proposed that we should all go to the river and swim. I was bit confused as I did not know how to swim. However, one of my cousins convinced me that I should always stay near them and should not try to go further in the river by any means. We did not inform anyone and four of us walked for about 20 minutes to reach the river bank. It was a summer noon and the river looked very placid to me. I went down the river and was trying to stay as near to the land as possible. However, my cousins were all swimming and were having fun. I do not know how but all of a sudden I felt that I was in deep water and two of my cousins were trying to pull me back. I remember that I was struggling a lot to get closer to them but the sudden waves were forcing me far deeper. That time I was quite frightened and was shouting for help. Two of my cousins went to get some help and luckily two adults came to the rescue. I would say these two good-natured unknown people saved my life that day. I was too young and too intimidated to handle the situation myself. I would say I got lucky that day. It’s quite tough to explain how I actually felt that day. I was frightened and was completely taken aback by the surprise trouble. It was surely a near-death experience and even though I am a good swimmer now, I remain very cautious whenever I get into the water.
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Describe
a time when you
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got
into
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trouble
.
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Please
say: what it was how you
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got
into it how you handled it and
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explain
how you felt about it. Sample Answer 1:

Well
, getting into
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trouble
and then surviving from the
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trouble
is a basic human characteristic. I
usually
avoid chaos or
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trouble
and that’s why I do not
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have to
face
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a lot of
them.
However
, I was in a great
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trouble
when I was 11 years
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old
and this
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event
still
gives me the nightmare. It was
probably
1999 when I went to visit my grandparents in (…village name…) with my parents. It was a
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very
remote
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area and
we had to travel for more than 11 hours to reach there. I
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lived
with my parents in (…town/ city name…)
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but
most of my uncles and their families
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lived
in the village. As this was a joint family, I had
so
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many
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cousins
and I
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loved
to visit this countryside for that. My parents were busy on a hot summer day during our stay there and I
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got
the chance the play with my
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cousins
. We played several games and
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got
quite tired and then all of a sudden one of my
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cousins
proposed that we should all go to the
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river
and swim. I was
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bit
confused as I did not know how to swim.
However
, one of my
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cousins
convinced me that I should always stay near them and should not try to go
further
in the
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river
by any means. We did not inform anyone and four of us walked for about 20 minutes to reach the
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river
bank. It was a summer noon and the
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river
looked
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very
placid to me. I went down the
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river
and was trying to stay as near to the land as possible.
However
, my
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cousins
were all swimming and were having fun. I do not know how
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but
all of a sudden I felt that I was in deep water and two of my
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cousins
were trying to pull me back. I remember that I was struggling a lot to
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get
closer to them
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but
the sudden waves were forcing me far deeper. That time I was quite frightened and was shouting for
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help
. Two of my
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cousins
went to
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get
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some
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help
and luckily two adults came to the rescue. I would say these two
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good
-natured unknown
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people
saved my life that day. I was too young and too intimidated to handle the situation myself.
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I
would say I
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got
lucky that day. It’s quite tough to
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explain
how I
actually
felt that day. I
was frightened
and was completely taken aback by the surprise
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trouble
. It was
surely
a near-death experience and
even though
I am a
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good
swimmer
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now
, I remain
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very
cautious whenever I
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get
into the water.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a time when you got into trouble. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
474 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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