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Describe someone or something that makes a lot of noise. v.1

Describe someone or something that makes a lot of noise. v. 1
Describe someone or something that makes a lot of noise. You should say: who or what makes the noise what the noise is like why that thing or person makes the noise and explain how you feel about it. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: I am not sure if living nearby the main road has its advantage, but it sure has a major disadvantage, and that distance is to deal with noise – a lot of noise – on a regular basis. So, I guess that I will go ahead today and talk about the noise of the traffic on the road near the place where I live. Anyway, I guess that in today’s world, there aren’t too many people who don’t know about traffic noise, especially, if they live in the cities. And, we all know how busy the city roads and streets can become, with hundreds of vehicles running on them every minute and making some unbearable noises. These noises are mainly created from the traction of the road surfaces by tires, loud sounds of engine/transmission, aerodynamic noises (noises that result from the flow of air and vibration), horns, and braking elements. However, of all the noises, noises of rolling tires from large vehicles, like buses and trucks, driving on the uneven pavement are found to be the biggest contributor of traffic noise which increases with higher vehicle speeds. These traffic noises are bad and harmful enough to cause sleep problems, tiredness, headaches, high blood pressure, hormonal effects, stress and increased risk of heart disease.   Anyway, the traffic noise is usually unpleasant and inconvenient as they distract us and confuse us. But, no matter how unpleasant and inconvenient the traffic noises really are, we can’t really get rid of them at will because it’s the very sound of motion energy, created by the fuel and engine, without which, no vehicles would run on the road. Anyway, I have a lot of negative feelings about this traffic noise, but the most frustrating about this traffic noise is that I feel very helpless against it, simply because I feel like this traffic noise is inevitable and a fact of life which we will have to live with as long as we are living in a city. Even more frustrating for me is the fact that we all more or less know what this traffic noise does to our health, but still, we are doing almost nothing about it.
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Describe
someone or something that
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makes
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a lot of
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noise
. You should say: who or what
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makes
the
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noise
what the
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noise
is like why that thing or person
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makes
the
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noise
and
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explain
how you feel about it. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
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Model Answer:

I am not sure if living nearby the main
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road
has its advantage,
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but
it sure has a major disadvantage, and that distance is to deal with
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noise
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–
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a lot of
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noise
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
on a regular basis.
So
,
I guess
that I will go ahead
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today
and talk about the
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noise
of the
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traffic
on the
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road
near the place where I
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live
.

Anyway
,
I guess
that in
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today
’s world, there aren’t
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too
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many
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people
who don’t know about
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traffic
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noise
,
especially
, if they
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live
in the cities. And, we all know how busy the city
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roads
and streets can become, with hundreds of
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vehicles
running on them every minute and making
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some
unbearable
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noises
. These
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noises
are
mainly
created from the traction of the
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road
surfaces by tires, loud sounds of engine/transmission, aerodynamic
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noises
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(noises
that result from the flow of air and vibration), horns, and braking elements.
However
, of all the
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noises
,
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noises
of rolling tires from large
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vehicles
, like buses and trucks, driving on the uneven pavement
are found
to be the biggest contributor of
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traffic
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noise
which increases with higher
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vehicle
speeds.

These
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traffic
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noises
are
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bad
and harmful
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enough
to cause sleep problems, tiredness, headaches, high blood pressure, hormonal effects,
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stress
and increased
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risk
of heart disease.
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Anyway
, the
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traffic
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noise
is
usually
unpleasant and inconvenient as they distract us and confuse us.
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But
, no matter how unpleasant and inconvenient the
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traffic
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noises
really
are, we can’t
really
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get
rid of them at will
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because
it’s the
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very
sound of motion energy, created by the fuel and engine, without which, no
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vehicles
would run on the road.

Anyway
, I have
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a lot of
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negative
feelings about this
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traffic
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noise
,
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but
the most frustrating about this
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traffic
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noise
is that I feel
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very
helpless against it,
simply
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because
I feel like this
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traffic
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noise
is inevitable and a fact of life which we will
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have to
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live
with as long as we are living in a city. Even more frustrating for me is the fact that we all more or less know what this
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traffic
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noise
does to our health,
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but
still
, we are doing almost nothing about it.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
One should not aim at being possible to understand but at being impossible to misunderstand.
Marcus Fabius Quintilian

IELTS speaking Describe someone or something that makes a lot of noise. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
445 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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