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Describe a person who has apologized to you. v.1

Describe a person who has apologized to you. v. 1
Describe a person who has apologized to you. You should say: when it was who the person was why this person apologised to you and explain how you felt about it. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: People make mistake. But, the burden of such mistakes doesn’t weigh too much on the mistaking persons if they sincerely apologize to the affected persons. Today, I would like to talk about one of those sincere persons who apologized to me about a few months ago. He was a Cashier of a super shop – a super shop which I have been visiting quite frequently for the last couple of years or so. But, the cashier, I am talking about, was a newcomer since I saw him for the first time on that day eventful day when I bought a lot of groceries. In fact, that new cashier checked me out on that day. However, interestingly, when I made the payment to the cashier, I felt like I was paying little extra than what I normally used to pay for roughly the same quantity of merchandises on the previous occasions. But, I chose to keep quiet, thinking that perhaps I bought some additional merchandise items, or the prices of some of the grocery items had changed. So, I just took my grocery and left the shop. But, after reaching my home, I became a bit too curious and checked the prices of my grocery items. Suddenly, I noticed that one of the merchandises was over-priced on the receipt which was handed to me by the cashier before leaving his shop. Luckily, the super shop was not far away from my home. So, I went back to the cashier the next day in a relaxed mood and told him about the wrong price, he charged me for one of my grocery items. After learning his mistake, he immediately apologized to me very sincerely, telling me that he had just started his new job on that day. Anyway, to be honest, I wasn’t exactly expecting him to apologize to me like that since it was not such a big deal to me. Besides, I knew it very well that this kind of mistake could happen, especially, by a person who was new at his job. Nevertheless, I felt glad that he actually apologized to me.
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Describe
a
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person
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who
has
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apologized
to you. You should say: when it was
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who
the
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person
was why this
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person
Do not mix variants of the same word ('apologise' and 'apologize') within a single text.
apologised
to you and
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explain
how you felt about it. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
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Model Answer:

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People
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make
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mistake
.
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But
, the burden of such
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mistakes
doesn’t weigh too much on the mistaking
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persons
if they
sincerely
apologize to the
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affected
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persons
.
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Today
, I would like to talk about one of those sincere
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persons
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who
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apologized
to me about a few months ago.

He was a
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Cashier
of a super
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shop
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
a super
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shop
which I have been visiting quite
frequently
for the last couple of years or
so
.
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But
, the
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cashier
, I am talking about, was a newcomer since I
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saw
him for the
first
time on that day eventful day when I
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bought
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a lot of
groceries. In fact, that new
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cashier
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checked
me out on that day.
However
,
interestingly
, when I made the payment to the
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cashier
, I felt like I was paying
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little
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extra
than what I
normally
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used
to pay for roughly the same quantity of merchandises on the previous occasions.
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But
, I chose to
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keep
quiet, thinking that perhaps I
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bought
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some
additional merchandise
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items
, or the prices of
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some of the
grocery
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items
had
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changed
.
So
, I
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just
took my grocery and
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left
the shop.

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But
, after reaching my home, I became a bit too curious and
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checked
the prices of my grocery
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items
.
Suddenly
, I noticed that one of the merchandises was over-priced on the receipt which
was handed
to me by the
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cashier
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before
leaving his
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shop
. Luckily, the super
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shop
was not far away from my home.
So
, I went back to the
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cashier
the
next
day in a relaxed mood and
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told
him about the
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wrong
price, he charged me for one of my grocery
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items
. After learning his
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mistake
, he immediately
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apologized
to me
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very
sincerely
, telling me that he had
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just
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started
his new job on that day.

Anyway
, to be honest, I wasn’t exactly expecting him to apologize to me like that since it was not such a
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big
deal to me.
Besides
, I knew it
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very
well
that this kind of
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mistake
could happen,
especially
, by a
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person
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who
was new at his job.
Nevertheless
, I felt glad that he
actually
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apologized
to me.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a person who has apologized to you. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
425 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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