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Describe something that makes you excited and happy. v.1

Describe something that makes you excited and happy. v. 1
Describe something that makes you excited and happy. You should say: what it is how you feel excited and happy about it how often you do it and explain why this makes you excited and happy.   Model Answer 1: I am actually a simple guy, so it doesn’t really take much for me to feel happy or excited whether I am reading a story teller or just going to eat some nice meal at a good restaurant. But, today, I would like to talk about a thing which, I think, makes me happier than anything else. This thing, I am talking about, is travelling. Yes, I just love travelling. In fact, I just wish that I had a lot of money so that I could travel all of my life. But, unfortunately, I have to work to earn my living and on top of that, I am not a rich person either. So, that means I have to plan well in advance in order to save up some money for doing some travelling. Of course, it is not that I want to travel every place that I learn about after reading about them on some books or by watching different kinds of travel-related programmes on TV, but rather I like to travel only those places that are absolutely unique and different from other places. However, the funny thing is that it is actually the anticipation of travelling to a new place which makes me happier rather than actually visiting the place, probably because once I visit that place, the excitement will just simply vanish away. But, still, I like to travel as often as I can, especially, when I get the yearly vacation from my work. So, I guess that visiting more than once a year is something I can hardly afford. Anyway, travelling makes me happy, mainly because it allows me to become familiar with the different kinds of cultures and lifestyles of different kinds of people. Besides, it also allows me to develop an appreciation for people, who are different from me, while also allowing me to find some better career opportunities. Finally, it makes me happy and excited because travelling allows me to extend my hands of friendship to other people who I have never met before. After all, who don’t like to make new friends and learn about new things?   Sample Answer 2: Playing computer games, especially strategy games make me excited and happy. This might sound a bit odd but I often find a great deal of excitement playing computer games with my friends over the computer network. I do not play computer games that much nowadays. But in my college and university years, I often played computer games with my friends after the semester end. This was great excitement for me and still, it is exciting to me. I usually play computer games once a month when my and my friends' schedule matches. Playing strategy games is exciting by it’s the activities it involves and by the completion a gamer has to face. The gamer is the ultimate controller of the gaming characters and fighting, bloodsheds, cultivation, collecting resources in a virtual world gives me a feeling of controlling and leading a whole nation. Since we play in a network, there is a great competition among the friends to build an empire and then to fight hard to survive. By its very nature, computer games, especially strategy games, are exciting.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe an unusual or exciting thing you did recently.   Describe an activity you enjoy doing.   Describe something that you are passionate about.   Describe your favourite past time. Describe an exciting experience you have.
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Describe
something that
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makes
you
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excited
and
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happy
. You should say: what it is how you feel
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excited
and
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happy
about it how
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often
you do it and
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explain
why this
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makes
you
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excited
and
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happy
.
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Model Answer 1:

I am
actually
a simple guy,
so
it doesn’t
really
take much for me to feel
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happy
or
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excited
whether I am reading a
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story teller
or
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just
going to eat
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some
nice meal at a
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good
restaurant.
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But
,
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today
, I would like to talk about a thing which, I
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think
,
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makes
me happier than anything else.

This thing, I am talking about, is
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travelling
. Yes, I
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just
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love
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travelling
. In fact, I
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just
wish that I had
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a lot of
money
so
that I could
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travel
all of my life.
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But
, unfortunately, I
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have to
work to earn my living and
on top of that
, I am not a rich person either.
So
, that means I
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have to
plan
well
in advance in order to save up
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some
money for doing
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some
travelling.

Of course
, it is not that I want to
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travel
every
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place
that I learn about after reading about them on
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some
books or by watching
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different
kinds of travel-related
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programmes
on TV,
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but
rather
I like to
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travel
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only
those
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places
that are
absolutely
unique and
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different
from other
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places
.
However
, the
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funny
thing is that it is
actually
the anticipation of
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travelling
to a new
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place
which
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makes
me happier
rather
than
actually
visiting the
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place
,
probably
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because
once I visit that
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place
, the excitement will
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just
simply
vanish away.
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But
,
still
, I like to
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travel
as
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often
as I can,
especially
, when I
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get
the yearly vacation from my work.
So
,
I guess
that visiting more than once a year is something I can hardly afford.

Anyway
,
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travelling
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makes
me
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happy
,
mainly
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because
it
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allows
me to become familiar with the
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different
kinds of cultures and lifestyles of
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different
kinds of
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people
.
Besides
, it
also
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allows
me to develop an appreciation for
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people
, who are
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different
from me, while
also
allowing me to find
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some
better career opportunities.
Finally
, it
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makes
me
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happy
and
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excited
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because
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travelling
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allows
me to extend my hands of friendship to other
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people
who I have never met
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before
.
After all
, who don’t like to
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make
new
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friends
and learn about new things?
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Sample Answer 2:

Playing computer
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games
,
especially
strategy
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games
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make
me
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excited
and
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happy
. This might sound a bit odd
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but
I
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often
find a great deal of excitement playing computer
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games
with my
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friends
over the computer network. I do not play computer
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games
that much nowadays.
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But
in my college and university years, I
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often
played computer
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games
with my
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friends
after the semester
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end
. This was great excitement for me and
still
, it is
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exciting
to me. I
usually
play computer
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games
once a month when my and my friends' schedule matches.

Playing strategy
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games
is
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exciting
by
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it’s
the activities it involves and by the completion a gamer
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has to
face. The gamer is the ultimate controller of the gaming characters and fighting,
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bloodsheds
, cultivation, collecting resources in a virtual world gives me a feeling of controlling and leading a whole nation. Since we play in a network, there is a great competition among the
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friends
to build an empire and then to fight
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hard
to survive. By its
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very
nature, computer
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games
,
especially
strategy
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games
, are
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exciting
.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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Describe
an unusual or
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exciting
thing you did recently.
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You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
an activity you enjoy doing.
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You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
something that you are passionate about.
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Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
your
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favourite
Did you mean "pastime"?
past time
.
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Describe
an
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exciting
experience you have.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
69Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe something that makes you excited and happy. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
7 paragraphs
639 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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