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Describe something you often do in the evening. v.1

Describe something you often do in the evening. v. 1
Describe something you often do in the evening. You should say: what you do why you do it who you usually do it with and explain why you enjoy doing it often.   Model Answer 1: The "evening" is a rather precious time for me. In fact, it is in short supply in my schedule, mainly because I spend most of my evening times at work. But, still, whenever I get a free evening, I try to enjoy it to the fullest, either by watching some TV with my family or going out with some friends at a coffee shop. But, if I compare watching TV with hitting a coffee shop, I would say that I enjoy watching TV more often in the evening than hitting a coffee shop. I think that everybody knows that TV these days airs a lot of interesting kinds of programmes throughout the whole day and night, especially, if someone has the satellite or cable televisions. All one needs to do is to find the programmes of his or her choice, which are aired at a time, when the person is not occupied with any other things or tasks and just keep watching them until he or she gets tired. I am not sure about other homes, but my TV offers me the opportunity to try more than 100 TV channels to find my favourite programmes. By the way, the programmes, I enjoy watching, are mostly funny and comedy types unless, of course, there are some serious types of educational programmes which involve some invention or discovery at the space or some other unknown planets.   By the way, I like to watch TV with all of my family members while also joking with them and enjoying some of our favourite snacks or drinks at the same time. Anyway, I enjoy watching TV as often as I can during the evening because it helps me unwind greatly after spending a long and eventful day at my work. I like to do it often also because it allows me to spend some quality time with my family members, which help us all build a stronger bond and loving relationship among ourselves. Finally, I like to do it also because some of the TV programmes are very educational that stimulate my brain, unlike any other things.   Model Answer 2: I work in a private company where I have to work from 8 am to 5 pm, and most of my evenings are spent on my way back home. Sometimes the traffic is bad and I have to be on the car in the evening time and after I reach home the night falls. I used to walk or play in the evening or visit my friends during my university years but the current works at office and schedule do not permit me to do any particular activity in the evening. However, I have two days off in a week and those two days are different than the rest of the days and in the evening I go out walking or running as part of refreshment and exercise.   So walking and running in the evening is the activity I often do and usually, I do it alone. I wear running trousers and sneakers which are comfortable for running and put on my headphone so that I can enjoy the music while walking. I start right from my home and usually go to open places or parks to walk or run. There is no particular place where I go to but mostly I go to one of the nearby parks which are surrounded by natural scenes. I found some other people come to do the exercise and to run in the park. I have two major reasons for this evening activity: first, it is a good exercise and second, it is refreshing. I enjoy this evening walking and running and think it is a good thing for me.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would also enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe an activity you have. Describe an outdoor activity you have. Describe a place where you often go to. Describe something you often do.
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Describe
something you
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often
do in the evening. You should say: what you do why you do it who you
usually
do it with and
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explain
why you
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enjoy
doing it
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often
.
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Model Answer 1:

The
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"
evening
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is a
rather
precious
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time
for me. In fact, it is in short supply in my schedule,
mainly
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because
I spend most of my evening
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times
at
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work
.
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But
,
still
, whenever I
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get
a free evening, I try to
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enjoy
it to the fullest, either by watching
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some
TV with my family or going out with
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some
friends at a coffee shop.

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But
, if I compare watching TV with hitting a coffee shop, I would say that I
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enjoy
watching TV more
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often
in the evening than hitting a coffee shop. I
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think
that everybody knows that TV these days airs
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a lot of
interesting kinds of
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programmes
throughout the whole day and night,
especially
, if someone has the satellite or cable televisions. All one needs to do is to find the
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programmes
of
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his or her
choice, which
are aired
at a
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time
, when the person is not occupied with any
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other
things or tasks and
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just
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keep
watching them until he or she
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gets
tired.

I am not sure about
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other
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homes
,
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but
my TV offers me the opportunity to try more than 100 TV channels to find my
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favourite
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programmes
. By the way, the
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programmes
, I
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enjoy
watching, are
mostly
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funny
and comedy types unless,
of course
, there are
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some
serious types of educational
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programmes
which involve
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some
invention or discovery at the space or
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some
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other
unknown planets.
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By the way, I like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
TV with all of my family members while
also
joking with them and enjoying
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some
of our
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favourite
snacks or drinks at the same time.

Anyway
, I
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enjoy
watching TV as
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often
as I can during the evening
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because
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
me unwind
greatly
after spending a long and eventful day at my
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work
. I like to do it
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often
also
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because
it
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allows
me to spend
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some
quality
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time
with my family members, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us all build a stronger bond and loving relationship among ourselves.
Finally
, I like to do it
also
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because
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
TV
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programmes
are
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very
educational that stimulate my brain, unlike any
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other
things.
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Model Answer 2:

I
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work
in a private
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company
where I
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have to
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work
from 8 am to 5 pm, and most of my evenings
are spent
on my way back home.
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Sometimes
the traffic is
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bad
and I
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have to
be on the car in the evening
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time
and after I reach home the night falls. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to walk or play in the evening or visit my friends during my university years
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but
the
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current
works at office and schedule do not permit me to do any particular
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activity
in the evening.
However
, I have two days off in a week and those two days are
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different
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than
the rest of the days and in the evening I go out walking or
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running
as part of refreshment and exercise.
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So
walking and
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running
in the evening is the
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activity
I
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often
do and
usually
, I do it alone. I wear
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running
trousers and sneakers which are comfortable for
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running
and put on my headphone
so
that I can
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enjoy
the music while walking. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
right
from my home and
usually
go to open places or parks to walk or run. There is no particular place where I go to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
mostly
I go to one of the nearby parks which
are surrounded
by natural scenes. I found
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some
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other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
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come
to do the exercise and to run in the park. I have two major reasons for this evening
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activity
:
first
, it is a
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good
exercise and second, it is refreshing.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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enjoy
this evening walking and
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running
and
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think
it is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
thing for me.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would
also
enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activity
you have.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
an outdoor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activity
you have.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
a place where you
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
often
go to.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
something you
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
often
do.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe something you often do in the evening. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
713 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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