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Describe one of your relatives whom you like. v.1

Describe one of your relatives whom you like. v. 1
Describe one of your relatives whom you like. You should say: who the relative is and how close you are to him/her what makes you like him/her what you usually do together and explain why you like this particular relative of yours.   Model Answer 1: I am lucky to have several relatives, whom I happen to like because all of them have helped me become the person I am today, in one way or another. However, today, I would like to specifically mention one of them here, who is a bit more close to me than some of my other relatives. His name is Ebad Ali, and he is a distant cousin of mine, even though I am not too sure that I should actually use the qualifying adverb “distant”, given the type of close relationship, we enjoy with each other. Anyway, Ebad is almost the same age as me, and we grew up together for a significant part of our childhood, when we did a lot of things together, from watching cartoons and children’s movies to chasing a duck into a lake. However, during our high school years, we parted away from each other because my father had to move to a different place for professional reasons. Gladly, we are back again at the place because Ebad got a great job in the same city where I live. In fact, now we try to enjoy our life the same way as we used to do when we were children. Of course, now we don’t chase ducks or watch cartoons anymore like the old days. Instead, we go to a movie theatre to enjoy a great movie or hit a nearby lake in order to swim during the summer. We also go to our favourite cafe every week to enjoy some fresh coffee and snacks. Ebad and I are very close to each other – close enough to even exchange our shirts. Anyway, I like Ebad for many reasons, but his positive attitude towards life is what makes me like him the most. To conclude, I like Ebad because there are very few people in this world, except my parents, who understands me as better as him. I like Ebad also because he is a very resourceful and happy person, and he seems to have solutions for everything.
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Describe
one of your
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relatives
whom you like. You should say: who the
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relative
is and how
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close
you are to him/her what
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makes
you like him/her what you
usually
do together and
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explain
why you like this particular
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relative
of yours.
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Model Answer 1: I am lucky to have several
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relatives
, whom I happen to like
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because
all of them have
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helped
me become the person I am
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today
, in one way or another.
However
,
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today
, I would like to
specifically
mention one of them here, who is a bit more
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close
to me than
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some
of my
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other
relatives.

His name is
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Ebad
Ali, and he is a distant cousin of mine,
even though
I am not
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too sure
that I should
actually
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use
the qualifying adverb “distant”,
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given
the type of
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close
relationship, we
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enjoy
with each
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other
.
Anyway
,
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Ebad
is almost the same age as me, and we grew up together for a significant part of our childhood, when we did
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a lot of
things together, from watching cartoons and children’s movies to chasing a duck into a lake.
However
, during our high school years, we parted away from each
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other
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because
my father had to
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move
to a
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different
place for professional reasons.

Gladly
, we are back again at the place
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because
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Ebad
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got
a great job in the same city where I
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live
. In fact,
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now
we try to
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enjoy
our life the same way as we
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used
to do when we were children.
Of course
,
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now
we don’t chase ducks or
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watch
cartoons
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anymore
like the
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old
days.
Instead
, we go to a movie
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theatre
to
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enjoy
a great movie or hit a nearby lake in order to swim during the summer. We
also
go to our
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favourite
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
every week to
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enjoy
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some
fresh coffee and snacks.
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Ebad
and I are
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very
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close
to each
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other
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–
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close
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enough
to even exchange our shirts.
Anyway
, I like
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Ebad
for
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many
reasons,
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but
his
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positive
attitude towards life is what
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makes
me like him the most.

To conclude
, I like
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Ebad
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because
there are
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very
few
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people
in this world, except my parents, who understands me as
Did you mean "good"?
better
as him. I like
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Ebad
also
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because
he is a
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very
resourceful and happy person, and he seems to have solutions for everything.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe one of your relatives whom you like. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
389 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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