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Describe a place where you like to go to often. v.1

Describe a place where you like to go to often. v. 1
Describe a place where you like to go to often. You should say: where the place is how you get there what it looks like and explain why you like this place and often go there.   Model Answer 1: I like to go to many different places depending on my mood. Today, however, I’m going to tell you about a special place near to where I live. I will explain where it is and how I get there. I will try and describe what it looks like and explain why I like the location so much. I am lucky, although I live in a city, from my house I can walk to the edges of the Peak District, which is a beautiful national park just a few miles from the city centre. To get to the national park I have to walk from my house down some local roads, and up a steep hill past some allotments. After about a mile or so striding out away from the urban areas, I get to a lovely bit of woodland which has a public footpath you can follow onwards and upwards. It can be a bit of a scramble towards the end of the path as it is very steep indeed, but eventually, you leave the woodland and are on the edge of open farmland. Another footpath crosses some sheep-filled fields, and finally, you are on the moors of the Peak District. It is really spectacular. The Peak District can be a really wild place, with its vast expanses of open moorland. You are high up, and it is quite exposed so it can be very windy and cold even in the summer. There are rocky outcrops and strange configurations of stones that have been weathered by centuries of wind and rain to create dramatic shapes. Some boulders are in piles, and there are steep vertical cliffs too. The area attracts lots of people who like walking, climbing and bouldering because of its unique and beautiful landscape. Everywhere is dark wet peat underfoot and lots of heathers. This is a low growing plant that flowers at the end of the summer turning the whole landscape purple. The park covers a huge area, I think around 555 square miles, so the terrain differs from area to area, of course, I am biased, but I believe I live near the most remarkably beautiful part. I love this place because if ever I am feeling down, or a bit enclosed, in just an hours walk I can find myself in a deserted but picturesque place, where the elements are more extreme. In winter rain and wind can batter you, but in summer the sky seems to go on forever. Every day is different up there, and every hour of every day too. The area is so huge, that often you can have it all to yourself, of course, there are other walkers about, but you can quickly disappear in the vastness of the space. The people who live in Sheffield, like me, are very proud that we are so near to the Peak District National Park, and it is no surprise it became the United Kingdom's first national park on 17 April 1951. A birthday that should be celebrated I think! [ Written by - Lucy Marris: Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]   Model Answer 2: I am not really a very outgoing person. Therefore, I don’t exactly like to go to many places, unless I have a very valid reason to do so, especially, if I have to travel to a distant place. However, one distant place, which I really like to visit often, is my grandparent’s house. Now, I don’t really know many people who dislike going to their grandparent’s house, but I think that I like it a bit more than most others because I grew up there. As I have just mentioned, my grandparent’s house is a long-distance trip from where I live. In fact, I need to travel about 12/14 hours by train, but a bit longer if I travel by bus. But, whether I travel by bus or train, the excitement is the same, especially, as soon as, I leave the city vicinity, in which, I live. Anyway, my grandparents live in beautiful countryside which is not even remotely as crowded as the city, in which, I live. Like many other countrysides, it also has many beautiful trees and a number of big green valleys. The place also has a lot of fertile farmlands where the farmers cultivate and grow different kinds of crops throughout the year. If anyone roams around my grandparent’s place, he or she will get to see some beautiful ponds and lakes, from which, water is being channelled through the drain in order to irrigate the farmlands around them. By the way, there aren’t many paved streets at my grandparent’s place, but it is modern enough to have many shops and retail stores in it, from where people can buy different kinds of things to meet their daily needs. Anyway, I like my grandparent’s place and often visit there because it is very peaceful and quiet. Besides, the natural love and compassion of my relatives there are just too good to miss. The natural beauty of this place, along with the clear view of its blue sky without getting blocked by some high rising buildings, is also something that keeps drawing me close to my grandparent’s place.
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Describe
a
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place
where you like to go to
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often
. You should say: where the
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is how you
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get
there what it looks like and
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explain
why you like this
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place
and
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often
go there.
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Model Answer 1: I like to go to
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many
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different
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places
depending on my mood.
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Today
,
however
, I’m going to
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tell
you about a special
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place
near to where I
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live
. I will
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explain
where it is and how I
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get
there. I will
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try and
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describe
what it looks like and
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explain
why I like the location
so
much.
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I
am lucky, although I
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live
in a city, from my
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house
I can walk to the edges of the
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Peak
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District
, which is a
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beautiful
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national
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park
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just
a few miles from the city
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centre
. To
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get
to the
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national
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park
I
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have to
walk from my
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house
down
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some
local roads, and up a steep hill past
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some
allotments. After about a mile or
so
striding out away from the urban
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areas
, I
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get
to a lovely
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bit
of woodland which has a public footpath you can follow onwards and upwards. It can be a
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bit
of a scramble towards the
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end
of the path as it is
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very
steep
indeed
,
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but
eventually
, you
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leave
the woodland and are on the edge of open farmland. Another footpath crosses
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some
sheep-filled fields, and
finally
, you are on the moors of the
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Peak
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District
. It is
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really
spectacular. The
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Peak
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District
can be a
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really
wild
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place
, with its vast expanses of open moorland. You are high up, and it is quite exposed
so
it can be
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very
windy and
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cold
even in the summer. There are rocky outcrops and strange configurations of stones that have
been weathered
by centuries of wind and rain to create dramatic shapes.
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Some
boulders are in piles, and there are steep vertical cliffs too. The
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area
attracts lots of
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people
who like walking, climbing and bouldering
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because
of its unique and
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beautiful
landscape. Everywhere is dark wet peat underfoot and lots of
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heathers
. This is a low growing plant that flowers at the
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end
of the summer turning the whole landscape purple. The
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park
covers a huge
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area
, I
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think
around 555 square miles,
so
the terrain differs from
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area
to
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area
,
of course
, I
am biased
,
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but
I believe I
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live
near the most
remarkably
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beautiful
part. I
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love
this
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place
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because
if ever I am feeling down, or a
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bit
enclosed, in
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just
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an hours
walk I can find myself in a deserted
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but
picturesque
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place
, where the elements are more extreme. In winter rain and wind can batter you,
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but
in summer the sky seems to go on forever. Every day is
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different
up there, and every hour of every day too. The
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area
is
so
huge, that
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often
you can have it all to yourself,
of course
, there are other walkers about,
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but
you can
quickly
disappear in the vastness of the space. The
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people
who
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live
in Sheffield, like me, are
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very
proud that we are
so
near to the
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Peak
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District
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National
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Park
, and it is no surprise it became the United Kingdom's
first
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national
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park
on 17 April 1951. A birthday that should
be celebrated
I
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think
!
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[
Written by
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-
Lucy
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Marris
: Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
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]
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Model Answer 2: I am not
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really
a
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very
outgoing person.
Therefore
, I don’t exactly like to go to
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many
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places
, unless I have a
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very
valid reason to do
so
,
especially
, if I
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have to
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travel
to a distant
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place
.
However
, one distant
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place
, which I
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really
like to visit
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often
, is my
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grandparent’s
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house
.

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Now
, I don’t
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really
know
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many
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people
who dislike going to their
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grandparent’s
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house
,
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but
I
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think
that I like it a
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bit
more than most others
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because
I grew up there. As I have
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just
mentioned, my
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grandparent’s
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house
is a long-distance trip from where I
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live
. In fact, I need to
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travel
about 12/14 hours by train,
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but
a
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bit
longer if I
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travel
by bus.
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But
, whether I
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travel
by bus or train, the excitement is the same,
especially
, as
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soon
as, I
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leave
the city vicinity, in which, I
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live
.

Anyway
, my
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grandparents
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live
in
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beautiful
countryside which is not even
remotely
as crowded as the city, in which, I
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live
. Like
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many
other countrysides, it
also
has
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many
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beautiful
trees and a number of
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big
green valleys. The
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place
also
has
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a lot of
fertile farmlands where the farmers cultivate and grow
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different
kinds of crops throughout the year. If anyone roams around my
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grandparent’s
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place
, he or she will
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get
to
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see
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some
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beautiful
ponds and lakes, from which, water is
being channelled
through the drain in order to irrigate
Consider using "the surrounding farmlands".
the farmlands around them
. By the way, there aren’t
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many
paved streets at my
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grandparent’s
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place
,
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but
it is modern
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enough
to have
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many
shops and retail stores in it, from where
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people
can
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buy
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different
kinds of things to
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meet
their daily needs.

Anyway
, I like my
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grandparent’s
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place
and
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often
visit there
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because
it is
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very
peaceful and quiet.
Besides
, the natural
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love
and compassion of my relatives there are
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just
too
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good
to miss. The natural beauty of this
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place
, along with the
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clear
view of its blue sky without getting blocked by
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some
high rising buildings, is
also
something that
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keeps
drawing me close to my
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grandparent’s
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place
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
92Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a place where you like to go to often. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
915 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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