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Describe a holiday you have recently celebrated. v.1

Describe a holiday you have recently celebrated. v. 1
Describe a holiday you have recently celebrated. You should say: what holiday it was how you celebrated it who was with you and explain why celebrating this holiday was important to you. Model Answer 1: Talking about holidays is one of my favourite subjects because it usually carries some fun and memorable experiences. In fact, some of these fun and great experiences are still very much fresh in my memory, as I have recently celebrated an important holiday, which I want to talk about in a moment. The holiday, I want to talk about, was one of the important national holidays of Bangladesh, celebrated in order to mark the beginning of a new Bengali calendar year, which is, of course, different from the new English or Gregorian calendar year. This time, the holiday was marked on 14th of April, and all the offices, schools, banks and other important establishments of my county remained closed on that day. This holiday coincides with one of the major harvesting periods of my country and celebrated in order to carry forward our Bengali cultural heritage, and its pride, with a festive mood all over my country.   Anyway, the holiday is marked with singing, processions, and fairs. Traditionally, businesses start this day with a new ledger, clearing out the old one. Singers perform traditional songs welcoming the New Year. People enjoy classical “theatrical” plays and performances, and they also wear festive dresses, with women, decorating their hair with flowers especially. People of Bangladesh prepare and enjoy varieties of traditional festive food during this holiday which may include "panta bhat" (watered rice), "ilish bhaji" (fried Hilsa fish) and lots of special "bhartas" (mashed vegetables and fishes). I also enjoyed this great holiday with some of my friends by attending a fair, visiting some of my relatives, as well as by eating some traditional food items at one of my favourite restaurants of my hometown. Anyway, this holiday was important to me because it allowed me to visit some of my dear friends and relatives whom I haven’t met in a long time. Besides, it also allowed me to recover from the fatigue of a busy working life, by helping me enjoy my time in the company of my family and friends, which was well overdue.
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Describe
a
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holiday
you have recently celebrated. You should say: what
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it was how you celebrated it who was with you and
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explain
why celebrating this
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was
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important
to you.

Model Answer 1:

Talking about
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holidays
is one of my
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favourite
subjects
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because
it
usually
carries
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some
fun and memorable experiences. In fact,
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some
of these fun and great experiences are
still
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very
much fresh in my memory, as I have recently celebrated an
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important
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holiday
, which I want to talk about in a moment.

The
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holiday
, I want to talk about, was one of the
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important
national
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holidays
of Bangladesh, celebrated in order to mark the beginning of a
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new
Bengali calendar year, which is,
of course
,
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different
from the
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new
English or Gregorian calendar year. This time, the
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holiday
was marked
on 14th of April, and all the offices, schools, banks and other
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important
establishments of my county remained closed on that day.

This
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holiday
coincides with one of the major harvesting periods of my country and celebrated in order to carry forward our Bengali cultural heritage, and its pride, with a festive mood all over my country.
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Anyway
, the
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holiday
is marked
with singing, processions, and fairs.
Traditionally
, businesses
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start
this day with a
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new
ledger, clearing out the
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old
one. Singers perform traditional songs welcoming the
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New
Year.
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People
enjoy classical “theatrical” plays and performances, and they
also
wear festive dresses, with women, decorating their hair with flowers
especially
.

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People
of Bangladesh prepare and enjoy varieties of traditional festive food during this
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holiday
which may include
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panta
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bhat
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"
(watered rice),
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ilish
bhaji
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"
(fried
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Hilsa
fish) and lots of special
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"
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bhartas
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"
(mashed vegetables and fishes). I
also
enjoyed this great
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holiday
with
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some
of my friends by attending a
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fair
, visiting
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some
of my relatives, as
well
as by eating
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some
traditional food items at one of my
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favourite
restaurants of my hometown.

Anyway
, this
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holiday
was
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important
to me
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because
it
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allowed
me to visit
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some
of my dear friends and relatives whom I haven’t met in a long time.
Besides
, it
also
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allowed
me to recover from the fatigue of a busy working life, by helping me enjoy my time in the
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company
of my family and friends, which was
well
overdue.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes
A different language is a different vision of life.
Federico Fellini

IELTS speaking Describe a holiday you have recently celebrated. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
7 paragraphs
380 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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