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Describe a teacher from the past whom you remember. v.1

Describe a teacher from the past whom you remember. v. 1
Describe a teacher from the past whom you remember. You should say: what subject the teacher taught you how old you were then what were some special characteristics of this teacher and explain why you remember this teacher.   Model Answer 1: I have been lucky enough to have several great teachers when growing up as a student, and I remember all of their contributions in helping me become the person I am today. However, I would like to specifically mention about one teacher here today whom I remember a bit more than others. It was about 14 years ago, and I was about a 13 years old high school student – a high school student who hated math. In fact, I found math to be so difficult that I sometimes even pretended to be sick to my parents in order to skip the class. Of course, I had tried all my best to perform better in this difficult subject, but I could get was just a passing score in the test. But, all that changed when Mr Rajon Seikh had joined our high school as a math teacher. By the way, he didn’t look like a very smart person to me to become a math teacher, even though he was quite qualified.   Anyway, Mr Rajon gave us a brief lecture to us about the math lesson, and I must say that I was pretty amazed at his level of confidence. In fact, he assured us that if we all paid attention to his class for only about 30 minutes every day for about 6 months, he would make us the math experts. He also told us that he didn’t come to teach us, but rather he had come to create a mindset in us to learn mathematics easily and quickly. So, his lessons started, and to my pleasant surprise, math suddenly started to make sense to me. In fact, I grew so confident in the next 6 months, I felt like I could actually get a top score in math. Anyway, I remember this teacher because he had all the tricks in his armoury of math teaching in order to arouse interest in the minds of his students quickly. Besides, it was him, who had given me the confidence to do better not only in math but also in other classes.
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Describe
a
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from the past whom you
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remember
. You should say: what subject the
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taught you how
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old
you were then what were
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some
special characteristics of this
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and
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why you
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this
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.
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Model Answer 1: I have been lucky
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enough
to have several great
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teachers
when growing up as a
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student
, and I
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remember
all of their contributions in helping me become the person I am
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today
.
However
, I would like to
specifically
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mention about one
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teacher
here
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today
whom I
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a bit more than others.

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old
high school
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student
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–
a high school
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student
who hated
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math
. In fact, I found
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math
to be
so
difficult that I
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sometimes
even pretended to be sick to my parents in order to skip the
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class
.
Of course
, I had tried all my best to perform better in this difficult subject,
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but
I could
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get
was
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just
a passing score in the
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test
.

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, all that
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changed
when Mr
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Rajon
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Seikh
had
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joined
our high school as a
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math
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teacher
. By the way, he didn’t look like a
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very
smart person to me to become a
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math
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teacher
,
even though
he was quite qualified.
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Anyway
, Mr
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Rajon
gave us a brief lecture to us about the
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math
lesson, and I
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must
say that I was pretty amazed at his level of confidence. In fact, he assured us that if we all paid attention to his
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class
for
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only
about 30 minutes every day for about 6 months, he would
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make
us the
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math
experts. He
also
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told
us that he didn’t
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come
to teach us,
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but
rather
he had
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come
to create a mindset in us to learn mathematics
easily
and
quickly
.

So
, his lessons
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started
, and to my pleasant surprise,
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math
suddenly
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started
to
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make
sense to me. In fact, I grew
so
confident in the
next
6 months, I felt like I could
actually
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get
a top score in math.

Anyway
, I
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remember
this
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teacher
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because
he had all the tricks in his
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armoury
of
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math
teaching in order to arouse interest in the minds of his
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students
quickly
.
Besides
, it was him, who had
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given
me the confidence to do better not
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only
in
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math
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but
also
in other classes.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a teacher from the past whom you remember. v. 1

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  American English
5 paragraphs
393 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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