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Describe an outdoor activity that you haven’t tried yet and would like to do in the future. v.1

Describe an outdoor activity that you haven’t tried yet and would like to do in the future. v. 1
Describe an outdoor activity that you haven’t tried yet and would like to do in the future. You should say: what outdoor activity it is why you have not tried it yet when you plan to do it and explain why you are interested in doing this outdoor activity. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: In this busy and complicated life, I have already tried different kinds of activities, whether they are indoor or outdoor. However, today I would like to talk about one particular outdoor activity, which I haven’t tried yet, but would definitely try in the future.   The name of this outdoor activity is “cycling”. Not sure, when I became fond of “cycling”, but I guess that it might have something to do with Tour de France cycling race back in 2018 which I saw for the first time on TV. Up until I saw that race, I had no idea that “cycling” could actually be such a fun and adventurous activity, which involved riding through some of the most beautiful flat, hilly and mountainous terrains of the world, by employing very impressive physical postures in an artful manner. In fact, when I was following the “Tour de France” race, which started in France and then also venturing into the surrounding countries occasionally, I was struggling to decide whether to pay more attention to cycling race itself or the beautiful terrains on its path. Anyway, I didn’t get to try this nice outdoor activity as yet because I haven’t yet managed to buy a bicycle, which I really like. Besides, I am yet to convince my close friends to join me in “cycling” as I don’t really like to do it alone. Then, of course, managing a suitable time to enjoy this physical activity is also an issue because I remain fairly busy with my work and other priorities. However, I am planning to start working on enjoying this nice outdoor activity this summer which is due in a few months. Anyway, I would like to try this outdoor activity, because it would allow me to free up my hands, legs and muscle, which have become rather ‘stiff’ lately due to the lack of physical exercises. Besides, cycling would help boost my mood by taking me close to the beautiful nature around me. Finally, this great outdoor activity would also allow me to socialize with my friends while also doing some physical exercises at the same time.
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Describe
an
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outdoor
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activity
that you haven’t
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tried
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yet
and would like to do in the future. You should say: what
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outdoor
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activity
it is why you have not
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tried
it
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yet
when you plan to do it and
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explain
why you
are interested
in doing this
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outdoor
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activity
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
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Model Answer:

In this busy and complicated life, I have already
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tried
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different
kinds of
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activities
, whether they are indoor or
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outdoor
.
However
,
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today
I would like to talk about one particular
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outdoor
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activity
, which I haven’t
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tried
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yet
,
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but
would definitely try in the future.
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The name of this
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outdoor
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activity
is “cycling”.

Not sure, when I became fond of
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“cycling”
,
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but
I guess
that it might have something to do with Tour de France
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cycling
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race
back in 2018 which I
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saw
for the
first
time on TV. Up until I
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saw
that
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race
, I had no
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idea
that
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“cycling”
could
actually
be such a fun and adventurous
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activity
, which involved riding through
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some
of the most
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beautiful
flat, hilly and mountainous terrains of the world, by employing
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very
impressive
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physical
postures
Consider replacing "in an artful manner" with the adverb for "artful"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an artful manner
.

In fact, when I was following the “Tour de France”
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race
, which
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started
in France and then
also
venturing into the surrounding countries
occasionally
, I was struggling to decide whether to pay more attention to
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cycling
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race
itself or the
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beautiful
terrains on its path.
Anyway
, I didn’t
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get
to try this nice
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outdoor
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activity
as
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yet
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because
I haven’t
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yet
managed to
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buy
a bicycle, which I
really
like.
Besides
, I am
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yet
to convince my close friends to
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join
me in
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“cycling”
as I don’t
really
like to do it alone. Then,
of course
, managing a suitable time to enjoy this
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physical
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activity
is
also
an issue
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because
I remain
fairly
busy with my work and other priorities.
However
, I am planning to
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start
working on enjoying this nice
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outdoor
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activity
this summer which is due in a few months.

Anyway
, I would like to try this
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outdoor
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activity
,
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because
it would
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allow
me to free up my hands, legs and muscle, which have become
rather
‘stiff’ lately due to the lack of
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physical
exercises.
Besides
,
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cycling
would
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help
boost my mood by taking me close to the
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beautiful
nature around me.
Finally
, this great
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outdoor
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activity
would
also
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allow
me to socialize with my friends while
also
doing
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some
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physical
exercises at the same time.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an outdoor activity that you haven’t tried yet and would like to do in the future. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
445 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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