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Describe a person who cares about the environment. v.1

Describe a person who cares about the environment. v. 1
Describe a person who cares about the environment. You should say: who this person is how you know him/her what he/she does and explain why you think this person cares about the environment. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: The environment has become a very important issue lately for many people around the world as it has proved out to be affecting our life rather directly. In fact, I have seen many people in my country, who are being vocal about this problem, and Mr Rabada Qureshi seems to be one of them. I have known Mr Rabada, living in the same neighbourhood as me, for almost 10 years as a “social activist”. However, I met him for the first time about 7/8 years ago when I visited him for some medical check-up and treatment. By the way, he is a Medical Doctor by profession, and a good one in that also. I also knew that he had involved himself in eradicating some social problems, like drug addiction and violence against women, by writing extensively on them on a number of local and national daily newspapers. But, I came to know how deeply he really cared about our environment, only when I visited him for some medical check-up and treatment about a few years ago at his chamber, as he lectured me for a good 5 minute about the negative effects of smoking on our environment. By the way, I used to smoke heavily back then which caused the coughing. Of course, I already knew a little about the environmental problem and climate change issues of our planet, but I didn’t realize how close those problems really were to our own homes until I met Mr Rabada on that day. In fact, after visiting the doctor gentleman on that day, I started to quit smoking gradually and following his informative articles on environmental degradation in our areas on local newspapers. Anyway, I think that Mr Rabada genuinely cares about environment because I have seldom seen him these days, using his private vehicle to travel to his chamber, as he doesn’t want to pollute the air by using fossil fuel. I also think that he cares about the environment because he always encourages his patients to plant more tree whenever and wherever it is possible.
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why you
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this person
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cares
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. [You will
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some
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Model Answer:

The
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environment
has become a
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very
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important
issue lately for
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many
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people
around the world as it has proved out to be affecting our life
rather
directly
. In fact, I have
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seen
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many
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people
in my country, who are being vocal about this
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problem
, and Mr
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Rabada
Qureshi seems to be one of them.

I have known Mr
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Rabada
, living in the same
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neighbourhood
as me, for almost 10 years as a “social activist”.
However
, I met him for the
first
time about 7/8 years ago when I visited him for
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some
medical
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check
-up and treatment. By the way, he is a Medical Doctor by profession, and a
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good
one in that
also
. I
also
knew that he had involved himself in eradicating
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some
social
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problems
, like drug addiction and violence against women, by writing
extensively
on them on a number of local and national daily newspapers.
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But
, I came to know how
deeply
he
really
cared about our
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environment
,
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only
when I visited him for
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some
medical
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check
-up and treatment about a few years ago at his chamber, as he lectured me for a
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good
5 minute about the
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negative
effects of smoking on our environment.

By the way, I
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used
to smoke
heavily
back then which caused the coughing.
Of course
, I already knew a
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little
about the environmental
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problem
and climate
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change
issues of our planet,
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but
I didn’t realize how close those
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problems
really
were to our
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own
homes until I met Mr
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Rabada
on that day. In fact, after visiting the doctor gentleman on that day, I
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started
to quit smoking
gradually
and following his informative articles on environmental degradation in our areas on local newspapers.

Anyway
, I
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think
that Mr
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Rabada
genuinely
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cares
about
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environment
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because
I have seldom
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seen
him these days, using his private vehicle to travel to his chamber, as he doesn’t want to pollute the air by using fossil fuel. I
also
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think
that he
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cares
about the
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environment
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because
he always encourages his patients to plant more tree whenever and wherever it is possible.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a person who cares about the environment. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
419 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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