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Describe a country where you would like to work for a short time. v.1

Describe a country where you would like to work for a short time. v. 1
Describe a country where you would like to work for a short time. You should say: which country is this what type of work you would do how long you would like to work there and explain why you would like to work in this country. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: I have always considered the opportunity to work in a different country as a rare privilege, no matter whichever country it may be. But, if it ever comes to choosing a particular country to work in, I would certainly go for “Japan”. Since my early university years, I have thought and learned of Japan as an ideal country to look for work opportunities for a number of reasons. But, before I go to explain why I want to work in that country, I would like to say a few things to introduce this great country. Japan is the world’s 4th largest island country, in East Asia, that encompasses more than 6850 islands in the Pacific Ocean. Being popularly known as “Nippon” or the land of “the rising sun”, Japan also is the second largest “developed economy” and one of the most industrialized nations in the world. By the way, Japan is also one of the most technologically advanced countries in the world. So, it is fair to assume that working opportunities in Japan is literally unlimited whether they want to work in manufacturing, mining and construction sectors, or service sectors. But, as far as I am concerned, I would like to work in the information technology (IT) sector as this great country has witnessed an exponential growth in the demand of IT professionals over the last few decades. In fact, I have even learned how Japanese companies are trying to attract foreign workers in order to meet this demand.   So, if I ever get an opportunity to work in Japan, I would like to continue it for at least 3 years. Anyway, I would like to work in Japan because it has a very good working culture, where everybody treats each other with great respect. Besides, working in a country like Japan would also allow me to gain valuable work experience and use it to further advance my career after coming back to work in my own country. Finally, I would like to work in this great country also because they have a very high salary structure.
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country
where you would like to
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work
for a short time. You should say: which
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country
is this what type of
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work
you would do how long you would like to
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work
there and
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explain
why you would like to
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work
in this
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country
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer:

I have always considered the
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opportunity
to
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work
in a
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different
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as a rare privilege, no matter whichever
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country
it may be.
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, if it ever
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comes
to choosing a particular
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country
to
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in, I would
certainly
go for “Japan”.

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thought
and learned of
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Japan
as an ideal
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country
to look for
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work
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opportunities
for a number of reasons.
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But
,
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before
I go to
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explain
why I want to
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work
in that
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country
, I would like to say a few things to introduce this
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great
country.

Japan is the world’s 4th largest island
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country
, in East Asia, that encompasses more than 6850 islands in the Pacific Ocean. Being
popularly
known as “Nippon” or the land of “the rising sun”,
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Japan
also
is the second largest “developed economy” and one of the most industrialized nations in the world. By the way,
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Japan
is
also
one of the most
technologically
advanced
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countries
in the world.

So
, it is
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fair
to assume that working
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opportunities
in
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Japan
is
literally
unlimited whether they want to
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work
in manufacturing, mining and construction sectors, or service sectors.
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But
, as far as I
am concerned
, I would like to
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work
in the information technology (IT) sector as this
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great
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country
has witnessed an exponential growth in the demand of IT professionals over the last few decades. In fact, I have even learned how Japanese
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companies
are trying to attract foreign workers in order to
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meet
this demand.
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So
, if I ever
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get
an
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opportunity
to
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work
in
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Japan
, I would like to continue it for at least 3 years.

Anyway
, I would like to
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work
in
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Japan
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because
it has a
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very
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good
working culture, where everybody treats each other with
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great
respect.
Besides
, working in a
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country
like
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Japan
would
also
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allow
me to gain valuable
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work
experience and
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use
it to
further
advance my career after coming back to
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work
in my
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own
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country
.
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, I would like to
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in this
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also
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because
they have a
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high salary structure.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS speaking Describe a country where you would like to work for a short time. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
435 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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