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Describe an interesting old person you have met. v.1

Describe an interesting old person you have met. v. 1
Describe an interesting old person you have met. You should say: who that person is how you have met that person where you met him/her and explain why you think he/she was interesting. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: Each person, young or old, is “unique” and “interesting” in his/her own rights since we all are different from each other in the ways we think, we talk, we feel and we behave. However, I try to avoid using the word “old” in isolation at all costs if it is not followed by some fine “adjectives” such as “interesting”, “intriguing” or “versatile”, since it could end up in meaning something derogative. Anyway, thank you for offering me the opportunity to talk about an interesting old person whom I met in a waiting room while waiting to catch my train at a railway station, about a year ago. He was probably in his early 70’s. I didn’t really feel like talking to him or anybody, even though I was sitting very close to him because I was really exhausted after finishing a long and tiring day at work. All I needed was some quiet and relaxing time. But, unfortunately, that was not supposed to happen because I needed to go out in order to grab some snacks to please my “growling” stomach. I was very hungry. So, I requested the “aged” gentleman, sitting next to me, to watch my luggage just for a little while I was gone for buying something to eat. In response, he opened his little bag and offered me some cookies that were kept in it. I chose to oblige because I wasn’t really in a mood to talk or argue with anybody. Eating cookies and thinking if I would make another attempt to go out because those cookies were just not enough for me, and just then he asked me for how long I was starving. I said “not more than 10 hours” in response. He smiled and then asked me again, “do you know how many people go to bed hungry every night? ” I said that I had no idea. He said, “Almost 10% of the world population goes to bed hungry every night without knowing what they are going to eat the next day. ” He also told me that he hardly ate more than twice a day, and his rather “thin” shape bears testimony to his “limited food consumption”. Suddenly, the train arrived, and we were ready to go. So, we just parted after greeting each other. The conversation was brief, and I never really met that senior citizen before. But what was really interesting that I felt like he had some “authority” on me, and that I needed to listen to him even if I was not really in a mood to follow. In fact, up until I met that interesting senior gentleman, I had no idea that a person could be so passionate about learning the plights of other people in this world. But, the most fascinating thing about that “aged” person was he actually thought that he could make a difference in the world at his “not-so-young” age, and he surely proved it in his action by trying to feed a hungry person like me even though I didn’t ask for it.
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Describe
an
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interesting
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old
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person
you have
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met
. You should say: who that
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person
is how you have
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met
that
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person
where you
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met
him/her and
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explain
why you
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think
he/she was
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interesting
. [You will
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have to
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talk
about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer: Each
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person
, young or
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old
, is “unique” and
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“interesting”
in his/her
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own
rights since we all are
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different
from each other in the ways we
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think
, we
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talk
, we
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feel and
we behave.
However
, I try to avoid using the word “
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old
” in isolation at all costs if it is not followed by
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some
fine “adjectives” such as
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“interesting”
, “intriguing” or “versatile”, since it could
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end
up in meaning something
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derogative
.
Anyway
, thank you for offering me the opportunity to
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talk
about an
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interesting
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old
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person
whom I
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met
in a waiting room while waiting to catch my train at a railway station, about a year ago.

He was
probably
in his early
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70’s
. I didn’t
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really
feel like talking to him or anybody,
even though
I was sitting
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very
close to him
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because
I was
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really
exhausted after finishing a long and tiring day at work. All I needed was
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some
quiet and relaxing time.
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But
, unfortunately, that was not supposed to happen
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because
I needed to go out in order to grab
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some
snacks to
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please
my “growling” stomach. I was
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very
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hungry
.
So
, I requested the “aged” gentleman, sitting
next
to me, to
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watch
my luggage
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just
for a
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little
while I
was gone
for buying something to eat. In response, he opened his
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little
bag and offered me
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some
cookies that were
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kept
in it. I chose to oblige
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because
I wasn’t
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really
in a mood to
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talk
or argue with anybody.

Eating cookies and thinking if I would
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make
another attempt to go out
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because
those cookies were
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just
not
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enough
for me, and
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just
then he asked me for how long I was starving. I said “not more than 10 hours” in response. He smiled and then asked me again, “do
you know
how
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many
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people
go to bed
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hungry
every night? ” I said that I had no
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idea
. He said, “Almost 10% of the world population goes to bed
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hungry
every night without knowing what they are going to eat the
next
day. ” He
also
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told
me that he hardly ate more than twice a day, and his
rather
“thin” shape bears testimony to his “limited food consumption”.
Suddenly
, the train arrived, and we were ready to go.
So
, we
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just
parted after greeting each other.

The conversation was brief, and I never
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really
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met
that senior citizen
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before
.
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But
what was
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really
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interesting
that I felt like he had
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some
“authority” on me, and that I needed to listen to him even if I was not
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really
in a mood to follow. In fact, up until I
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met
that
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interesting
senior gentleman, I had no
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idea
that a
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person
could be
so
passionate about learning the plights of other
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people
in this world.
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But
, the most fascinating thing about that “aged”
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person
was he
actually
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thought
that he could
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make
a difference in the world at his “not-
so
-young” age, and he
surely
proved it in his action by trying to feed a
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hungry
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person
like me
even though
I didn’t
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ask for
it.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an interesting old person you have met. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
587 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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