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Describe a character from a story/film/TV programme. v.1

Describe a character from a story/film/TV programme. v. 1
Describe a character from a story/film/TV programme. You should say: who this character is when did you first see/read about him/her what kind of person this character is and explain how much you like this character. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: I like to watch all kinds of movies just for the fun of it, but I don’t necessarily remember any particular movie characters or care to consider them any more special than the others. However, there is one character, which deserves special attention from some unworthy critiques like me, because of its very distinct appeal and universal acclamation. The name of this character is “Vito Corleone” from one of the best movies, ever made in the history of films, called “The Godfather”.   After watching “the godfather” about 8 years ago for the first time, I wanted to watch the movie again after a few weeks. Later, I watched the movie once again after a month or so. It was that there was just something mysterious and unexplainable about that movie which drew me to watch it again and again. Then, a few months later, I realized that it was the special character of “Vito Corleone”, played by one of the best actors ever of Hollywood called Marlon Brando. Anyway, Vito Corleone character was inspired by real-life mafia boss “Frank Costello”, who is presented as a very cunning and intelligent mafia boss at the same time that made him to this day a very quotable character – a character which has become a quintessential part of popular American culture. However even though Vitro Corleone is portrayed to be a very ruthless and cunning mafia boss, he also seems to be a very caring father, who wants to keep his family and sons from all kinds of the danger of the mafia world.   Vito also seems to be too soft-spoken for a mafia boss in the movie who believes in brevity as much as justice and honour. Anyway, I really like this Vito Corleone character because he seems to be a very complex personality, who cares about his family so much, and yet, he has so much interest in all kinds of organized crimes just to keep the control of mafia underworld. Vito Corleone is essentially the “man”, every male person would like to become, who is always able to see through the best and the worst.
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Describe
a
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character
from a story/film/TV
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programme
. You should say:
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who
this
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character
is when did you
first
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see
/read about him/her what
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kind
of person this
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character
is and
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explain
how
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much
you like this
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character
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
Loose punctuation mark.
]
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Model Answer: I like to
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watch
all
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kinds
of
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movies
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just
for the fun of it,
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but
I don’t
necessarily
remember any particular
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movie
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characters
or care to consider them
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any more
special than the others.
However
, there is one
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character
, which deserves special attention from
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some
unworthy critiques like me,
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because
of its
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very
distinct appeal and universal acclamation.

The name of this
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character
is “Vito Corleone” from one of the best
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movies
, ever made in the history of films, called “The Godfather”.
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After watching “the godfather” about 8 years ago for the
first
time, I wanted to
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watch
the
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movie
again after a few weeks. Later, I
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watched
the
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movie
once again after a month or
so
. It was that there was
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just
something mysterious and unexplainable about that
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movie
which drew me to
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watch
it again and again.

Then, a few months later, I realized that it was the special
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character
of “Vito Corleone”, played by one of the best actors ever of Hollywood called Marlon Brando.
Anyway
, Vito Corleone
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character
was inspired
by real-life mafia boss “Frank Costello”,
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who
is presented
as a
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very
cunning and intelligent mafia boss at the same time that made him to this day a
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very
quotable
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character
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–
a
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character
which has become a quintessential part of popular American culture.

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However
even though
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Vitro
Corleone
is portrayed
to be a
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very
ruthless and cunning mafia boss, he
also
seems to be a
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very
caring father,
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who
wants to
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keep
his family and sons from all
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kinds
of the
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danger
of the mafia world.
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Vito
also
seems to be too soft-spoken for a mafia boss in the
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movie
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who
believes in brevity as
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much
as justice and
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honour
.

Anyway
, I
really
like this Vito Corleone
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character
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because
he seems to be a
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very
complex personality,
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who
cares about his family
so
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much
, and
yet
, he has
so
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much
interest in all
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kinds
of organized crimes
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just
to
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keep
the control of mafia underworld. Vito Corleone is
essentially
the “
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man
”, every male person would like to become,
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who
is always able to
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see
through the best and the worst.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS speaking Describe a character from a story/film/TV programme. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
434 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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