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Describe an idea you have for improving something at work or college. v.1

Describe an idea you have for improving something at work or college. v. 1
Describe an idea you have for improving something at work or college. You should say: what is it about where you have got the idea how difficult it would be to implement the idea and explain why you think this would improve the workplace or college. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you're going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer 1: There always are areas in our lives, be it at our home or office, in which we can bring some innovations. But, we don’t really go for such improvements because they seem to be difficult. However, with the right ideas and approach, we can always bring such developments, and today, I would like to talk about one such idea which, I think, would bring some much-needed improvements at my work. Anyway, there are many things at my work which I can really be proud of, but as far as, the team works among the staffs and co-ordination across the different departments are concerned, I don’t really think that much is really going on to make us proud. Apparently, all the mid-level and junior level employees at my company think that their own departments, in which they work, are more important than other departments. So, as a junior staff of my company, who hardly has anything to lose, I have decided to put forth a proposal to the upper management which would make it mandatory for all the staffs to work at every department for at least 2 working days in rotation every month so that they all understand the value of everybody’s efforts and works. I have got this idea from one of the senior brothers’ companies which had almost the same kind of issue. I know that it won’t be that easy to implement this idea it would force them to change (and change is what everybody “hates” at work) their daily routines in a significant way, but it’s worth the shot. I think that the idea would bring some positive change in my workplace mainly because everybody will be treated fairly and equally in this scheme. Besides, in this way, I also believe that since all staffs would be able to try something new or new activities/works at least a couple of days per month, they would be able to break free from the monotonous work schedules at least for some times.   Model Answer 2: Since I am a student and have never worked for a company, my idea is related to the college where I study. Engaging two teaching assistants for each class is an idea that would very positively improve the study environment and facility in our college/ university. It is a large college with more than seven thousand students. Each class has more than 40 students and not all of them are equally talented and focused on the lessons. So if the college authority arranges to enrol two promising and talented students who have the capability to manage the classes and assist the teachers in explaining lessons to other students, would be a great aid for all the students who often struggle to understand the lessons but do not ask questions to the teachers. In fact, that would be a great initiative by the college administration to help all the students with their lessons. I got the idea from a website of a renowned university that explained how they enrol teaching assistants and this process helps all the students of a class. I do not think it would be very difficult to implement. The college authority needs to discuss this whole idea and then finally decide the process. That might require some administrative and decision level meeting. The extra budget that would be required would not be a big hassle for the college to support. So, in my opinion, I do not see any major obstacles to implementing this idea. From my experience, I can say that only one-third of the whole students in a class can catch and fully understand the lectures delivered by the teachers. The remaining two-third students of a class neither understand the lessons nor ask questions to the teachers to explain things again. Many students do not ask the questions they have directly to the teachers and thus always remain as the back-benchers. If they get teaching assistants from their classmates, they would surely raise their questions to those TA and would be greatly benefitted. The overall study quality would improve and the results of the college would also improve dramatically.   Part 3 – Details discussion: Topic -
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Describe
an
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you have for improving something at
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work
or college. You should say: what is it about where you have
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got
the
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idea
how difficult it would be to implement the
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idea
and
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explain
why you
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think
this would
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improve
the workplace or college. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you're going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer 1:

There
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always are
areas in our
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lives
, be it at our home or office, in which we can
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bring
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some
innovations.
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But
, we don’t
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really
go for such improvements
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because
they seem to be difficult.
However
, with the
right
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ideas
and approach, we can always
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bring
such developments, and
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today
, I would like to talk about one such
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idea
which, I
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think
, would
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bring
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some
much-needed improvements at my work.

Anyway
, there are
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many
things at my
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work
which I can
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really
be proud of,
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but
as far as, the team works among the
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staffs
and co-ordination across the
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different
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departments
are concerned
, I don’t
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really
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think
that much is
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really
going on to
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make
us proud.
Apparently
, all the mid-level and junior level employees at my
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company
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think
that their
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own
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departments
, in which they
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work
, are more
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important
than other
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departments
.
So
, as a junior
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staff
of my
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company
, who hardly has anything to lose, I have decided to put forth a proposal to the upper management which would
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make
it mandatory for all the
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staffs
to
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work
at every
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department
for at least 2 working days in rotation every month
so
that they all
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understand
the value of everybody’s efforts and works. I have
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got
this
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idea
from one of the senior brothers’
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companies
which had almost the same kind of issue. I know that it won’t be that easy to implement this
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idea
it would force them to
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change
(and
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change
is what everybody “hates” at
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work)
their daily routines
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in a significant way
,
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but
it’s worth the shot.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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think
that the
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idea
would
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bring
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some
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positive
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change
in my workplace
mainly
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because
everybody will
be treated
fairly
and
equally
in this scheme.
Besides
, in this way, I
also
believe that since all
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staffs
would be able to try something new or new activities/works at least a couple of days per month, they would be able to break free from the monotonous
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work
schedules at least for
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some
times.
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Model Answer 2:

Since I am a
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student
and have never worked for a
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company
, my
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idea
is related
to the college where I study. Engaging two teaching assistants for each
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class
is an
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idea
that would
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very
positively
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improve
the study environment and facility in our college/ university. It is a large college with more than seven thousand
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students
. Each
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class
has more than 40
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students
and not all of them are
equally
talented and focused on the
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lessons
.
So
if the college authority arranges to enrol two promising and talented
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students
who have the capability to manage the
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classes
and assist the
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teachers
in explaining
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lessons
to other
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students
, would be a great aid for all the
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students
who
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often
struggle to
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understand
the
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lessons
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but
do not ask
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questions
to the
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teachers
. In fact, that would be a great initiative by the college administration to
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help
all the
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students
with their
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lessons
. I
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got
the
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idea
from a website of a renowned university that
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explained
how they enrol teaching assistants and this process
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helps
all the
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students
of a
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class
. I do not
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think
it would be
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very
difficult to implement. The college authority needs to discuss this whole
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idea
and then
finally
decide the process. That might require
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some
administrative and decision level meeting. The extra budget that would
be required
would not be a
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big
hassle for the college to support.
So
, in my opinion, I do not
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see
any major obstacles to implementing this
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idea
. From my experience, I can say that
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only
one-third of the whole
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students
in a
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class
can catch and
fully
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understand
the lectures delivered by the
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teachers
. The remaining two-third
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students
of a
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class
neither
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understand
the
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lessons
nor ask
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questions
to the
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teachers
to
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explain
things again.
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Many
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students
do not ask the
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questions
they have
directly
to the
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teachers
and
thus
always remain as the
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back-benchers
. If they
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get
teaching assistants from their classmates, they would
surely
raise their
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questions
to those TA and would be
greatly
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benefitted
. The
overall
study quality would
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improve
and the results of the college would
also
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improve
dramatically
.
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Part 3
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discussion: Topic -
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
80Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS speaking Describe an idea you have for improving something at work or college. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
785 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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