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Talk about one of your birthdays you remember well. v.1

Talk about one of your birthdays you remember well. v. 1
Talk about one of your birthdays you remember well. You should say: how old you were how you celebrated this birthday what you did and explain why you remember this birthday so well. Model Answer: I have recently turned to 25 and last year my family and friends arranged a birthday that became a remarkable day for me and I will always remember this birthday. It was my 24th birthday and I was in the final year of my University. I had an exam approaching and had no plan to visit my hometown and celebrate my birthday. But my friends planned to surprise me on my birthday and also asked my parents and siblings to join them on that day. I went outside at around 9 pm. And returned after an hour and noticed that my parents and siblings have come to the house I stay with my friends and classmates. I knew that my family members came to celebrate my birthday. I was bit confused as I had no preparation for that and I felt a bit lost about the whole event. When the clock ticked to 12. 01 am, my friends started unfurling their surprises for me and that included a four storied cake, numerous gifts and music festival. I enjoyed this birthday occasion thoroughly and to my surprise, my friends invited some of their cousins as well. I was mostly speechless and continuously thanked my friends for the great preparation they did for my birthday celebration. I spent the night with my friends, we watched a movie at late night and finally I went to sleep in the early morning. This is a very surprise party for me and the friends I was talking about took a great burden to arrange everything to celebrate this occasion. They even invited my parents and siblings so that they can also be the part of the whole celebration. It was quite a different birthday celebration for me and I remember it very well. The gifts that I got on that were very expensive including Kindle Fire, iPod, Gymnasium instrument and many other gifts. I was very much touched by the whole event and it took me by surprise. That is why this has become a part of my memory and I can recall the whole event very clearly.     Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a birthday celebration you recently participated in.   Describe a memorable event in your life.   Describe a party or celebration you remember well.   Describe a birthday party you remember. Describe how you would organise a surprise party for a friend.
Talk about one of your birthdays you
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remember
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well
. You should say: how
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old
you were how you celebrated this birthday what you did and
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explain
why you
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remember
this birthday
so
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well
. Model Answer:

I have recently turned to 25 and last year my family and
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friends
arranged a birthday that became a remarkable day for me and I will always
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remember
this birthday. It was my 24th
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birthday and
I was in the final year of my University. I had an exam approaching and had no plan to visit my hometown and celebrate my birthday.
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But
my
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friends
planned to
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surprise
me on my birthday and
also
asked my parents and siblings to
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join
them on that day. I went outside at around 9 pm. And returned after an hour and noticed that my parents and siblings have
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come
to the
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house
I stay with my
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friends
and classmates. I knew that my family members came to celebrate my birthday. I was
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bit
confused as I had no preparation for that and I felt a bit lost about the
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whole
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event
.
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When
the clock ticked to 12. 01 am, my
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friends
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started
unfurling their
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surprises
for me and that included a four storied cake, numerous gifts and music festival. I enjoyed this birthday occasion
thoroughly
and to my
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surprise
, my
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friends
invited
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some
of their cousins as
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well
. I was
mostly
speechless and
continuously
thanked my
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friends
for the great preparation they did for my birthday
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celebration
.
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I
spent the night with my
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friends
, we
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watched
a movie at late night and
finally
I went to sleep in the early morning. This is a
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very
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surprise
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party
for me and the
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friends
I was talking about took a great burden to arrange everything to celebrate this occasion. They even invited my parents and siblings
so
that they can
also
be the part of the
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whole
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celebration
. It was quite a
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different
birthday
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celebration
for me and I
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remember
it
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very
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well
. The gifts that I
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got
on that were
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very
expensive including Kindle Fire, iPod, Gymnasium instrument and
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many
other gifts. I was
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very
much touched by the
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whole
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event
and it took me by
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surprise
.
That is
why this has become a part of my memory and I can recall the
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whole
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event
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very
clearly
.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
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:
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Describe
a birthday
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celebration
you recently participated in.
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Describe
a memorable
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event
in your life.
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Describe
a
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party
or
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celebration
you
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remember
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well
.
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Describe
a birthday
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party
you
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remember
.
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Describe
how you would
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organise
a
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surprise
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party
for a
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friend
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS speaking Talk about one of your birthdays you remember well. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
457 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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