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Describe an excursion or education tour you took. v.1

Describe an excursion or education tour you took. v. 1
Describe an excursion or education tour you took. You should say: When it was What you did What you learned from it and explain why you liked or disliked it. Sample Answer: I went on many excursions and study tours from my college and in university level as well and the tour I would like to talk about was in 2004 when I was a college student. The college notice board one day declared that there would be an education tour to the central museum and the interested persons are invited to place application form and money to the authority. I was interested and when I found that my close friends from the college would also go, I asked my father for the permission to take part in the excursion. On the day, I went to the college ground and found that other students and teachers have already gathered there. The bus left at 7: 30 am and we reached the museum at around12: 00 pm. Though many of my friends already went to the central museum, I never went there before the study tour from our college. I enjoyed everything I watched there and our history teacher was explaining many of the things preserved in the museum. That day I realised how exciting the study tour can be. It gives both the opportunity to learn and enjoy. We took our lunch in the museum canteen with the foods we took with us and in the evening we returned to our hometown approximately at midnight. I learned about the past history of our country, some of the old customs and practice we had in our country, several significant evidence of the history and the life and work of famous people of our country. Actually I enjoyed the tour very much and as a result, I still remember it. This time I learned that there are some other ways of learning things apart from attending classes. The excursion was so interesting to me that I planned to travel extensively in my life at that very day. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a recent tour you enjoyed.   Describe a study tour or excursion you had in your teenage.   Describe a journey you remember well.
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Describe
an
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excursion
or education
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tour
you took. You should say: When it was What you did What you learned from it and
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explain
why you liked or disliked it. Sample Answer:

I
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went
on
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many
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excursions
and
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study
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tours
from my college and in university level as
well
and the
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tour
I would like to talk about was in 2004 when I was a college student. The college notice board one day declared that there would be an education
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tour
to the central
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museum
and the interested persons
are invited
to place application form and money to the authority.

I
was interested
and when I found that my close friends from the college would
also
go, I asked my father for the permission to
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take part
in the
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excursion
. On the day, I
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went
to the college ground and found that other students and teachers have already gathered there. The bus
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left
at 7: 30
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am and
we reached the
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museum
at around12: 00 pm. Though
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many
of my friends already
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went
to the central
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museum
, I never
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went
there
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before
the
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study
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tour
from our college.

I enjoyed everything I
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watched
there and our history teacher was explaining
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many
of the things preserved in the
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museum
. That day I
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realised
how exciting the
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study
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tour
can be. It gives both the opportunity to learn and enjoy.

We took our lunch in the
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museum
canteen with the foods we took with us and in the evening we returned to our hometown approximately at midnight. I learned about the past history of our country,
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some of the
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old
customs and practice we had in our country, several significant evidence of the history and the life and work of
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famous
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people
of our country.

Actually
I enjoyed the
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tour
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very
much and
as a result
, I
still
remember it. This time I learned that there are
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some
other ways of learning things apart from attending classes. The
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excursion
was
so
interesting to me that I planned to travel
extensively
in my life at that
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very
day. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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Describe
a recent
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tour
you enjoyed.
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Describe
a
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study
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tour
or
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excursion
you had in your teenage.
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Describe
a journey you remember
well
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an excursion or education tour you took. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
394 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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