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Describe a study tour or excursion you had. v.1

Describe a study tour or excursion you had. v. 1
Describe a study tour or excursion you had. You should say: When it was When you went How you reached there And explain why you enjoyed it. Model Answer: We went to visit Mount Everest a few years back as part of the study tour arranged by our college. It was the year 2011 and I was in the second year of my college at that time. Since it was in a different country (Nepal), we had to collect our visas to enter the country. From our country we flew to the Nepal National Airport and from there we took a tour bus to reach the camping area near the Himalayas. After few hours journey, we reached the camping area and we were very excited to be there. We were almost 30 members and four tour guides with us. Personally, I was very much thrilled to visit the largest mountain peak and when I reached the camping area, I got awestricken. It is beyond explanation in words. The snow-covered mountain, balmy wind, the sound of nature, vast and wide area simply took my heart away. I stayed there for about a week and we did some mount hiking and fire-camping and all of those activities were really exciting and new for me. I enjoyed the nice vacation, natural scenery, companion of my classmates and friends. That was a relief from the busy city-life and being close to nature. I enjoyed this tour so much that the whole week seemed like passed away like a fleeting moment. I promised to myself that, I will come back to visit the out-of-the-world place someday. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a memorable event in your life. Describe a journey you remember well. Describe a place where you visited. Describe a tour you enjoyed a lot. Describe a study tour from your college. Describe a memorable event in your school or college.
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Describe
a study
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tour
or excursion you had. You should say: When it was When you went How you reached there And
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explain
why you
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enjoyed
it. Model Answer:

We went to visit Mount Everest a few years back as part of the study
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tour
arranged by our college. It was the year
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2011 and
I was in the second year of my college at that time. Since it was in a
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different
country (Nepal), we had to collect our visas to enter the country. From our country we flew to the Nepal National Airport and from there we took a
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tour
bus to reach the camping
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area
near the Himalayas. After few hours journey, we reached the camping
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area and
we were
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very
excited to be there. We were almost 30 members and four
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tour
guides with us.
Personally
, I was
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very
much thrilled to visit the largest mountain peak and when I reached the camping
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area
, I
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got
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awestricken
. It is beyond explanation in words. The snow-covered mountain, balmy wind, the sound of nature, vast and wide
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area
simply
took my heart away. I stayed there for about a
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week and
we did
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some
mount hiking and fire-camping and all of those activities were
really
exciting and new for me. I
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enjoyed
the nice vacation, natural scenery, companion of my classmates and friends. That was a relief from the busy city-life and being close to nature. I
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enjoyed
this
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tour
so
much that the whole week seemed like passed away like a fleeting moment. I promised to myself that, I will
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come
back to visit the out-of-the-world place someday. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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Describe
a memorable
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event
in your life.
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Describe
a journey you remember
well
.
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Describe
a place where you visited.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
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tour
you
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enjoyed
a lot.
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Describe
a study
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tour
from your college.
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Describe
a memorable
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event
in your school or college.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a study tour or excursion you had. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
337 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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