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Describe an educational trip you went on in your school days. v.1

Describe an educational trip you went on in your school days. v. 1
Describe an educational trip you went on in your school days. You should say: where was the trip what you did and what you learned who went with you and explain why it was important to you. Sample Answer: When I was in class six, the school authority arranged an educational tour to the city botanical garden. I was very much interested to participate in it and after I got my parent’s permission, I enrolled in the trip. It was a trip to the largest botanical garden called (…say a name…) and we were almost 30 students and 5-6 teachers in the trip. After we reached the garden I was very much enthralled to watch such a beautiful place that seemed very green and different from the place we lived. The journey took 3-4 hours and I enjoyed my visit a lot. The place very large and there were several thousands of trees, some hills, lakes etc. the large trees gave us the impression of the woods and I felt like we came to visit a large woods of a mediaeval age. The teachers introduced us with several plants and flowers and there were many plants and flowers that I read or heard about but have never seen before that day. We learned about the importance of forests, the necessity and our responsibility to make the world a better place for all the species and not just for humans only. We learned some medical and herbal aspects of many trees and one of the teachers explained how the plants and their ingredients are still used to make life-saving medicines. The whole trip was educational and enjoyable as well. This was a very important trip for me as I had the scope to visit such a beautiful place surrounded by green trees and flowers. I learned many things about the plants and their usefulness. I also learned about the natural equilibrium and why should we maintain a greener environment for our own betterment. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a tour or journey you enjoyed.   Describe a memorable event in your school or college.   Describe a study tour you had from your school.   Describe a trip you had to a different city.
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Describe
an educational
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trip
you went on in your
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school
days. You should say: where was the
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trip
what you did and what you
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learned
who
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went with
you and
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explain
why it was
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important
to you. Sample Answer:

When I was in
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class
six, the
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school
authority arranged an educational tour to the city botanical garden. I was
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very
much interested to participate in it and after I
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got
my parent’s permission, I enrolled in the
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trip
. It was a
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trip
to the largest botanical garden called (…say a name…) and we were almost 30 students and 5-6 teachers in the
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trip
. After we reached the garden I was
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very
much enthralled to
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watch
such a
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beautiful
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place
that seemed
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very
green and
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different
from the
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place
we
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lived
. The journey took 3-4 hours and I enjoyed my visit a lot. The
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place
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very
large and there were several thousands of
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trees
,
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some
hills, lakes etc. the large
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trees
gave us the impression of the woods and I felt like we came to visit a large
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woods
of a
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mediaeval
age.
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The
teachers introduced us with several
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plants
and flowers and there were
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many
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plants
and flowers that I read or heard about
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but
have never
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seen
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before
that day. We
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learned
about the importance of forests, the necessity and our responsibility to
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make
the world a better
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place
for all the species and not
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just
for humans
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only
. We
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learned
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some
medical and herbal aspects of
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many
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trees
and one of the teachers
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explained
how the
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plants
and their ingredients are
still
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used
to
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make
life-saving medicines. The whole
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trip
was educational and enjoyable as
well
. This was a
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very
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important
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trip
for me as I had the scope to visit such a
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beautiful
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place
surrounded by green
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trees
and flowers. I
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learned
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many
things about the
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plants
and their usefulness. I
also
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learned
about the natural equilibrium and why should we maintain a greener environment for our
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own
betterment. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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Describe
a tour or journey you enjoyed.
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Describe
a memorable
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event
in your
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school
or college.
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Describe
a study tour you had from your
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school
.
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Describe
a
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trip
you had to a
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different
city.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an educational trip you went on in your school days. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
393 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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