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Describe an event that changed your life for the better. v.1

Describe an event that changed your life for the better. v. 1
Describe an event that changed your life for the better. You should say: what was the event what happened when it happened and explain how it changed your life for better. Model Answer: In our lives, we learn everyday knowingly or unknowingly. What we do now shapes our future and every event has its importance and consequence in our life. Yet there are some major and significant events that change our path dramatically. One such important event in my life was helping a neighbour when he got ill severely all of a sudden. I was passing the neighbour’s house and I heard a noise that sounded more like a scream. In fact, the person got a heart attack and I was only 12 years old at that time to understand that clearly. I ran to his house and when I noticed him lying on the ground, I shouted for help. I called my parents and one of my cousins and we took him to the hospital promptly. The doctor went through the medical treatment and tests and thanked us for being so prompt. The consulting doctor also mentioned that something bad could have happened if we have waited a bit long to take him to the hospital. This person became very grateful to us and also became a family friend. He became a friend, guardian and teacher to me. He often helped me on my studies and taught me many valuable and moral aspects of life. After I passed my A level, I was accepted by a prestigious Medical College of our country and my father tried to manage a bank loan to support my educational expenses. But he was undone. He had not been able to manage the large amount needed for me to get myself admitted in this Medical College. This neighbour who became our family friend raised his benevolent support and sold one of his properties to support my education. We tried to protest by all means but he was determined to help. Over the period, my father and I repaid his money but what he did was beyond repayable. Because of him, I am a doctor now. That all happened because of the event when I was 12. That event changed the path of my life. This event changed my life for something better and greater. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a memorable event in your life. Describe someone who helped you once. Describe a helpful neighbour you know about.
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an
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that
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changed
your
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life
for the better. You should say: what was the
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event
what
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happened
when it
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happened
and
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explain
how it
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changed
your
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life
for better. Model Answer:

In our
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lives
, we learn
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everyday
knowingly
or
unknowingly
. What we do
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now
shapes our future and every
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event
has its importance and consequence in our
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life
.
Yet
there are
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some
major and significant
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events
that
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change
our path
dramatically
. One such
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important
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event
in my
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life
was helping a
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neighbour
when he
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got
ill
severely
all of a sudden. I was passing the
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neighbour
’s
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house
and I heard a noise that sounded more like a scream. In fact, the person
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got
a heart
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attack and
I was
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only
12 years
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old
at that time to understand that
clearly
. I ran to his
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house
and when I noticed him lying on the ground, I shouted for
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help
. I called my parents and one of my
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
cousins and
we took him to the hospital
promptly
. The doctor went through the medical treatment and
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tests
and thanked us for being
so
prompt. The consulting doctor
also
mentioned that something
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bad
could have
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happened
if we have waited a bit long to take him to the hospital. This person
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became
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very
grateful to us and
also
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became
a family friend. He
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became
a friend, guardian and teacher to me. He
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often
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helped
me on my studies and taught me
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many
valuable and moral aspects of
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life
. After I passed my A level, I was
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accepted
by a prestigious Medical College of our country and my father tried to manage a bank loan to support my educational expenses.
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But
he was undone. He had not been able to manage the large amount needed for me to
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get
myself admitted in this Medical College. This
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neighbour
who
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became
our family friend raised his benevolent support and sold one of his properties to support my education. We tried to protest by all means
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but
he
was determined
to
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help
. Over the period, my father and I repaid his money
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but
what he did was beyond repayable.
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Because
of him, I am a doctor
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now
. That all
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happened
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because
of the
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event
when I was 12. That
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event
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changed
the path of my
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life
. This
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event
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changed
my
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life
for something better and greater. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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Describe
a memorable
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event
in your
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life
.
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Describe
someone who
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helped
you once.
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Describe
a helpful
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neighbour
you know
about.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS speaking Describe an event that changed your life for the better. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
434 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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