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Describe an amusement park you went to. v.1

Describe an amusement park you went to. v. 1
Describe an amusement park you went to. You should say: where it is when you went there why you went there And explain what you did there. Sample Answer: For a long, I have not been to a park or amusement park but my visit to a renowned amusement park in our city last year was so pleasant that I look forward to revisit there. The amusement park I am talking about is nearly 40 kilometres away from the city where I live in and is a large one. It is beside the City resort and occupies around 12 acres area. I went there with my parents, 4-5 cousins and 2 nephews. This was a family trip and we planned to take the children to a place where they would be able to enjoy. Since the busy school schedules often bore the children, we planned to take them to somewhere and let them enjoy their time. As part of the plan we left home early in the morning and spent almost the entire day there. Since there were many teenagers and children with us, we had to look after them. I managed the tickets, purchased lunch and took care of the children. I enjoyed 2-3 rides and mostly took photos of me parents with the kids. In the noon I planned to have a bath in the swimming pool and I really enjoyed that. We also enjoyed a 3D movie in the park and after I won a doll in the balloon game, I shouted like a 10 years old child. That was a refreshing gathering for us and I enjoyed both the company of my family members and the nice environments and amusement facility of this park.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would also enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics: Describe a public place you have visited. Describe a children’s park or amusement park you have been to. Describe a family picnic you have attended. Describe a place where you are planning to visit for the second time.
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Describe
an
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amusement
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park
you
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went
to. You should say: where it is when you
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went
there why you
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went
there And
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explain
what you did there. Sample Answer:

For a long, I have not been to a
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park
or
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amusement
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park
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but
my visit to a renowned
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amusement
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park
in our city last year was
so
pleasant that I look forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to revisiting".
to revisit
there. The
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amusement
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park
I am talking about is
nearly
40
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kilometres
away from the city where I
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live
in and is a large one. It is beside the City resort and occupies around 12 acres area. I
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went
there with my parents, 4-5 cousins and 2 nephews. This was a family
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trip and
we planned to take the
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children
to a place where they would be able to enjoy. Since the busy school schedules
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often
bore the
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children
, we planned to take them to somewhere and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
them enjoy their time. As part of the plan we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
home early in the morning and spent almost the entire day there. Since there were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
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teenagers
and
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children
with us, we had to look after them. I managed the tickets,
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purchased
lunch and took care of the
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children
. I
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enjoyed
2-3 rides and
mostly
took photos of me parents with the kids. In the noon I planned to have a bath in the swimming pool and I
really
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enjoyed
that. We
also
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enjoyed
a 3D movie in the
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park
and after I won a doll in the balloon game, I shouted like a 10 years
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old
child. That was a refreshing gathering for us and I
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enjoyed
both the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
of my family members and the nice environments and
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amusement
facility of this
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park
.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would
also
enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics:
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Describe
a public place you have visited.
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Describe
a
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children’s
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park
or
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amusement
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park
you have been to.
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Describe
a family picnic you have attended.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a place where you are planning to visit for the second time.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an amusement park you went to. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
352 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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