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Describe an advertisement that you remember. v.1

Describe an advertisement that you remember. v. 1
Describe an advertisement that you remember. You should say: what type of advertisement it is what it advertised where you saw it and explain why you remember this advertisement. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer: I love watching TV, but not so much the advertisements it shows in the middle of some interesting programs, I enjoy. But, then sometimes, I come across some adverts that amuse me from time to time. I will talk about one such TV commercial today which I saw at my home a while ago. This is a “car advertisement” where Mercedes Car is congratulating “BMW” Car company, the fierce competitor of Mercedes car, on its 100th anniversary with a very cheeky message that writes “Thanks for 100 years of competition. The previous 30 years were somewhat dull”.   The ad also displays the signature “kidney grille” symbol of BMW car, which is located at the front and in the middle of two front headlights, while also very cleverly ‘illuminating’ the message right below the signature “grille” in order to remind the BMW car company that Mercedes is a “senior campaigner” in the car manufacturing industry. The advertisement was displayed on a plain dark background the entire time with a contrasting white colour message in order to render to keep it as much simple as possible. I really, really like and remember this advertisement mainly because it is so simple with no background music or voice to draw the attention of its audience and keep them engaged. In fact, I put this commercial in the category of “telling many things without saying anything”. I also like this advertisement because of its “unique theme” where it shows that a particular company is very much able to promote its products while actually congratulating its competitors also at the same time in a very graceful, and yet, clever manner. Finally, I like this ad because Mercedes has managed to throw a “subtle’ challenge in “congratulatory” tone that BMW would never really be able to “outcompete” its senior competitor no matter how hard it tries.
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Describe
an
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advertisement
that you remember. You should say: what type of
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advertisement
it is what it advertised where you
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saw
it and
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explain
why you remember this
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advertisement
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
Model Answer: I
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love
watching TV,
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but
not
so
much the
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advertisements
it
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shows
in the middle of
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some
interesting programs, I enjoy.
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But
, then
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sometimes
, I
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come
across
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some
adverts that amuse me from
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time
to
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time
. I will talk about one such TV commercial
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today
which I
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saw
at my home a while ago.

This is a
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“car
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advertisement”
where Mercedes
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Car
is congratulating “BMW”
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Car
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company
, the fierce competitor of Mercedes
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car
, on its 100th anniversary with a
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very
cheeky message that writes “Thanks for 100 years of competition. The previous 30 years were somewhat dull”.
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The ad
also
displays the signature “kidney grille” symbol of BMW
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car
, which
is located
at the front and in the middle of two front headlights, while
also
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very
cleverly
‘illuminating’ the message
right
below the signature “grille” in order to remind the BMW
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car
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company
that Mercedes is a “senior campaigner” in the
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car
manufacturing industry.
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The
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advertisement
was displayed
on a plain dark background the entire
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time
with a contrasting white
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colour
message in order to render to
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keep
it as much simple as possible.

I
really
,
really
like and remember this
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advertisement
mainly
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because
it is
so
simple with no background music or voice to draw the attention of its audience and
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keep
them engaged. In fact, I put this commercial in the category of “telling
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many
things without saying anything”. I
also
like this
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advertisement
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because
of its “unique theme” where it
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shows
that a particular
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company
is
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very
much able to promote its products while
actually
congratulating its competitors
also
at the same
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time
in a
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very
graceful, and
yet
, clever manner.
Finally
, I like this ad
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because
Mercedes has managed to throw a “subtle’ challenge in “congratulatory” tone that BMW would never
really
be able to “
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outcompete
” its senior competitor no matter how
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hard
it tries.
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19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an advertisement that you remember. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
379 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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