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Describe a memorable event in your life. v.1

Describe a memorable event in your life. v. 1
Describe a memorable event in your life. You should say: when the event took place where the event took place what happened exactly and explain why this event is memorable to you. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer: Life is full of many, many events. While we tend to forget most of these events, some of them do stick to our memories because of their profound meanings and values to us. Anyway, I would like to talk about one such event which, well, has helped me become the person I am today. It was about 10 years ago, and I had just finished high school while still living with my parents in my home town. So, naturally, it was time for me to go to a university. But, I didn’t want to attend just “any” university as I had prepared myself, at least I thought so during that period of time, for attending the best business college in my country except, of course, I needed to pass a very hard and comprehensive university admission test before I could actually fulfil my dream. Anyway, as if passing a hard test wasn’t enough of a problem, when I took the test, I was actually suffering from some really bad cough and fever. So, naturally, I thought that I wasn’t going to pass the test. But, luckily, to the best surprise of my life, I did pass the admission test, and I did manage to attend the University of my dream, far away from my home town. This event was memorable to me mainly because it was after this event I started to feel more confident, which I really lacked up until that point, about my life and its overall goals. Besides, it made me feel really happy and emotional because my years of hard works and efforts had finally paid off, even though none of my family members or friends believed that I could actually pass the test because of my illness. Finally, and probably very importantly also, it allowed me to explore my life and the world around me on my own, away from the comfort of staying at home with my parents, while studying at one of best universities in my country.
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Describe
a memorable
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event
in your
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life
. You should say: when the
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event
took place where the
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event
took place what happened exactly and
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explain
why this
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event
is memorable to you. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
Model Answer:
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Life
is full of
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many
,
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many
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events
. While we tend to forget most of these
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events
,
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some
of them do stick to our memories
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because
of their profound meanings and values to us.
Anyway
, I would like to talk about one such
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event
which,
well
, has
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helped
me become the person I am
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today
.

It was about 10 years ago, and I had
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just
finished high school while
still
living with my parents in my home town.
So
,
naturally
, it was time for me to go to a
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university
.
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But
, I didn’t want to attend
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just
“any”
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university
as I had prepared myself, at least I
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thought
so
during that period of time, for attending the best business college in my country except,
of course
, I needed to pass a
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very
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hard
and comprehensive
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university
admission
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test
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before
I could
actually
fulfil my dream.
Anyway
, as if passing a
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hard
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test
wasn’t
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enough
of a problem, when I took the
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test
, I was
actually
suffering from
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some
really
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bad
cough and fever.
So
,
naturally
, I
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thought
that I wasn’t going to pass the
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test
.
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But
, luckily, to the best surprise of my
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life
, I did pass the admission
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test
, and I did manage to attend the
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University
of my dream, far away from my home town.

This
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event
was memorable to me
mainly
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because
it was after this
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event
I
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started
to feel more confident, which I
really
lacked up until that point, about my
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life
and its
overall
goals.
Besides
, it made me feel
really
happy and emotional
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because
my years of
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hard
works and efforts had
finally
paid off,
even though
none of my family members or friends believed that I could
actually
pass the
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test
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because
of my illness.
Finally
, and
probably
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very
importantly
also
, it
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allowed
me to explore my
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life
and the world around me on my
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own
, away from the comfort of staying at home with my parents, while studying at one
A determiner is probably missing here: "of the best".
of best
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universities
in my country.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS speaking Describe a memorable event in your life. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
406 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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