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Describe a visit you have made to a member of your family. v.1

Describe a visit you have made to a member of your family. v. 1
Describe a visit you have made to a member of your family. You should say: whom you visited why you visited him/her how long was the visit and explain why this visit was particularly important to you.   Model Answer 1: I have been lucky to have many family members, like uncles, cousins and aunts, in addition to my parents and siblings, who I like to visit as often as I can. After all, our family members are and should always be the most important persons in our lives. Needless to say, I also recognize the importance of this close bond among the family members, and hence the recent visit, which I am about to talk. Anyway, the person, I visited, was one of my older cousins at his house about a few months ago because he suffered some major injuries in an accident. By the way, I and my older cousin have a very special relationship because it was him who taught me a lot of things, like flying kite, fishing in a lake and riding a bicycle, among many other things. In fact, he has always treated me like his own younger brother, he never had. So, when I learned about his injuries, I immediately decided to visit him except, of course, I had a lot of pending tasks at my job, and my boss just didn’t want me to leave the office unless I had taken care of those tasks. So, I had to wait a couple of days before I could get out of my town and travel about 8 hours in order to see my injured cousin. As soon as he saw me in his room, he wanted to get up from his bed and give me a hug. But, I asked him not to rush because I was there to spend the next day. By the way, my visit made my cousin so happy that he spent the rest of the evening by talking about the memories from our old days. Well, the visit was particularly important to me because my cousin had always treated me in a very special way in the past, and I wanted to show to him that I would always be on his side. Besides, the visit was also important to me because I hadn’t seen him in a long time.   Sample Answer 2: I live in a different city other than my hometown where my parents live and two of my sisters got married and they live in two different places. I often visit my hometown and a few times I visited my sisters' houses as well. I would like to talk about the visit I had to my eldest sister's house a few months back. It was not a pre-planned visit. I went to my sister's house as soon as I heard that my little niece got sick and my brother-in-law was out of the country at that time. After I heard the news of my niece's sickness, I packed my stuff and left for my hometown. There I met my parents and stayed for about 2 hours or so. My journey to my hometown took around 4 hours. Then I took some home-made foods and other stuff for my sister and my niece which my mother gave me and then left for my sister's house. The journey took another 3 hours and I took a public bus, a taxi and finally a CNG four-wheeler. I had to be there to help my sister and take care of my 8 years old niece who got ill. No other male family member was present at the house that time and I was a great help for my sister. As my niece was very sick, my sister needed someone to mentally support her and help her with some works as well. I called the doctor, purchased fruits and medicines and took my niece to the diagnostic centre for test and reports as well. For all those reasons I had to go there and my presence, there was utmost important.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe a place you have recently visited. Describe a trip to your relative’s house. Describe a journey you recently had. Describe a long tour you recently had. Describe a relative whom you have recently visited.
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Describe
a
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visit
you have made to a
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member
of your
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family
. You should say: whom you
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visited
why you
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visited
him/her how long was the
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visit
and
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explain
why this
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visit
was
particularly
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important
to you.
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Model Answer 1:

I have been lucky to have
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many
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family
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members
, like uncles,
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cousins
and aunts,
in addition
to my parents and siblings, who I like to
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visit
as
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often
as I can.
After all
, our
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family
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members
are and should always be the most
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important
persons in our
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lives
.
Needless to say
, I
also
recognize the importance of this close bond among the
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family
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members
, and
hence
the recent
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visit
, which I am about to talk.

Anyway
, the person, I
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visited
, was one of my older
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cousins
at his
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house
about a few months ago
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because
he suffered
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some
major injuries in an accident. By the way, I and my older
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cousin
have a
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very
special relationship
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because
it was him who taught me
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a lot of
things, like flying kite, fishing in a lake and riding a bicycle, among
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many
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other
things. In fact, he has always treated me like his
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own
younger brother, he never had.
So
, when I learned about his injuries, I immediately decided to
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visit
him except,
of course
, I had
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a lot of
pending tasks at my job, and my boss
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just
didn’t want me to
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leave
the office unless I had taken care of those tasks.

So
, I had to wait a couple of days
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before
I could
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get
out of my town and travel about 8
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hours
in order to
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see
my injured
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cousin
. As
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soon
as he
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saw
me in his room, he wanted to
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get
up from his bed and give me a hug.
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But
, I asked him not to rush
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because
I was there to spend the
next
day. By the way, my
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visit
made my
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cousin
so
happy that he spent the rest of the evening by talking about the memories from our
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old
days.

Well
, the
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visit
was
particularly
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important
to me
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because
my
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cousin
had always treated me in a
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very
special way in the past, and I wanted to
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show
to him that I would always be on his side.
Besides
, the
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visit
was
also
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important
to me
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because
I hadn’t
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seen
him in a long time.
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Sample Answer 2:

I
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live
in a
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different
city
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other
than my
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hometown
where my parents
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live
and two of my
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sisters
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got
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married and
they
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live
in two
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different
places. I
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often
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visit
my
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hometown
and a few times I
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visited
my sisters'
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houses
as
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well
.
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I
would like to talk about the
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visit
I had to my eldest sister's
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house
a few months back. It was not a
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pre-planned
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visit
. I went to my sister's
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house
as
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soon
as I heard that my
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little
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niece
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got
sick and my brother-in-law was out of the country at that time.

After I heard the news of my niece's sickness, I packed my stuff and
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left
for my
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hometown
. There I met my parents and stayed for about 2
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hours
or
so
. My journey to my
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hometown
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took
around 4
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hours
. Then I
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took
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some
home-made foods and
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other
stuff for my
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sister
and my
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niece
which my mother gave me and then
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left
for my sister's
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house
. The journey
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took
another 3
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hours
and I
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took
a public bus, a taxi and
finally
a CNG four-wheeler.

I had to be there to
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help
my
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sister
and take care of my 8 years
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old
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niece
who
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got
ill. No
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other
male
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family
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member
was present at the
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house
that
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time and
I was a great
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help
for my
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sister
. As my
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niece
was
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very
sick, my
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sister
needed someone to mentally support her and
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help
her with
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some
works as
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well
. I called the doctor,
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purchased
fruits and medicines and
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took
my
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niece
to the diagnostic
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centre
for
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test
and reports as
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well
. For all those reasons I had to go there and my presence, there was utmost
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important
.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
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well
:
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Describe
a place you have
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recently
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visited
.
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Describe
a trip to your relative’s
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house
.
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Describe
a journey you
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recently
had.
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Describe
a long tour you
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recently
had.
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Describe
a relative whom you have
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recently
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visited
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
91Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a visit you have made to a member of your family. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
8 paragraphs
743 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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