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Describe a time when you were excited. v. 1

Describe a time when you were excited. You should say: when it was where you were who were with you and explain why you were so excited. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: Many things happen in our life that make us happy and excited. So, anyway, today I would like to talk about one of those many things that made me excited immensely, and it was when I got my first job about 10 years ago. Back then, I had just finished my university study and came back to my hometown in order to live with my parents up until I found a job. Of course, my parents were not exactly in a hurry like me, as far as finding a job was concerned since they rather wanted me to stay with them and start some kind of business instead of finding a job. But, I wanted to get a job in a big city and leave my little, old town. So, I started to apply for jobs, one after another, but soon I realized that getting a decent job wasn’t exactly a very easy thing. But, I didn’t want to give up on my mission of looking for a job. So, for the next 8/9 months, all I did was to search for new jobs everywhere and apply for them. Then, one day, I got an interview call from one of the prestigious accounting firms of my country, and that too was from a town which wasn’t too far away from me. Then, the life-changing moment arrived one day when I got an interview call from one of the renowned accounting firms of my country and was offered a job on the spot. It was one of the most exciting moments of my life, but unfortunately, there was nobody with me then to share the excitement. Anyway, I was so excited because it opened up many windows of opportunities that were lying ahead of my life. I was thrilled also because it would allow me to move out of my little town and explore the world a little on my own. Finally, needless to say, the prospect of earning a lot of money in the future was also something which excited me after getting my first job.

IELTS speaking Describe a time when you were excited. v.1

Describe
a time when you were
excited
. You should say: when it was where you were who were with you and
explain
why you were
so
excited
. [You will
have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
think
about what you are going to say. You can
make
some
notes to
help
you if you wish.
]
 
Model Answer:
Many
things happen in our life that
make
us happy and
excited
.
So
, anyway,
today
I would like to talk about one of those
many
things that made me
excited
immensely
, and it was when I
got
my
first
job
about 10 years ago. Back then, I had
just
finished my university study and came back to my hometown in order to
live
with my parents up until I found a
job
.
Of course
, my parents were not exactly in a hurry like me, as far as finding a
job
was concerned
since they
rather
wanted me to stay with them and
start
some
kind of business
instead
of finding a
job
.
But
, I wanted to
get
a
job
in a
big
city and
leave
my
little
,
old
town.
So
, I
started
to apply for
jobs
, one after another,
but
soon
I realized that getting a decent
job
wasn’t exactly a
very
easy thing.
But
, I didn’t want to give up on my mission of looking for a
job
.
So
, for the
next
8/9 months, all I did
was
to search for new
jobs
everywhere and apply for them. Then, one day, I
got
an interview call from one of the prestigious accounting firms of my country, and that too was from a town which wasn’t too far away from me. Then, the life-changing moment arrived one day when I
got
an interview call from one of the renowned accounting firms of my country and
was offered
a
job
on the spot. It was one of the most exciting moments of my life,
but
unfortunately, there was nobody with me then to share the excitement. Anyway, I was
so
excited
because
it opened up
many
windows of opportunities that were lying ahead of my life. I
was thrilled
also
because
it would
allow
me to
move
out of my
little
town and explore the world a
little
on my
own
.
Finally
, needless to say, the prospect of earning
a lot of
money in the future was
also
something which
excited
me after getting my
first
job
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Speaking
6 paragraphs
414 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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