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Describe a time when you travelled with an old person. v. 1

Describe a time when you travelled with an old person. You should say: when it was who the person was where you were going/travelling and explain how you felt about travelling with this old person. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: To me, travelling is always fun whether I am travelling with young people or “not-so” young people. All we need to do is to plan properly and execute them to perfection. However, if you are travelling with an elderly person who is a little sick, things can become a bit tricky. Let me describe a time when I travelled with one of my paternal grandfathers (my grandfather had two brothers) to treat his age-related illness about a few years ago. We were travelling on a non-stop train. The destination was one of the best hospitals in the capital city of my country which was about 300 kilometres away from my home town. So far, so good! How I felt about travelling with my old grandfather? Well, let’s just say, it was not easy.   In fact, it wasn’t exactly supposed to be easy when an old man in his late 70’s behaved like a 7-year old more often than not. In fact, it was a challenge for me to prevent him from falling at times when my old grandfather, very much young at heart, would decide to walk inside a moving train, simply because he was getting “bored” of sitting on his chair after every thirty minutes or so. On top of that, the concern on whether he was getting medicines on time was always ready to ‘alert’ me in case if I was becoming a bit too “relaxed” with my duties to keep my grandfather “alive and well”. However, one of the most remarkable feelings which I went through while travelling with my grandfather, was that I felt like I was “limited” in my power as if I could do things, whatever they may be, only if they were “not harming” my elderly and ill grandfather. But, the moments of laugh were there as well when my “funny” grandfather chose to make jokes about his good old days at schools. In fact, it was quite refreshing and amusing for me to learn the “secrets” on how my “naughty” grandfather would “skip” his schools to watch football matches by riding on his semi-broken bicycle, only to find it completely broken in the middle of nowhere.   However, the best moment of our travel arrived when my grandfather called me his best grandson, reminding me once again about probably the most natural, durable and loving bond between a grandfather and grandson.

IELTS speaking Describe a time when you travelled with an old person. v.1

Describe
a time when you travelled with an
old
person. You should say: when it was who the person was where you were going/travelling and
explain
how you felt about travelling with this
old
person. [You will
have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
think
about what you are going to say. You can
make
some
notes to
help
you if you wish.
]
 
Model Answer 1: To me, travelling is always fun whether I am travelling with young
people
or “not-
so
” young
people
. All we need to do is to plan
properly
and execute them to perfection.
However
, if you are travelling with an elderly person who is a
little
sick, things can become a bit tricky.
Let
me
describe
a time when I travelled with one of my paternal grandfathers (my grandfather had two brothers) to treat his age-related illness about a few years ago. We were travelling on a non-
stop
train. The destination was one of the best hospitals in the capital city of my country which was about 300
kilometres
away from my home town.
So
far,
so
good
! How I felt about travelling with my
old
grandfather? Well,
let
’s
just
say, it was not easy.
 
In fact, it wasn’t exactly supposed to be easy when an
old
man
in his late
70’s
behaved like a 7-year
old
more
often
than not. In fact, it was a challenge for me to
prevent
him from falling at times when my
old
grandfather,
very
much young at heart, would decide to walk inside a moving train,
simply
because
he was getting “bored” of sitting on his chair after every thirty minutes or
so
.
On top of that
, the concern on whether he was getting medicines on time was always ready to ‘alert’ me in case if I was becoming a bit too “relaxed” with my duties to
keep
my grandfather “alive and well”.
However
, one of the most remarkable feelings which I went through while travelling with my grandfather, was that I felt like I was “limited” in my power as if I could do things, whatever they may be,
only
if they were “not harming” my elderly and ill grandfather.
But
, the moments of laugh were there
as well
when my “
funny
” grandfather chose to
make
jokes about his
good
old
days at schools. In fact, it was quite refreshing and amusing for me to learn the “secrets” on how my “naughty” grandfather would “skip” his schools to
watch
football matches by riding on his semi-broken bicycle,
only
to find it completely broken in the middle of nowhere.
 
However
, the best moment of our travel arrived when my grandfather called me his best grandson, reminding me once again about
probably
the most natural, durable and loving bond between a grandfather and grandson.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
61Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
3 paragraphs
477 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Band score ≤ 6