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Describe an interesting talk or lecture you have heard or attended to. v.1

Describe an interesting talk or lecture you have heard or attended to. v. 1
Describe an interesting talk or lecture you have heard or attended to. You should say: who was the speaker when and where you heard/attended it what it was about and explain why you think it was interesting.   [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: I take a great deal of interest in the climate change that has been affecting our planet for centuries. So, whenever there is a talk or lecture on climate change, I seldom miss it whether it is discussed in a seminar or broadcast on the National Geographic channel. So, when I came to know about such a lecture on “global warming” to be addressed by one of the most notable NASA scientists, I was quite excited. The lecture was broadcast about 2 years ago on the National Geographic TV channel.    The lecture methodically tried to highlight the damages on our earth caused by global warming and climate change. The very learned and distinguished lecturer presented the effects of greenhouse gases while saying how the Antarctic and the Greenland ice sheets were melting, sea level was rising around the world, as well as how the wildlife was on the verge of becoming extinct because of an extreme weather pattern. Before ending his lecture, the distinguished scientist didn’t forget to warn us as to how the future/fate of our planet hung on the balance if we didn’t take immediate measures to slow the global warming caused by us greedy humans. Indicating the extreme weather events such as El Nino, the lecturer also reminded us how the changes that had historically taken thousands of years to occur were happening in the course of decades. The lecture was becoming more and more interesting as it continued for almost 2 hours, presenting the facts and information on how we humans have gradually destroyed our planet because of our unabated greed to power our modern lives. In fact, the lecture was quite worrisome for a native of a small island nation like me which, according to the lecture, would submerge in the ocean because of the rise in the sea level by 2050. In fact, the threat of global warming is so real that even the former US vice president travelled from one corner of the world to another in order to raise awareness about its negative impact. After following the lecture the entire time, I didn’t have even a shadow of doubt in my mind that climate change was and still is the biggest challenge to the existence of our planet.
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Describe
an interesting talk or
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lecture
you have heard or attended to. You should say: who was the speaker when and where you heard/attended it what it was about and
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explain
why you
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think
it was interesting.
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[You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
Loose punctuation mark.
]
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Model Answer 1: I take a great deal of interest in the
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climate
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change
that has been affecting our
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planet
for centuries.
So
, whenever there is a talk or
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lecture
on
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climate
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change
, I seldom miss it whether it
is discussed
in a seminar or broadcast on the National Geographic channel.
So
, when I came to know about such a
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lecture
on
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“global
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warming”
to
be addressed
by one of the most notable NASA scientists, I was quite excited. The
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lecture
was broadcast about 2 years ago on the National Geographic TV channel.
Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
  
The
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lecture
methodically
tried to highlight the damages on our earth caused by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
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warming
and
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climate
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change
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
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very
learned and distinguished lecturer presented the effects of greenhouse gases while saying how the Antarctic and the Greenland ice sheets were melting, sea level was rising around the world, as
well
as how the wildlife was on the verge of becoming extinct
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because
of an extreme weather pattern.
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Before
ending his
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lecture
, the distinguished scientist didn’t forget to warn us as to how the future/fate of our
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planet
hung on the balance if we didn’t take immediate measures to slow the
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global
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warming
caused by us greedy humans. Indicating the extreme weather
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events
such as
'El Nino' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "El Niño"
El Nino
, the lecturer
also
reminded us how the
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changes
that had
historically
taken thousands of years to occur were happening in the course of decades. The
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lecture
was becoming more and more interesting as it continued for almost 2 hours, presenting the facts and information on how we humans have
gradually
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destroyed
our
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planet
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because
of our unabated greed to power our modern
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lives
. In fact, the
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lecture
was quite worrisome for a native of a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
island nation like me which, according to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lecture
, would submerge in the ocean
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the rise in the sea level by 2050. In fact, the threat of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
warming
is
so
real that even the former US vice president travelled from one corner of the world to another in order to raise awareness about its
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact. After following the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lecture
the entire time, I didn’t have even a shadow of doubt in my mind that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
climate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
change
was and
still
is the biggest challenge to the existence of our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
planet
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an interesting talk or lecture you have heard or attended to. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
1 paragraphs
457 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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