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Describe a piece of good news that you heard/received/read on the internet. v.1

Describe a piece of good news that you heard/received/read on the internet. v. 1
Describe a piece of good news that you heard/received/read on the internet. You should say: what news it was when and where you heard/received/read it how the news affected you and explain how you felt about it.   [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: Not sure why they say that no news is good news. Then again, there are just so many depressing and negative news ruling the world of today’s media, be it on the internet, TV or newspapers, it is just hard to disagree except, of course, there is news of different “kind” which is full of life and positivity. Today, I will talk about such a piece of news that I read on the internet about a couple of months ago at my work while doing some work-related research. The news was about how a group of generous grocery business owners in my hometown decided to donate at least 50% of their profits to the poor and needy people in our town for whole one month every year. I read the news and more details about it on a local news portal and it would be almost three or four months ago. I took the news as a very positive development in the attitude of our business owners who, up until then, were not very famous for their ”generosity”.   I knew that it was good for average citizens who were struggling to keep up with the increasing inflation in their daily lives. In fact, after reading the news, I decided to find out more about it and then spread it among my friends and relatives.   Later on, I, along with some of my friends, took some initiatives to convince other business owners as well, who were involved with other kinds of businesses except grocery, to do the same. Besides, I also wrote to the local tax authority in order to offer such business owners a good “tax break” for their magnanimity. Anyway, after reading the news, my first reaction was to give them a big “thank you” immediately for displaying such a nice “gesture” of help toward the less privileged section of our society. In fact, I became a bit emotional as well because of such a great act of benevolence which surely would help many struggling families in my town to make their ends meet. But, above all, I was actually very proud of our fellow business community who showed the way to share with each other at a time of our needs.
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Describe
a piece of
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good
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news
that you heard/received/read on the internet. You should say: what
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it was when and where you heard/received/read it how the
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news
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affected
you and
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explain
how you felt about it.
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[You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer 1: Not sure why they say that no
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is
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good
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. Then again, there are
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just
so
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many
depressing and
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negative
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news
ruling the world of
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today
’s media, be it on the internet, TV or newspapers, it is
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just
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hard
to disagree except,
of course
, there is
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news
of
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different
“kind” which is full of life and positivity.
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Today
, I will talk about such a piece of
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news
that I read on the internet about a couple of months ago at my work while doing
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some
work-related research. The
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news
was about how a group of generous grocery
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business
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owners
in my hometown decided to donate at least 50% of their profits to the poor and needy
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people
in our town for whole one month every year.

I read the
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news
and more
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details
about it on a local
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portal and it would be almost three or four months ago.

I took the
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news
as a
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very
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positive
development in the attitude of our
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business
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owners
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who
, up until then, were not
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very
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famous
for their
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”generosity
”.
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I
knew that it was
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good
for average citizens
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who
were struggling to
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keep
up with the increasing inflation in their daily
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lives
. In fact, after reading the
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, I decided to find out more about it and then spread it among my friends and relatives.
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Later on, I, along with
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some
of my friends, took
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some
initiatives to convince other
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business
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owners
as
well
,
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who
were involved
with other kinds of
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businesses
except grocery, to do the same.
Besides
, I
also
wrote to the local tax authority in order to offer such
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business
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owners
a
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good
“tax break” for their magnanimity.

Anyway
, after reading the
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news
, my
first
reaction was to give them a
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big
“thank you” immediately for displaying such a nice “gesture” of
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help
toward the less privileged section of our society. In fact, I became a bit emotional as
well
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because
of such a great act of benevolence which
surely
would
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help
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many
struggling families in my town to
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make
their ends
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meet
.
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But
,
above all
, I was
actually
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very
proud of our fellow
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business
community
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who
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showed
the way to share with each other at a time of our needs.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a piece of good news that you heard/received/read on the internet. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
455 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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