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Describe a remote/faraway place where you would like to visit. v.1

Describe a remote/faraway place where you would like to visit. v. 1
Describe a remote/faraway place where you would like to visit. You should say: where it is how far it is from your living place when and how would you go there and explain why you would like to visit this place. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: I like to visit different places whether they are close by or far away from me. In fact, sometimes, I just wish that I had a lot of money and time so that I could visit all the beautiful places all around the world. But one of the remote places, that I would really like to visit, is called Hornby Island in British Columbia, Canada. It is a Salish Sea Island, located near Vancouver Island's Comox Valley. While it is only about 185 kilometres from the city of Vancouver, but from where I live, which is Calgary, it is quite a far distance of about 1155 kilometres via Trans-Canada Highway. I would like to visit this beautiful small island next summer where a small community of about 1000 residents live. I am planning to drive to the city of Vancouver first, and then from there, I would need to travel by ferries, three ferries to be precise, which could actually take the better part of the day to reach the magical island of Hornby. I would like to visit this place mainly because I have heard so much about this place since I was growing up as a young boy. Somebody calls it the “Jewell of the gulf” while the others like to call it the “Hawaii of the North” since it has warm waters and sandy beaches.   And, yes, I just love warm waters and sandy beaches. I would also like to visit this place because it is an incredibly beautiful place with its simple, rural and relaxed atmosphere. Of course, needless to say, I also want to visit the island for its breath-taking views with its spectacular blue sky towering the blue ocean underneath. Finally, I have always wondered to see how an island with such a tiny population can survive and thrive while attracting several thousands of tourists every year!
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Describe
a remote/faraway
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place
where you would like to
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visit
. You should say: where it is how far it is from your living
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place
when and how would you go there and
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explain
why you would like to
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visit
this
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place
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
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Model Answer 1: I like to
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visit
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different
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places
whether they are close by or far away from me. In fact,
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sometimes
, I
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just
wish that I had
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a lot of
money and time
so
that I could
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visit
all the
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beautiful
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places
all around the world.
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But
one of the remote
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places
, that I would
really
like to
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visit
,
is called
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Hornby
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Island
in British Columbia, Canada. It is a Salish Sea
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Island
, located near Vancouver Island's
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Comox
Valley. While it is
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only
about 185
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kilometres
from the city of Vancouver,
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but
from where I
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live
, which is Calgary, it is quite a far distance of about 1155
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kilometres
via Trans-Canada Highway.

I would like to
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visit
this
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beautiful
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small
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island
next
summer where a
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small
community of about 1000 residents
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live
. I am planning to drive to the city of Vancouver
first
, and then from there, I would need to travel by ferries, three ferries to be precise, which could
actually
take the better part of the day to reach the magical
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island
of
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Hornby
.

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I
would like to
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visit
this
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place
mainly
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because
I have heard
so
much about this
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place
since I was growing up as a young boy. Somebody calls it the “Jewell of the gulf” while the others like to call it the “Hawaii of the North” since it has warm waters and sandy beaches.
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And, yes, I
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just
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love
warm waters and sandy beaches.

I would
also
like to
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visit
this
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place
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because
it is an
incredibly
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beautiful
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place
with its simple, rural and relaxed atmosphere.
Of course
,
needless to say
, I
also
want to
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visit
the
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island
for its breath-taking views with its spectacular blue sky towering the blue ocean underneath.
Finally
, I have always wondered to
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see
how an
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island
with such a tiny population can survive and thrive while attracting several thousands of tourists every year!
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a remote/faraway place where you would like to visit. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
397 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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