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Describe a time when someone gave you something you really wanted. v.1

Describe a time when someone gave you something you really wanted. v. 1
Describe a time when someone gave you something you really wanted. You should say: what it was when it was who gave it to you and explain how you felt when the person gave it to you. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: I try not to expect anything from other people when it comes to material possession. But, there are times when we surprisingly end up getting something even when we don’t expect it. Today, I would like to talk about one such occasion when someone offered me something that I really wanted. It was back in the year 2016 when I was still a university student. Back then, I used to live at a university hostel, as it was a residential university, so I didn’t really need to use any transportation to travel back and forth to my university. Suddenly, one day, an official order came from the university authority, ordering all the students to vacate the hostel for a couple of weeks, as the building needed some kind renovation works. By the way, I think that it was an emergency situation as I had heard some news of accident earlier, involving electric short-circuit and fire.   So, the university authority was very much within its right to deal with the problem on an emergency basis. However, while it was nice on the part of my university authority to deal with the building issue rather quickly, it failed to arrange some kind of suitable accommodation for us, close to the university. But, still, there was no other option for us except moving to our new residences, even though we would need to walk some distance to commute back and forth from our university. So, I thought, it would be great if I could somehow buy or manage a bicycle for my use. I even decided to buy a bicycle at some point.   But, when one of my distant uncles heard about my situation and offered me to use his old bicycle, which he didn’t use anymore, I just couldn’t refuse his kind offer. Anyway, I felt really glad and grateful that my uncle took the time to consider my situation and decided to help me out. Besides, the offer also brought the “child” in me back again as I thought that I could use the bicycle to roam freely and become little “adventurous” for a while.
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a time when someone gave you something you
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wanted. You should say: what it was when it was who gave it to you and
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explain
how you felt when the person gave it to you. [You will
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talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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you if you wish.
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Model Answer:

I try not to
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expect
anything from other
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people
when it
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comes
to material possession.
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But
, there are times when we
surprisingly
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end
up getting something even when we don’t
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expect
it.
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Today
, I would like to talk about one such occasion when someone offered me something that I
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really
wanted.

It was
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back
in the year 2016 when I was
still
a
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university
student.
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Back
then, I
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used
to
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live
at a
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university
hostel, as it was a residential
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university
,
so
I didn’t
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really
need to
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use
any transportation to travel
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back
and forth to my
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university
.
Suddenly
, one day, an official order came from the
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university
authority, ordering all the students to vacate the hostel for a couple of weeks, as the building needed
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some
kind renovation works.

By the way, I
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think
that it was an emergency situation as I had heard
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some
news of accident earlier, involving electric short-circuit and fire.
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So
, the
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university
authority was
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very
much within its
right
to deal with the problem on an emergency basis.
However
, while it was nice on the part of my
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university
authority to deal with the building issue
rather
quickly
, it failed to arrange
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some
kind of suitable accommodation for us, close to the
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university
.
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But
,
still
, there was no other option for us except moving to our new residences,
even though
we would need to walk
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some
distance to commute
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back
and forth from our university.

So
, I
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thought
, it would be great if I could somehow
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buy
or manage a
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bicycle
for my
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use
. I even decided to
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buy
a
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bicycle
at
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some
point.
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But
, when one of my distant uncles heard about my situation and offered me to
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use
his
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old
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bicycle
, which he didn’t
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use
anymore, I
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just
couldn’t refuse his kind offer.

Anyway
, I felt
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really
glad and grateful that my uncle took the time to consider my situation and decided to
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help
me out.
Besides
, the offer
also
brought the “child” in me
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back
again as I
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thought
that I could
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use
the
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bicycle
to roam
freely
and become
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little
“adventurous” for a while.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS speaking Describe a time when someone gave you something you really wanted. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
434 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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