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Describe a success your friend has had that you are proud of. v. 1

Describe a success your friend has had that you are proud of. You should say: what success it was how he/she achieved it how easy or difficult it was for your friend and explain why you are proud of it.   [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: People say that nothing succeeds like success. So, we like to talk about it, whether it is ours or achieved by others, whenever an opportunity is presented. Today, I would like to talk about such success which surely would make anybody proud. This success belonged to one of my friends.   My friend, Travers, was an aspiring entrepreneur, and he wanted to establish himself as a successful entrepreneur since his early days as an adult. So, he decided to enter into the business of making garments products such as shirts and pants for the adults. But, the problem was that he neither had any prior working experience in that particular business sector, nor he received any formal training in the trade. So, it wasn’t exactly easy for my friend to get the entrepreneurial start that he expected.   But, he was a very determined lad, and he was not exactly ready to give up so easily. So, he decided to take a job at one of the garments factories with a very minimal wage in order to make him familiar with some of the tricks of running a garments business. It wasn’t an easy job to do since it involved long hours of manual works from unloading shipments to cuttings and sizing of hundreds of fabric pieces. He continued his back-breaking works there for almost a year, learning the nitty-gritty details of the business. Finally, he was ready- he was ready to set up his own business.   A few sewing machines and a few skilled technicians were all he needed to start his business. In the beginning, it was only a few orders from here and there with nothing consistent just to keep him going in his works with a very minimal profit. But, as time progressed, my friend would get out for collecting work orders from different businesses, all over the country, in order to make customized dresses for them. I guess it was during this crucial period of time, my friend sensed that something good was going. My friend finally got what he wanted after working tirelessly for almost two years.   I am really proud of my friend for what he achieved and how he achieved it. It was because of his hard works and sheer determination that he managed to become a successful entrepreneur at such an early age. In fact, there was tremendous pressure from his family to get a good job (since he graduated from university with good grades) instead of starting a business, but he didn’t succumb to the pressure and chose to carry on with his entrepreneurial pursuit even if it meant working for 16 hours a day and 30 days a month. I am also very proud of my friend because he was working for a greater purpose which was to create better working opportunities for the unemployed young adults, and I must say that he succeeded in achieving his goal to a large extent.     Model Answer 2: People say that the secret of success is to do the common thing uncommonly well, but seldom people understand that it takes a lot of times and efforts to be successful. However, it holds even truer when a woman raises her “flag of success” in this world because, after all, it is not really easy for a woman to be successful whether it is academically or professionally. But, my friend, Rebecca Lin, made “success” look really easy as she was only one of the two students in her 50 years of university history who managed to receive “Presidential Award” for her extraordinary academic records throughout her entire university years. But, did that success really come that easily? The answer is “no” because she had to go through a lot of hardship and sufferings during her university years. For example, she fell sick with Para-typhoid for more than three months during which period she seldom attended any classes. To make it even worse, at one point, her father (the only person in her family who was earning for the entire family, and they were a poor family also ) lost his job, and as a result, Rebecca had to work two shifts (16 hours) in order to support her family financially as well as attending university classes. Besides, she had to travel at least 3 hours a day in order to commute back and forth from her residence to school every day. Now, achieving such a great academic result after weathering so many difficulties was truly remarkable even for a man, let alone a woman. I am truly proud of my friend “Rebecca” not because she is my friend but because she is a woman, and as a woman myself, I am not too sure that I could ever achieve such a feat even under the best of the circumstances. Besides, she managed to fare so extraordinarily in a subject (she was studying “Chemical Engineering”) which was very difficult to study for a woman as she needed to spend a lot of hours in a lab.

IELTS speaking Describe a success your friend has had that you are proud of. v.1

Describe
a
success
your
friend
has had that you are
proud
of. You should say: what
success
it was how he/she
achieved
it how
easy
or difficult it was for your
friend
and
explain
why you are
proud
of it.
 
[You will
have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
think
about what you are going to say. You can
make
some
notes to
help
you if you wish.
]
 
Model Answer 1:
People
say that nothing succeeds like
success
.
So
, we like to talk about it, whether it is ours or
achieved
by others, whenever an opportunity
is presented
.
Today
, I would like to talk about such
success
which
surely
would
make
anybody
proud
. This
success
belonged to one of my
friends
.
 
My
friend
,
Travers
, was an aspiring entrepreneur, and he wanted to establish himself as a
successful
entrepreneur since his early days as an adult.
So
, he decided to enter into the
business
of making garments products such as shirts and pants for the adults.
But
, the problem was that he neither had any prior
working
experience in that particular
business
sector, nor he received any formal training in the trade.
So
, it wasn’t exactly
easy
for my
friend
to
get
the entrepreneurial
start
that he
expected
.
 
But
, he was a
very
determined lad, and he was not exactly ready to give up
so
easily
.
So
, he decided to take a
job
at one of the garments factories with a
very
minimal wage in
order
to
make
him familiar with
some of the
tricks of running a garments
business
. It wasn’t an
easy
job
to do since it involved long
hours
of manual works from unloading shipments to cuttings and sizing of hundreds of fabric pieces. He continued his back-breaking works there for almost a
year
, learning the nitty-gritty
details
of the
business
.
Finally
, he was ready- he was ready to set up his
own
business
.
 
A few sewing machines and a few skilled technicians were all he needed to
start
his
business
. In the beginning, it was
only
a few
orders
from here and there with nothing consistent
just
to
keep
him going in his works with a
very
minimal profit.
But
,
as time progressed
, my
friend
would
get
out for collecting
work
orders
from
different
businesses
, all over the country, in
order
to
make
customized dresses for them. I guess it was during this crucial period of time, my
friend
sensed that something
good
was going. My
friend
finally
got
what he wanted after
working
tirelessly
for almost two years.
 
I am
really
proud
of my
friend
for what he
achieved
and how he
achieved
it. It was
because
of his
hard
works and sheer determination that he managed to become a
successful
entrepreneur at such an early age. In fact, there was tremendous pressure from his
family
to
get
a
good
job
(since he graduated from
university
with
good
grades)
instead
of starting a
business
,
but
he didn’t succumb to the pressure and chose to carry on with his entrepreneurial pursuit even if it meant
working
for 16
hours
a day and 30 days a month. I am
also
very
proud
of my
friend
because
he was
working
for a greater purpose which was to create better
working
opportunities for the unemployed young adults, and I
must
say that he succeeded in achieving his goal to a large extent.
   
Model Answer 2:
People
say that the secret of
success
is to do the common thing
uncommonly
well,
but
seldom
people
understand that it takes
a lot of
times and efforts to be
successful
.
However
, it holds even truer when a
woman
raises her “flag of
success”
in this world
because
,
after all
, it is not
really
easy
for a
woman
to be
successful
whether it is
academically
or
professionally
.
But
, my
friend
, Rebecca Lin, made
“success”
look
really
easy
as she was
only
one of the two students in her 50 years of
university
history who managed to receive “Presidential Award” for her extraordinary academic records throughout her entire
university
years.
But
, did that
success
really
come
that
easily
? The answer is “no”
because
she had to go through
a lot of
hardship and sufferings during her
university
years.
For example
, she fell sick with Para-typhoid for more than three months during which period she seldom attended any classes. To
make
it even worse, at one point, her father (the
only
person in her
family
who was earning for the entire
family
, and they were a poor
family
also
)
lost his
job
, and
as a result
, Rebecca had to
work
two shifts (16
hours)
in
order
to support her
family
financially
as well
as attending
university
classes.
Besides
, she had to travel at least 3
hours
a day in
order
to
commute back and forth
from her residence to school every day.
Now
, achieving such a great academic result after weathering
so
many
difficulties was
truly
remarkable even for a
man
,
let
alone a woman. I am
truly
proud
of my
friend
“Rebecca” not
because
she is my
friend
but
because
she is a
woman
, and as a
woman
myself, I am not
too sure
that I could ever achieve such a feat even under the best of the circumstances.
Besides
, she managed to fare
so
extraordinarily
in a subject (she was studying “Chemical Engineering”) which was
very
difficult to study for a
woman
as she needed to spend
a lot of
hours
in a lab.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
96Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes
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3 paragraphs
928 words
5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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