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Describe something you have achieved and you are proud of. v.1

Describe something you have achieved and you are proud of. v. 1
Describe something you have achieved and you are proud of. You should say: what you have achieved when you have achieved it what was difficult about it and explain why you are proud of this achievement. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer 1: A few months ago I took part in a photography competition organized by a local museum and won the second title. I consider it a fabulous achievement and I am genuinely proud of this accomplishment. When I saw my photo in a daily newspaper as one of the winners, I was very exhilarated. Many of my relatives and friends congratulated me for the achievement and I am fortunate to have the chance to talk about it. I must thank you for that. I am not a professional shutterbug. I finished a basic course in photography two years ago. I still consider myself a learner, and this achievement is highly encouraging for me to go further. There were more than seven hundred contestants and being second in the final stage was not easy. The competition was announced in a local newspaper with the rules and policies to submit both digital and printed versions of the photos and I selected three best shots of mine and submitted those to the organizers. The photograph that won me the second prize depicted an old woman anxiously waiting at the station for someone to arrive. It perfectly blended her red dress and yellow hat with the station’s red and white colour. A glimpse of the approaching train was visible at a far distant. I took this snapshot in 2015 and had long revered it as one of my best works as an amateur photographer. The second prize brought me 700 dollars and a silver crest along with a certificate. The prize money was not significant, but from an inspirational point of view, this was priceless. It definitely boosted my motivation to continue my work, which I was often confused about and made me renowned to the contemporary aspiring photographers. I have every valid reason to be proud of this achievement, I guess.     Sample Answer 2: I am not sure if quitting smoking should be counted as a big achievement but to me, it was the supreme triumph in the past few years in my life. I would like to thank you for this nice cue card topic and the time you have allowed me to talk about one of my feats that I feel very proud of. I can't be sure how it started but in the third semester of my university, I found myself smoking cigarettes and without even noticing, this became a habit I could not leave behind. Initially, it was just curiosity and fun, but not after a few months when I was already a regular smoker. However, last year I finally stopped smoking as it was my only new year resolution and I feel great about it. To be more precise, I quit smoking on the 31st night in 2018. I have tried to quit smoking several times in the past 3 years and it was not easy. It was both a physical and psychological challenge to which I yielded and finally started this heinous habit again. But it was not the case on the 31st night in 2018. My determination helped me overcome this and achieve something I have failed several other times in my life. Smoking is a silent killer and a habit that no one should be in. The first time I tried to quit smoking was the time I realized how difficult it was. It was like iterating in a circle that does not close! The urge to puff a few more times never ended and I was feeling the lack of stamina when playing football or table tennis. I was quite determined, however, to get back to the stage when smoking was not a part of my life. Luckily I am without it for the last few months. This is, in fact, is one of the biggest achievements of my life. Model Answer 3:   I have always disliked being an “overweight” person, not only because it affects our health negatively, but also because it makes us look “out of shape”. But, that’s exactly what happened to me a few years ago, and I needed to get back in “shape” again by hook or by crook. So, I started to put a break on my eating habit by giving up on carbohydrate and meats- especially the “red meats” like beef and mutton. I controlled my diet like this for some times, but nothing really changed as far my body weight was concerned. To be honest, it wasn’t really easy to remain “starved” of the “good and tasty food” which I loved eating for such a long time previously. Anyway, seeing no reduction in body weight, I decided to walk for at least two hours every day. But, maintaining that routine walk wasn’t very easy either because I was short on time due to my rather busy work schedule. But, I promised to myself that I needed to lose my weight significantly in the next six months no matter how difficult it really was. To achieve my goal of “losing weight”, I even started to eat some fruits, which I had always avoided eating, in order bring some much-needed energy in me to carry on with the routine walk. Finally, after some tiring efforts of about 4 months, I started noticing that I was close to achieving my goal of losing weight. Anyway, I feel really proud of this achievement mainly because many of my friends and relatives had told me that I wouldn’t be able to lose my weight because I loved eating too much, and I was too lazy to do any physical work out for a long period of time. I feel proud of this achievement also because even though I really struggled to maintain my routine walk and food habit for almost six months, I managed to do everything on time and enjoy my life without much trouble which was even surprising for a lazy guy like myself!   Your readiness to describe something you have achieved and you are proud of would help you talk about the following topics also: 1. Describe a success in your life. 2. Describe something you used to do but no longer do. 3. Describe an important event in your life. 4. Describe something you would want to achieve in the near future.
Describe
something
you have
achieved
and you are
proud
of. You should say: what you have
achieved
when you have
achieved
it what was difficult about it and
explain
why you are
proud
of this
achievement
. [You will
have to
talk
about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
think
about what you are going to say. You can
make
some
notes to
help
you if you wish.
]
Model Answer 1: A few
months
ago I
took part
in a photography competition organized by a local museum and won the second title. I consider it a fabulous
achievement and
I am
genuinely
proud
of this accomplishment. When I
saw
my photo in a daily newspaper as one of the winners, I was
very
exhilarated.
Many
of my relatives and friends congratulated me for the
achievement and
I am fortunate to have the chance to
talk
about it. I
must
thank you for that. I am not a professional shutterbug.
I
finished a basic course in photography two years ago.
I
still
consider myself a learner, and this
achievement
is
highly
encouraging for me to go
further
. There were more than seven hundred contestants and being second in the final stage was not
easy
. The competition
was announced
in a local newspaper with the
rules
and policies to submit both digital and printed versions of the photos and I selected three best shots of mine and submitted those to the organizers. The photograph that won me the second prize depicted an
old
woman
anxiously
waiting at the station for someone to arrive. It
perfectly
blended her red dress and yellow hat with the station’s red and white
colour
. A glimpse of the approaching train was visible at a far distant. I took this snapshot in 2015 and had long revered it as one of my best works as an amateur photographer. The second prize brought me 700 dollars and a silver crest along with a certificate. The prize money was not significant,
but
from an inspirational point of view, this was priceless. It definitely boosted my motivation to continue my
work
, which I was
often
confused about and made me renowned to the contemporary aspiring photographers. I have every valid reason to be
proud
of this
achievement
,
I guess
.
   
Sample Answer 2: I am not sure if quitting
smoking
should
be counted
as a
big
achievement
but
to me, it was the supreme triumph in the past few years in my
life
. I would like to thank you for this nice cue card topic and the
time
you have
allowed
me to
talk
about one of my feats that I
feel
very
proud
of.

I can't be sure how it
started
but
in the third semester of my university, I found myself
smoking
cigarettes and without even noticing, this became a
habit
I could not
leave
behind.
Initially
, it was
just
curiosity and fun,
but
not after a few
months
when I was already a regular smoker.
However
, last
year
I
finally
stopped
smoking
as it was my
only
new
year
resolution and I
feel
great about it. To be more precise, I
quit
smoking
on the 31st night in 2018.

I have tried to
quit
smoking
several
times
in the past 3 years and it was not
easy
. It was both a physical and psychological challenge to which I yielded and
finally
started
this heinous
habit
again.
But
it was not the case on the 31st night in 2018. My determination
helped
me overcome this and achieve
something
I have failed several other
times
in my life.

Smoking is a silent killer and a
habit
that no one should be in. The
first
time
I tried to
quit
smoking
was the
time
I realized how difficult it was. It was like iterating in a circle that does not close! The urge to puff a few more
times
never
ended and
I was feeling the lack of stamina when playing football or table tennis. I was
quite
determined,
however
, to
get
back to the stage when
smoking
was not a part of my
life
. Luckily I am without it for the last few
months
. This is, in fact, is one of the biggest
achievements
of my life.

Model Answer 3:
 
I have always disliked being an “overweight” person, not
only
because
it affects our health
negatively
,
but
also
because
it
makes
us look “out of shape”.
But
, that’s exactly what happened to me a few years ago, and I needed to
get
back in “shape” again
by hook or by crook
.
So
, I
started
to put a break on my
eating
habit
by giving up on carbohydrate and meats-
especially
the “red meats” like beef and mutton. I controlled my diet like this for
some
times
,
but
nothing
really
changed
as far my body
weight
was concerned
. To be honest, it wasn’t
really
easy
to remain “starved” of the “
good
and tasty food” which I
loved
eating
for such a long
time
previously.
Anyway
, seeing no reduction in body
weight
, I decided to
walk
for at least two hours every day.
But
, maintaining that routine
walk
wasn’t
very
easy
either
because
I was short on
time
due to my
rather
busy
work
schedule.
But
, I promised to myself that I needed to lose my
weight
significantly
in the
next
six
months
no matter how difficult it
really
was. To achieve my goal of “losing
weight”
, I even
started
to eat
some
fruits, which I had always avoided
eating
, in order bring
some
much-needed energy in me to carry on with the routine
walk
.
Finally
, after
some
tiring efforts of about 4
months
, I
started
noticing that I was close to achieving my goal of losing
weight
.
Anyway
, I
feel
really
proud
of this
achievement
mainly
because
many
of my friends and relatives had
told
me that I wouldn’t be able to lose my
weight
because
I
loved
eating
too much, and I was too lazy to do any physical
work
out for a long period of
time
. I
feel
proud
of this
achievement
also
because
even though
I
really
struggled to maintain my routine
walk
and food
habit
for almost six
months
, I managed to do everything on
time
and enjoy my
life
without much trouble which was even surprising for a lazy guy like myself!
 
Your readiness to
describe
something
you have
achieved
and you are
proud
of would
help
you
talk
about the following topics
also
:

1.
Describe
a success in your
life. 2
.
Describe
something
you
used
to do
but
no longer do.

3.
Describe
an
important
event
in your
life. 4
.
Describe
something
you would want to achieve in the near future.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
111Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes
The most intimate temper of a people, its deepest soul, is above all in its language.
Jules Michelet

IELTS speaking Describe something you have achieved and you are proud of. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
9 paragraphs
1125 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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