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Describe a piece of work you did fairly quickly. v.1

Describe a piece of work you did fairly quickly. v. 1
Describe a piece of work you did fairly quickly. You should say: what work it was why you did it quickly how easy or difficult it was and explain what the result was.   [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer 1: I didn’t exactly fall in the category of “quick & fast” during my high school days unless, of course, I was really good at doing something. So, when I was asked to “organize” our shoe store by my father with the help of his store staffs within just a couple of hours in order to free up some space for the new arriving shipments, I was less than enthusiastic. This cue card topic reminds me of this day and I thank you for the opportunity you have given me to talk about it. The “fun” of moving the shoe boxes was on with me running almost at the speed of “Usain Bolt” (the Olympic champion sprinter from Jamaica) from one end of the store to the other. As if moving the big boxes, which probably weighed as much as me, if not more, weren’t difficult enough for me; I was faced with even a greater challenge of “pairing up” the lost shoes that were “running around” the store floor “pair-less”. Of course, putting back each and every pair of shoe boxes on the shoe racks in an organized manner along with swiping the floor wasn’t as much difficult as moving the large boxes and ‘pairing up’ the shoes, it was a challenge nonetheless. After all, back then, I wasn’t exactly a very strong boy with a strong “physique” to get the job done for my father! But, defying all of my expectations and that of my father’s as well, I was actually successful to give a completely new look to our store at the end of two-hour long tireless efforts. And the final result was a tidy looking store interior with more than enough empty space, which looked to me as big as a “football stadium” at that time! Of course, the empty space didn’t remain “empty” for long as the new shipment containing the new shoe boxes arrived shortly after I had finished looking at my “accomplishments” in wonder. Anyway, after that very demanding couple of hours, I often took the liberty to visit our shoe store and “push” (to put it mildly) the store staffs so that they would think at least hundred times before making the store look “untidy” again! And guess what, the results of that “little push” was simply astonishing, to say the least, as I never found the store to be “unkempt” again! Sample Answer 2: This topic reminds me of the day when I was late for my physics practical class at my college. I must thank you first for the time you have allowed me to talk about it.   My physics lab was supposed to start at 11. 30 am but I could not make it to the lab until 12. 15 pm. When I reached the lab and asked for the teacher's permission to join the class, the teacher pointed out his wristwatch to remind me that I was already late. He then told me that all other students in the lab are taking a class test and the mark would be added to our final score! He also mentioned that I will not be allowed any extra time and the test will end at 1. 00 pm. Frankly speaking, I was shocked that the teacher had decided to take an exam on the very day I was late! However, I was determined to take part in it and finish the test before 1. 00 pm. Personally, I think that it was a really difficult task especially because I learned about the experiment the week before and did not get the opportunity to examine it myself. And it was even more challenging since I had only around 40 minutes left to complete it.   I had to think and act really fast. The first thing I needed to do was to take the tools from the lab assistant and then concentrate on the question. I thought about the experiment the teacher showed us a week ago and the harder I tied, more difficult it seemed! I took a deep breath and started working on the "test".   My task was to find the value of "v" for different values of "u" in case of a concave mirror and to find the focal length. I quickly mounted the concave mirror in the mirror holder, moved the mirror forward and backwards to get a sharp image of the object on the wall. I needed to measure the rough focal length of the mirror and then followed several other steps to get the results of the experiments. I did not even notice the time and when the teacher declared that the time was up, I handed over my answer sheet to him.   Luckily I managed to finish the experiment and wrote down my findings on the answer sheet. I did everything so swiftly that I could not be sure whether I did good or ruined the whole experiment! When the teacher returned my answer sheet the next week, I was excited to notice that I managed B+ on this quickly done lab exam which was in a way quite inspiring for me.
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Describe
a piece of work you did
fairly
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quickly
. You should say: what work it was why you did it
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quickly
how easy or
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difficult
it was and
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explain
what the
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result
was.
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[You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]


Model
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Answer
1: I didn’t exactly fall in the category of “quick
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fast
” during my high school days unless,
of course
, I was
really
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good
at doing something.
So
, when I was
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asked to
“organize” our
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shoe
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store
by my father with the
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help
of his
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store
staffs within
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just
a couple of hours in order to free up
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some
space for the
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new
arriving shipments, I was less than enthusiastic. This cue card topic reminds me of this day and I thank you for the opportunity you have
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given
me to talk about it.

The “fun” of moving the
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shoe
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boxes
was on with me running almost at the speed of “
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Usain
Bolt” (the Olympic champion sprinter from Jamaica) from one
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end
of the
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store
to the other. As if moving the
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big
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boxes
, which
probably
weighed as much as me, if not more, weren’t
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difficult
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enough
for me; I
was faced
with even a greater challenge of “pairing up” the lost
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shoes
that were “running around” the
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store
floor “pair-less”.
Of course
, putting back each and every pair of
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shoe
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boxes
on the
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shoe
racks
Consider replacing "in an organized manner" with the adverb for "organized"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an organized manner
along with swiping the floor wasn’t as much
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difficult
as moving the large
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boxes
and ‘pairing up’ the
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shoes
, it was a challenge nonetheless.
After all
, back then, I wasn’t exactly a
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very
strong boy with a strong “physique” to
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get
the job done for my father!

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But
, defying all of my expectations and that of my father’s as
well
, I was
actually
successful to give a completely
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new
look to our
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store
at the
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end
of two-hour long tireless efforts. And the final
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result
was a tidy looking
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store
interior with more than
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enough
empty space, which looked to me as
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big
as a “football stadium” at that
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time
!
Of course
, the empty space didn’t remain “empty” for long as the
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new
shipment containing the
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new
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shoe
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boxes
arrived shortly after I had finished looking at my “accomplishments” in wonder.

Anyway
, after that
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very
demanding couple of hours, I
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often
took the liberty to visit our
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shoe
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store
and “push” (to put it
mildly
) the
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store
staffs
so
that they would
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think
at least
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hundred
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times
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before
making the
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store
look “untidy” again! And guess what, the
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results
of that “
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little
push” was
simply
astonishing, to say the least, as I never found the
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store
to be “unkempt” again!

Sample
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Answer
2: This topic reminds me of the day when I was late for my physics practical
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class
at my college. I
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must
thank you
first
for the
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time
you have
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allowed
me to talk about it.
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My physics
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lab
was supposed
to
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start
at 11. 30 am
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but
I could not
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make
it to the
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lab
until 12. 15 pm. When I reached the
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lab
and
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asked for
the teacher's permission to
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join
the
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class
, the
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teacher
pointed out his wristwatch to remind me that I was already late. He then
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told
me that all other students in the
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lab
are taking a
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class
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test
and the mark would be
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added
to our final score! He
also
mentioned that I will not be
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allowed
any extra
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time
and the
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test
will
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end
at 1. 00 pm.
Frankly
speaking, I
was shocked
that the
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teacher
had decided to take an exam on the
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very
day I was late!
However
, I
was determined
to
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take part
in it and finish the
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test
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before
1. 00 pm.
Personally
, I
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think
that it was a
really
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difficult
task
especially
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because
I learned about the
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experiment
the week
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before
and did not
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get
the opportunity to examine it myself. And it was even more challenging since I had
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only
around 40 minutes
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left
to complete it.
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I had to
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think
and act
really
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fast
. The
first
thing I needed to do was to take the tools from the
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lab
assistant and then concentrate on the question. I
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thought
about the
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experiment
the
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teacher
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showed
us a week ago and the harder I tied, more
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difficult
it seemed! I took a deep breath and
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started
working on the
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"
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test
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"
.
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My task was to find the value of
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"
v
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"
for
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different
values of
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"
u
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"
in case of a concave mirror and to find the focal length. I
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quickly
mounted the concave mirror in the mirror holder,
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moved
the mirror forward and backwards to
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get
a sharp image of the object on the wall. I needed to measure the rough focal length of the mirror and then followed several other steps to
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get
the
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results
of the
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experiments
.
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I
did not even notice the
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time
and when the
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teacher
declared that the
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time
was up, I handed over my
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answer
sheet to him.
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Luckily I managed to finish the
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experiment
and wrote down my findings on the
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answer
sheet. I did everything
so
swiftly
that I could not be sure whether I did
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good
or ruined the whole
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experiment
! When the
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teacher
returned my
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answer
sheet the
next
week, I
was excited
to notice that I managed B+ on this
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quickly
done
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lab
exam which was in a way quite inspiring for me.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
75Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a piece of work you did fairly quickly. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
935 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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