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Describe a famous person whom you admire. v.1

Describe a famous person whom you admire. v. 1
Describe a famous person whom you admire. You should say: who this person is what makes him/her famous where does he/she live  and explain why you admire him/her.   [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer 1: Having born and raised in one of the New York suburbs at the house of a dentist father in 1984, Mark Elliot Zuckerberg made his mark at an elementary school by getting interested in computer programming. But, little did anybody know at that time that the little “computer whiz” would revolutionize the concept of social media networking by creating a thing called “facebook. com” in 2004. Whatever followed after that is just 'history'. I would like to thank you for this nice topic and in my opinion, Zuckerberg is one of the most prolific and successful programmers and entrepreneurs ever, and I admire him so much. In fact, Mark Zuckerberg became so famous that Time Magazine declared this American technology entrepreneur and philanthropist as ‘person of the year” in 2010. Having managed to connect more than 1 billion people among themselves one way or another, today, the social media “Mughal” has every right to claim his place in history as the “greatest web entrepreneur” of all time, some would say. Living in a house of more than 5000 square feet, with a price tag of about $7. 3 million, in a town called Palo Alto, California, Mark Zuckerberg became the youngest self-made billionaire with a net worth of more than $65. 4 billion today. Admiring a person for offering the world a new horizon of virtual reality by inventing a thing called “Facebook” in order to turn this world into a small place is easy. I could also easily admire his clear way of thinking which motivated him to wear the same T-shirt every day so that he didn’t have to waste his time in deciding small things such as what to wear, or what to eat for breakfast every day. But what I admire the most about this person is his risk-taking abilities (dropping out from Harvard University or turning down very lucrative offers from companies like Microsoft and AOL, just to name a few) and innovative ideas with a clear sense of vision in his mind so that he could finally deliver something really, really amazing to this world. Finally, one couldn’t help admiring a “philanthropist” like Mark Zuckerberg, who is already a living legend in his mid 30’s, when he decided to donate at least 50% of his business shares- worth about $65 billion now – to promote equality and human development in the world. Now, how many people can do that! Sample Answer 2: We all have our favourite personalities whom we respect and love from the bottom of our heart. While some of them are friends and family whom we meet almost every single day, a few of them are great sportsmen or famous silver screen stars whom we have never met. Our admiration for a famous person makes us follow him/her and it's a dream for many to meet a well-known celebrity. Interestingly, I have a list of my favourite personalities from different arenas whom I follow on social networking platforms and I admire them for their talents, skills, contributions, philanthropic activities, and success stories.   One such famous person whom I greatly admire is Lionel Messi, one of the greatest football players of all time. He is a well-respected sportsman whom I have been following in news and Twitter for more than eight years. I scarcely miss a football match in which he plays. He is a wonder-boy in football and the favourite sportsman of millions of football fans around the world.   Messi is an Argentine professional footballer who plays as a forward both for the Spanish club Barcelona and the Argentina national team. Messi has won five Ballon d'Or awards, two FIFA Club World Cup golden ball, a record five European Golden Shoes, nine La Liga titles, four UEFA Champions League titles, six Copas del Rey and he holds many other records and success stories. Both a prolific goalscorer and a creative playmaker, Messi holds many enviable records in the professional football. He has scored over 680 senior career goals for his club and country. Often considered the best player in the world and regarded by many as one of the greatest players of all time, he is world renowned and inspiration to many aspiring football players. Messi is his country's all-time leading goalscorer and he currently lives in Castelldefels, a village near Barcelona.   Messi has earned my deep admiration primarily for his amiable character, and formidable skills. Besides, he is the best football player alive and I really enjoy his performance and skills. Throughout his career, he has been involved in charitable efforts aimed at vulnerable children, a commitment that stems in part from the medical difficulties he faced in his own childhood. Since 2004, he has contributed his time and finances to the United Nations Children's Fund (UNICEF). One of the highest paid sportsmen of all time, he is a legend in football history and deserved our respect and admiration. I admire him more than any other football player I know about.
Describe
a
famous
person
whom you
admire
. You should say: who this
person
is what
makes
him/her
famous
where does he/she
live
 
and
explain
why you
admire
him/her.
 
[You will
have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
think
about what you are going to say. You can
make
some
notes to
help
you if you wish.
]
Model Answer 1: Having born and raised in one of the New York suburbs at the
house
of a dentist father in 1984,
Mark
Elliot Zuckerberg made his
mark
at an elementary school by getting interested in computer programming.
But
,
little
did anybody know at that
time
that the
little
“computer whiz” would revolutionize the concept of social media networking by creating a thing called “
facebook
.
com
” in 2004. Whatever followed after
that is
just
'history'.

I would like to thank you for this nice topic and in my opinion, Zuckerberg is one of the most prolific and successful programmers and entrepreneurs ever, and I
admire
him
so
much. In fact,
Mark
Zuckerberg became
so
famous
that
Time
Magazine declared this American technology entrepreneur and philanthropist as
‘person
of the year” in 2010.

Having managed to connect more than 1 billion
people
among themselves one way or another,
today
, the social media “Mughal” has every
right
to claim his place in history as the “greatest web entrepreneur” of all
time
,
some
would say. Living in a
house
of more than
5000 square feet
, with a price tag of about $7. 3 million, in a town called Palo Alto, California,
Mark
Zuckerberg became the youngest self-made billionaire with a net worth of more than $65. 4 billion
today
.

Admiring a
person
for offering the
world
a new horizon of virtual reality by inventing a thing called “Facebook” in order to turn this
world
into a
small
place is easy. I could
also
easily
admire
his
clear
way of thinking which motivated him to wear the same T-shirt every day
so
that he didn’t
have to
waste his
time
in deciding
small
things such as what to wear, or what to eat for breakfast every day.
But
what I
admire
the most about this
person
is his
risk
-taking abilities (dropping out from Harvard University or turning down
very
lucrative offers from
companies
like Microsoft and AOL,
just
to name a few) and innovative
ideas
with a
clear
sense of vision in his mind
so
that he could
finally
deliver something
really
,
really
amazing to this world.

Finally
, one couldn’t
help
admiring a “philanthropist” like
Mark
Zuckerberg, who is already a living legend in his mid
30’s
, when he decided to donate at least 50% of his business shares- worth about $65 billion
now
to promote equality and human development in the
world
.
Now
, how
many
people
can do that!

Sample Answer 2: We all have our
favourite
personalities whom we respect and
love
from the bottom of our heart. While
some
of them are friends and family whom we
meet
almost every single day, a few of them are great sportsmen or
famous
silver screen stars whom we have never met. Our admiration for a
famous
person
makes
us follow him/her and it's a dream for
many
to
meet
a
well
-known celebrity.
Interestingly
, I have a list of my
favourite
personalities from
different
arenas whom I
follow on
social networking platforms and I
admire
them for their talents,
skills
, contributions, philanthropic activities, and success stories.
 
One such
famous
person
whom I
greatly
admire
is Lionel Messi, one of the greatest
football
players
of all
time
. He is a
well
-respected sportsman whom I have been following in news and Twitter for more than eight years. I
scarcely
miss a
football
match in which he plays. He is a wonder-boy in
football
and the
favourite
sportsman of millions of
football
fans around the
world
.
 
Messi is an Argentine professional footballer who plays as a forward both for the Spanish club Barcelona and the Argentina national team. Messi has won five Ballon d'Or awards, two FIFA Club
World
Cup golden
ball
, a record five European Golden Shoes, nine La
Liga
titles, four UEFA Champions League titles, six
Copas
del
Rey and
he holds
many
other records and success stories. Both a prolific goalscorer and a creative playmaker, Messi holds
many
enviable records in the professional
football
. He has scored over 680 senior career goals for his club and country.
Often
considered the best
player
in the
world
and regarded by
many
as one of the greatest
players
of all
time
, he is
world
renowned and inspiration to
many
aspiring
football
players
. Messi is his country's all-time leading
goalscorer and
he
currently
lives
in
Castelldefels
, a village near Barcelona.
 
Messi has earned my deep admiration
primarily
for his amiable character, and formidable
skills
.
Besides
, he is the best
football
player
alive and I
really
enjoy his performance and
skills
. Throughout his career, he has
been involved
in charitable efforts aimed at vulnerable children, a commitment that stems in part from the medical difficulties he faced in his
own
childhood. Since 2004, he has contributed his
time
and finances to the United Nations Children's Fund (UNICEF). One of the highest paid sportsmen of all
time
, he is a legend in
football
history and deserved our respect and admiration. I
admire
him more than any other
football
player
I know about.
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56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a famous person whom you admire. v. 1

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