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Describe a seminar or rally that you participated in. v.1

Describe a seminar or rally that you participated in. v. 1
Describe a seminar or rally that you participated in. You should say: What it was about When you attended What you did And explain why you attended the seminar or rally. Sample Answer: A few months back I participated in a seminar that was conducted by the city council to create the awareness among people so that they prudently use the water. It was probably the month of December and I was present in this seminar. In fact, one of my friends was an active member of the city welfare committee and he insisted me to join this seminar. This was mainly focused on requesting people to use water in a sensible way. The city authority was having a great problem regarding the unexpected increase of water demand and they found that more than 20% water can be saved if people use little senses and become aware of the great problems of the scarcity of water supply. It was in the evening and was conducted in a large open field. There were around 400 people present in this seminar. The seminar started with the speech from the city counsellor and then other guests gave their speeches. Many interesting information and facts were presented on this seminar and it was so touchy that I promised myself that I would be very careful not to waste a single drop of water from now on. I was mostly the listener of the great speeches given by the participants. I was sitting in the front row and watched the slides presented in the seminar. Then a rally was conducted in our neighbourhood and I walked with the people and hold a placard that said ‘Save water, save the future’. I actually went there because of my friend’s request. But later on, I realised that it was a good seminar to attend and from this seminar I actually got inspiration to attend such seminars and rallies. My overall experience of this seminar was pretty good.
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Describe
a
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seminar
or rally that you participated in. You should say: What it was about When you attended What you did And
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explain
why you attended the
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seminar
or rally. Sample Answer:

A few months back I participated in a
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seminar
that
was conducted
by the city council to create the awareness among
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people
so
that they
prudently
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use
the
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water
. It was
probably
the month of
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
December and
I was present in this
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seminar
. In fact, one of my friends was an active member of the city welfare
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
committee and
he insisted me to
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join
this
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seminar
. This was
mainly
focused on requesting
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people
to
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use
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water
Consider replacing "in a sensible way" with the adverb for "sensible"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a sensible way
. The city authority was having a great problem regarding the unexpected increase of
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water
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
demand and
they found that more than 20%
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water
can
be saved
if
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people
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use
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little
senses and become aware of the great problems of the scarcity of
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water
supply. It was in the evening and
was conducted
in a large open field. There were around 400
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people
present in this
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seminar
. The
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seminar
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started
with the speech from the city
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counsellor
and then other guests gave their speeches.
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Many
interesting information and facts
were presented
on this
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seminar
and it was
so
touchy that I promised myself that I would be
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very
careful not to waste a single drop of
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water
from
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now
on. I was
mostly
the listener of the great speeches
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given
by the participants. I was sitting in the front row and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watched
the slides presented in the
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seminar
. Then a rally
was conducted
in our
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neighbourhood
and I walked with the
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people
and hold a placard that said ‘Save
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water
, save the future’. I
actually
went there
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because
of my friend’s request.
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But
later on, I
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realised
that it was a
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good
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seminar
to attend and from this
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seminar
I
actually
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got
inspiration to attend such
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seminars
and rallies. My
overall
experience of this
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seminar
was pretty
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a seminar or rally that you participated in. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
330 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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