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Describe a school which you went to. v.2

Describe a school which you went to. v. 2
Describe a school which you went to. You should say: when you went there how many people studied there how long you spent there and explain what you liked and disliked about it.   Model Answer 1: I would say that if there was one phase of life, which everybody would want back, it had to be the “school life”. So, I surely would like to thank you for offering me the opportunity to describe a school which I attended in the past. The school, I want to talk about, is a high school in Deptford, London, which I attended from the year of  2007 to 2012. Being located at the heart of one of the best metropolitan cities in the world, this particular state-funded secondary school attracted students, both boys and girls, from all origins and backgrounds as well as from all walks of life. However, most of the students there were from working-class people. It specialized in Humanities, with English, Citizenship and Drama. It is a five-storey building, with multi-use games area, big playground in the front and 150 cycle parking spaces. And, of course, it also has a big library and large stadium for Deptford green community leisure. Besides, the school also has wireless technology throughout the entire school buildings (meaning students can use laptops when necessary in each and every classroom), a fitness gym, a sound recording studio and radio station, light and spacious classrooms which are 25% larger than statutory regulations, and a tiered seating conference hall with lecture desks which can act like a performance hall. If I remember correctly, around 12 hundred students used to attend this great secondary school when I was studying there. Anyway, what I really liked about my secondary school was that the teachers were really qualified and very helpful. The school management was very friendly also. The infrastructure was amazing, and we had our own badminton, basketball and football teams who played really well. Besides, there were extra classrooms for community tutoring groups which were accessible for all weak students. Finally, I would never forget about the delicious and free bowl of porridge for breakfast which was provided in the mornings, alongside a range of other refreshments. However, I didn’t like the school uniform colour which every student needed to wear.   Sample Answer 2: I went to (…say a school name you attended. . ) school in my childhood and studied there from (. . from class. . .   to class …) my grade 3 to grade 7. I was around 8 years old when I first went to this school and had been there till I became 13 years old. This was one of the most popular schools in the city and I had to be accepted in the admission test before I actually started reading there. The school was a 4 story building and there were approximately 300 students and 40 teachers in this school. I had been a kid when I studied there and I have lots of memories related to this school. I liked the way teachers behaved with us, the very interesting way they taught us, the playground and my classmates. We had a big hall room where we gathered during the tiffin time and enjoyed gossiping with friends. The large green fields were one of our favourite places and we often played and ran there. The school provided us tiffin and snacks which we really liked. Things I did not like about the school are only a few and among them, the noise produced by the nearby road was the most irritating thing for us. Since the school was situated near the main road, sound pollution was a dire issue for us. I hated the fact that the class started from 6: 30 am and because of that, I had to wake up very early in the morning. There were 2-3 teachers who had ferocious characteristics and I abhorred their rude behaviours sometimes. I mostly enjoyed the time I spent in the school. I had many good friends and I liked the environment and teachers o this school.   Part 3 – Two-way discussion: Q. How are education priorities today different from those in the past? Q. What is your opinion on the way languages are taught in schools? Q. How can the type of school you go to affect career success? Q. What changes do you think will happen in the classroom in the near future? Q. What important lessons we learn from schools? Q. How government in your country can improve the current education system? Why do you think the changes are required?   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would also enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe a school or college where you studied. Describe a place in your hometown. Describe a building in your school or college. Describe one of your favourite places in your hometown. Describe a place where you spent a long time.
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Describe
a
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school
which you
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went
to. You should say: when you
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went
there how
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many
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people
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studied
there how long you spent there and
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explain
what you liked and disliked about it.
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Model Answer 1:

I would say that if there was one phase of life, which everybody would want back, it had to be the
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“school
life”.
So
, I
surely
would like to thank you for offering me the opportunity to
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describe
a
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school
which I attended in the past.

The
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school
, I want to talk about, is a high
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school
in
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Deptford
, London, which I attended from the year of
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2007 to 2012.
Being located
at the heart of one of the best metropolitan cities in the world, this particular state-funded secondary
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school
attracted
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students
, both boys and girls, from all origins and backgrounds as
well
as from all walks of life.
However
, most of the
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students
there were from working-
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class
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people
. It specialized in Humanities, with English, Citizenship and Drama. It is a
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five-storey
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building
, with multi-
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use
games area,
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big
playground in the front and 150 cycle parking spaces. And,
of course
, it
also
has a
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big
library and large stadium for
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Deptford
green community leisure.
Besides
, the
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school
also
has wireless technology throughout the entire
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school
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buildings
(meaning
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students
can
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use
laptops when necessary in each and every classroom), a fitness gym, a sound recording studio and radio station, light and spacious classrooms which are 25% larger than statutory regulations, and a tiered seating conference hall with lecture desks which can act like a performance hall.

If I remember
correctly
, around 12 hundred
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students
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used
to attend this great secondary
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school
when I was studying there.
Anyway
, what I
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really
liked about my secondary
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school
was that the
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teachers
were
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really
qualified and
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very
helpful. The
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school
management was
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very
friendly
also
. The infrastructure was amazing, and we had our
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own
badminton, basketball and football teams who played
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really
well
.
Besides
, there were extra classrooms for community tutoring groups which were accessible for all weak
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students
.
Finally
, I would never forget about the delicious and free bowl of porridge for breakfast which
was provided
in the mornings, alongside a range of other refreshments.
However
, I didn’t like the
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school
uniform
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colour
which every
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student
needed to wear.
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Sample Answer 2:

I
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went
to (…say a
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school
name you attended.
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.
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)
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school
in my childhood and
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studied
there from (.
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.
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from
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class
.
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.
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.
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to
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class
…) my grade 3 to grade 7. I was around 8 years
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old
when I
first
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went
to this
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school
and had been there till I became 13 years
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old
. This was one of the most popular
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schools
in the city and I had to be
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accepted
in the admission
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test
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before
I
actually
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started
reading there.

The
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school
was a
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4 story
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building
and there were approximately 300
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students
and 40
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teachers
in this
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school
. I had been a kid when I
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studied
there and I have lots of memories related to this
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school
. I liked the way
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teachers
behaved with us, the
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very
interesting way they taught us, the playground and my classmates. We had a
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big
hall room where we gathered during the
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tiffin
time and enjoyed gossiping with friends. The large green fields were one of our
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favourite
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places and
we
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often
played and ran there. The
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school
provided us
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tiffin
and snacks which we
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really
liked.

Things I did not like about the
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school
are
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only
a few and among them, the noise produced by the nearby road was the most irritating thing for us. Since the
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school
was situated
near the main road, sound pollution was a dire issue for us. I hated the fact that the
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class
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started
from 6: 30 am and
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because
of that, I had to wake up
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very
early in the morning. There were 2-3
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teachers
who had ferocious characteristics and I abhorred their rude
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behaviours
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sometimes
.

I
mostly
enjoyed the time I spent in the
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school
. I had
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many
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good
friends and I liked the environment and
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teachers
o this
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school
.
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Part 3
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–
Two-way discussion: Q. How are education priorities
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today
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different
from those in the past? Q. What is your opinion on the way languages
are taught
in
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schools
? Q. How can the type of
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school
you go to affect career success?
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Q
. What
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changes
do you
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think
will happen in the classroom in the near future?
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Q
. What
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important
lessons we learn from schools?

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Q
. How
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government
in your country can
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improve
the
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current
education system? Why do you
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think
the
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changes
are required
?
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would
also
enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
or college where you
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studied
.
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Describe
a
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place
in your hometown.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
or college.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
one of your
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favourite
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places
in your hometown.
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Describe
a
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place
where you spent a long time.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
67Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
30Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a school which you went to. v. 2

Speaking
  American English
9 paragraphs
843 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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