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Describe a place you visited on vacation

Describe a place you visited on vacation wMpRY
Last time I went to vacation with my family, took place in spring I and my family visited to zaamin where situated in djizak. Zaamin has massive mountains and breathtaking-jozibador places Like sanatorium and attract more visitors for a long time I have wondered because of its cristal clear air. It is about 100 km s from my hometown, and takes a lot of time to arrive Normally we prefer to stay about 2 or 3 days. But we had to dwelled=stay A day because of bad weather. After we arrived we found a suitable hotel There are a plenty of hotels which situated in zaamin. It was hard to find choosing a right one. Until dinner we did it. i guess it was unforgettable Because we didn`t overlook anyting. I got familiar with while the vacation for example there are many relics of the past in zaamin. This is a golden opportunity to learn history.
Last time I
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went to vacation
with my family, took place in spring

I and my family visited to
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zaamin
where situated in
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djizak
.

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Zaamin
has massive mountains and
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breathtaking-jozibador
places

Like sanatorium and attract more visitors for a long time I have wondered
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because
of its
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cristal
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clear
air.

It is about 100 km s from my hometown, and takes
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a lot of
time to arrive

Normally
we prefer to stay about 2 or 3 days.
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But
we had to
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dwelled
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stay


A day
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because
of
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bad
weather.
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After
we arrived we found a suitable hotel

There are a
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plenty
of hotels which situated in
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zaamin
. It was
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hard
to find choosing a
right
one. Until
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dinner we
did it.
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i
guess it was unforgettable

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Because
we
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didn`t
overlook
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anyting
. I
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got
familiar with while the vacation
for example
there are
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many
relics of the past in
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zaamin
.

This is a golden opportunity to learn history.
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IELTS speaking Describe a place you visited on vacation

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6 paragraphs
156 words
5.5
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