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Describe a piece of modern technology you own. v.1

Describe a piece of modern technology you own. v. 1
Describe a piece of modern technology you own. You should say: what it is what you use it for how long you have owned it and explain why it is important to you.   Model Answer 1: I bought it about 10 years ago when my first nephew (the first child of my elder brother) was born, for the purpose of recording the activities and invaluable moments of my first nephew. Since then, I have never really stopped using this modern technology. The name of this modern technology is, as we all know it, a video camera. It is a basic “point-and-shoot” video camera, with a size of about 108 millimetres (4. 25 inch), and has a weight of about 265 grams. Coming in shiny black colour, this camera is made by Canon Company and is also affordable, comparing to some other basic video cameras in its class. Offering a zoom range of 3 to 5 times, this camera also has a bigger and better lens for its price. It also has a video resolution of 1280 x 720. Anyway,   after buying it, initially, I didn’t really find much use for it except, of course, recording every little moment of my nephew, but as more and more time passed, I became interested in using for other purposes and activities. Slowly and slowly, I started to carry it outside with me, when travelling to any places, and then also started to make videos of nature around me. The more I was using it, the better I was feeling about my camera and my works.   Later on, I felt bold enough to carry my camera even to some parties, like wedding and birthdays, in order to capture the fun and happy moments. After that, I never really looked back, as I carried my little camera pretty much everywhere with me like a trusted friend. Anyway, my video camera is important to me because it allows me to capture the favourite moments of my life, as well as the life of other important people around me, on my own terms. Besides, it keeps me busy when I don’t really feel like doing anything constructive or feel bored. Finally, it also allows me to look back to some of my favourite moments of the past when I feel down and depressed.   Sample Answer 2: I have several pieces of modern technology and electronic gadgets that I often use and among them, I would like to talk about the laptop I have. This is a laptop computer which is manufactured by HP. This laptop has a good configuration and it supports most of the latest software. It came with the Windows 8 operating system and it was a bit expensive for me to buy. I bought it a few months ago when I replaced my old Dell laptop with this new one. I use it for my official purposes as well as personal purposes. I use the internet, communicate with my friends using this laptop. I sometimes prepare some documents, surf the internet and play games on it as well. This laptop serves my entertainment also. I watch movies, listen to music and play games on it. In fact, I use this laptop more frequently than any other electronic device I have except the cell phone. I own a laptop for more than 10 years but I bought this current one 3-4 months ago. Since technology changes and to use the latest software and to get faster performance, we need to upgrade our computers and laptops, I replaced my old laptop with this new one. As I have already mentioned, I use this laptop to use the internet, play games, create documents, contact my friends, maintain my blogs, watch movies, listen to music and for many other important purposes. This laptop has become an unavoidable technology for me that I use almost every day.
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Describe
a piece of
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modern
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technology
you
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own
. You should say: what it is what you
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use
it for how long you have
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owned
it and
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explain
why it is
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important
to you.
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Model Answer 1: I
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bought
it about 10 years ago when my
first
nephew (the
first
child of my elder brother)
was born
, for the
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purpose
of recording the activities and invaluable
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moments
of my
first
nephew. Since then, I have never
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really
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stopped
using this
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modern
technology.

The name of this
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modern
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technology
is, as we all know it, a
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video
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camera
. It is a basic “point-and-shoot”
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video
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camera
, with a size of about 108
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millimetres
(4.
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25 inch
), and has a weight of about 265 grams. Coming in shiny black
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colour
, this
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camera
is made
by Canon
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Company
and is
also
affordable, comparing to
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some
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other
basic
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video
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cameras
in its
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class
. Offering a zoom range of 3 to 5 times, this
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camera
also
has a bigger and better lens for its price. It
also
has a
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video
resolution of 1280
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x
720.

Anyway
,
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after buying it,
initially
, I didn’t
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really
find much
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use
for it except,
of course
, recording every
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little
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moment
of my nephew,
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but
as more and more time passed, I became interested in using for
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other
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purposes
and activities.
Slowly
and
slowly
, I
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started
to carry it outside with me, when travelling to any places, and then
also
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started
to
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make
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videos
of nature around me. The more I was using it, the better I was feeling about my
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camera
and my works.
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Later on, I felt bold
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enough
to carry my
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camera
even to
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some
parties, like wedding and birthdays, in order to capture the fun and happy
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moments
. After that, I never
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really
looked back, as I carried my
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little
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camera
pretty much everywhere with me like a trusted friend.

Anyway
, my
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video
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camera
is
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important
to me
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because
it
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allows
me to capture the
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favourite
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moments
of my life, as
well
as the life of
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other
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important
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people
around me, on my
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own
terms.
Besides
, it
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keeps
me busy when I don’t
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really
feel like doing anything constructive or feel bored.
Finally
, it
also
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allows
me to look back to
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some
of my
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favourite
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moments
of the past when I feel down and depressed.
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Sample Answer 2: I have several pieces of
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modern
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technology
and electronic gadgets that I
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often
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use
and among them, I would like to talk about the
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laptop
I have. This is a
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laptop
computer which
is manufactured
by HP. This
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laptop
has a
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good
configuration and it supports most of the latest software. It came with the Windows 8 operating system and it was a bit expensive for me to
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buy
. I
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bought
it a few months ago when I replaced my
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old
Dell
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laptop
with this new one.

I
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use
it for my official
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purposes
as
well
as personal
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purposes
.
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I
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use
the internet, communicate with my friends using this
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laptop
.
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I
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sometimes
prepare
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some
documents, surf the internet and play games on it as
well
. This
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laptop
serves my entertainment
also
. I
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watch
movies, listen to music and play games on it. In fact, I
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use
this
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laptop
more
frequently
than any
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other
electronic device I have except the cell phone.

I
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own
a
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laptop
for more than 10 years
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but
I
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bought
this
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current
one 3-4 months ago. Since
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technology
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changes
and to
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use
the latest software and to
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get
faster performance, we need to upgrade our computers and
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laptops
, I replaced my
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old
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laptop
with this new one.

As I have already mentioned, I
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use
this
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laptop
to
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use
the internet, play games, create documents, contact my friends, maintain my blogs,
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watch
movies, listen to music and for
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many
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other
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important
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purposes
. This
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laptop
has become an unavoidable
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technology
for me that I
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use
almost every day.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
59Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a piece of modern technology you own. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
7 paragraphs
652 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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