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Describe a small company in your hometown that you think is successful. v.1

Describe a small company in your hometown that you think is successful. v. 1
Describe a small company in your hometown that you think is successful. You should say: how you know about this company what they produce or do why you think it is successful and explain how you think it became successful.   Model Answer 1: This is an interesting question because I think the answer I’ll give reflects what I think of as ‘success’ to me being a successful business isn’t necessarily about making the owner rich, or growing the company bigger each year, it can be about other things too. I’m going to tell you about a small company I know, how I know it, what they produce and why I would call it successful. As to how it became successful, well I suppose I’ll have to just offer my best guess – if it was possible to explain why a company does well I think we would all be entrepreneurs in the making! The company I am thinking of is run by a friend of mine. We met through a running club. She makes very high-quality bespoke cookies. The biscuits themselves are delicious, but actually, it isn’t really so much about the food, it’s about the way she designs and presents them. She will do any design or theme and create special shaped and decorated biscuits to order. So, for example, if you have a friend who is celebrating a special birthday, and they love cycling and rock climbing, she might make up a box of biscuits including one in the shape of a bike, some mountains and ropes to represent abseiling equipment. She does a lot of wedding favours – small biscuits with a personal design incorporating the initials of the bride and groom on e. g. the number plate of a classic car perhaps. She even did a special order for me. A friend of mine had a riding accident and broke her arm very badly. To cheer her up I asked my biscuit making friends make a very special box. It featured a cartoon version of the horse she had been riding; the back of an ambulance; a syringe – to represent the morphine injections the paramedics had issued, and a representation of my friend with her arm in plaster.   It was brilliant! As to why the business is successful, I think it’s for a number of reasons. The actual cost of ingredients is quite modest so the overheads aren’t huge, so my friend is able to add value through her artwork. She meets a niche need, I don’t know of any similar businesses in the region so there is not too much competition. She can also send her biscuits through the post, and they both travel and keep well, so she can supply all over the world – in theory at least, a limitless market. It helps that she is good at what she does so repeat orders keep on coming. However, whilst that explains how she keeps in profit, for me what makes the business a success, is that she has found a way of working for herself that generates an income, but gives her a really good work-life balance. She can work flexibility and take time off when she needs to. If she wants to go for a run in the morning before work and start late she can; if she thinks the lovely weather means she’d be better off working on her allotment she can do that too – although, of course, the work has to be done later. It is fantastic that she has made a success of her business idea, and the company has grown enough that she is also able to employ a part-time assistant to help her in busy spells as well. Setting up the business was an act of faith, there were no guarantees when she started out, but she has worked hard, built up and retained a good reputation, and her products always raise a smile of delight in the recipient. Her main problem is that customers complain about her biscuits look too good to eat. This frustrates her, they are made for eating, ’ keep a photo eat the biscuits’ is her advice, and she should know, she baked them herself! [ Written by - Lucy Marris | Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]   Sample Answer 2: A small web design & development company in my hometown, in my opinion, is a successful company. The name of this company is ‘Net Gear’ (. . . say a name you prefer…) and it was established by two young IT graduate only 3 years back. It has been proven to be a successful company because within 3 years it has expanded rapidly and now they have 2 offices with more than 30 employees. They have a good client base and since one of the owners is personally known to me, I know that they are making an enviable profit. They have been awarded as a promising IT firm last year and their success stories, as well as 2 of their world-class software, were reported in a local newspaper. I know the owners personally and the company office is near to my home. I have visited this company several times and thus I know many details of this company including what type of works they do, who works for this company, what are their products etc. This company is basically a web designing and development company and it mainly designs and develops the eCommerce website for the clients. They have some in-house software including Content Management software and accounting software. After the owners started the companies there were only 5 employees including themselves. They had only 2-3 clients and their office was in their personal house. In 3 years they have worked hard and gained many successes including the office and employee expansion, the output they produce and the revenue they earn.   Model Answer 3: I live in a medium-size town with a population of about only 2 million. However, even though, it is not a big commercial city, it still has a sizable number of local businesses and companies, which have gained some great popularity and success. Today, I would like to talk about one such company which has done really well with its business. The company, I am talking about, is a bakery factory. I have known about this factory since my high school years as it provided regular Tiffin snacks, such as cakes and biscuits, to the students of our school on behalf of our school authority. Since those days, I have always enjoyed their bakery products which include all kinds of bread, cakes and biscuits, as well as many other kinds of pastries and snacks. As far as I know, this bakery factory remains open pretty much every day, even though it has a varied opening and closing hours throughout the week.   Located in one corner of my town, this bakery factory supplies its products not only in its hometown but also to a number of other shops outside of its own town. Interestingly enough though, since the day the bakery had started its business, it never really extended its plant. Instead, what they have done, in order to meet the growing demand of their products, is that they have increased the number of working shifts so that more and more can work there, and that I would call a “smart” move. However, even though, it has increased production, still one would hardly find any of their products left unsold at their store at the end of their business hours. So, based on their sales and their operation outside of their own town, it is fair to conclude that it is a successful company. Anyway, to answer how the company became successful, I think that it did so by maintaining the good quality of their products. Besides, it is successful also because it never hesitates to diversify its products different times of the year, depending on the taste and preferences of its customers.
Describe
a
small
company
in your hometown that you
think
is
successful
. You should say: how you
know
about this
company
what they produce or do why you
think
it is
successful
and
explain
how you
think
it became
successful
.
 
Model
Answer
1: This is an interesting question
because
I
think
the
answer
I’ll give reflects what I
think
of as
‘success’
to me being a
successful
business
isn’t
necessarily
about making the
owner
rich, or growing the
company
bigger each
year
, it can be about other things too. I’m going to
tell
you about a
small
company
I
know
, how I
know
it
, what
they produce and why I would call it
successful
. As to how it became
successful
,
well
I suppose I’ll
have to
just
offer my best guess
if it was possible to
explain
why a
company
does
well
I
think
we would all be entrepreneurs in the making! The
company
I am thinking of
is run
by a
friend
of mine. We met through a running club. She
makes
very
high-quality bespoke cookies. The
biscuits
themselves are delicious,
but
actually
, it isn’t
really
so
much about the food, it’s about the way she
designs
and presents them. She will do any
design
or theme and create
special
shaped and decorated
biscuits
to
order
.
So
,
for example
, if you have a
friend
who is celebrating a
special
birthday, and they
love
cycling and rock climbing, she might
make
up a box of
biscuits
including one in the shape of a bike,
some
mountains and ropes to represent abseiling equipment. She does
a lot of
wedding
favours
small
biscuits
with a personal
design
incorporating the initials of the bride and groom on
e. g.
the
number
plate of a classic car perhaps. She even did a
special
order
for me. A
friend
of mine had a riding accident and broke her arm
very
badly
. To cheer her up I asked my
biscuit
making
friends
make
a
very
special
box. It featured a cartoon version of the horse she had been riding; the back of an ambulance; a syringe
to represent the morphine injections the paramedics had issued, and a representation of my
friend
with her arm in plaster.
 
It was brilliant! As to why the
business
is
successful
, I
think
it’s for a
number
of reasons. The actual cost of ingredients is quite modest
so
the overheads aren’t huge,
so
my
friend
is able to
add
value through her artwork. She meets a niche need, I don’t
know
of any similar
businesses
in the region
so
there is not too much competition. She can
also
send
her
biscuits
through the post, and they both travel and
keep
well
,
so
she can supply all over the world
in theory at least, a limitless market. It
helps
that she is
good
at what she does
so
repeat
orders
keep
on coming.
However
, whilst that
explains
how she
keeps
in profit, for me what
makes
the
business
a
success
, is that she has found a way of working for herself that generates an income,
but
gives her a
really
good
work-life balance. She can
work
flexibility and take time off when she needs to. If she wants to go for a run in the morning
before
work
and
start
late she can; if she
thinks
the lovely weather means she’d be better off working on her allotment she can do that too
although,
of course
, the
work
has to
be done
later. It is fantastic that she has made a
success
of her
business
idea
, and the
company
has grown
enough
that she is
also
able to employ a part-time assistant to
help
her in busy spells as
well
. Setting up the
business
was an act of faith, there were no guarantees when she
started
out,
but
she has worked
hard
, built up and retained a
good
reputation, and her
products
always raise a smile of delight in the recipient. Her main problem is that customers complain about her
biscuits
look too
good
to eat. This frustrates her, they
are made
for eating,
keep
a photo eat the
biscuits’
is her advice, and she should
know
, she baked them herself!
[
Written by
-
Lucy
Marris
| Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
]
 
Sample
Answer
2: A
small
web
design
&amp
; development
company
in my hometown, in my opinion, is a
successful
company
. The name of this
company
is ‘Net Gear’ (.
.
.
say
a name you prefer…) and it
was established
by two young IT graduate
only
3 years back.

It has
been proven
to be a
successful
company
because
within 3 years it has expanded
rapidly
and
now
they have 2
offices
with more than 30 employees. They have a
good
client base and since one of the
owners
is
personally
known to me, I
know
that they are making an enviable profit. They have
been awarded
as a promising IT firm last
year
and their
success
stories, as
well
as 2 of their world-
class
software
,
were reported
in a local newspaper.

I
know
the
owners
personally
and the
company
office
is near to my home. I have visited this
company
several times and
thus
I
know
many
details
of this
company
including what type of works they do, who works for this
company
, what are their
products
etc.

This
company
is
basically
a web designing and development
company
and it
mainly
designs
and develops the
eCommerce
website for the clients. They have
some
in-
house
software
including Content Management
software
and accounting
software
.
After
the
owners
started
the
companies
there were
only
5 employees including themselves. They had
only
2-3 clients and their
office
was in their personal
house
. In 3 years they have worked
hard
and gained
many
successes
including the
office
and employee expansion, the output they produce and the revenue they earn.
 
Model
Answer
3: I
live
in a medium-size
town
with a population of about
only
2 million.
However
,
even though
, it is not a
big
commercial city, it
still
has a sizable
number
of local
businesses
and
companies
, which have gained
some
great popularity and
success
.
Today
, I would like to talk about one such
company
which has done
really
well
with its business.

The
company
, I am talking about, is a bakery
factory
. I have known about this
factory
since my high school years as it provided regular
Tiffin
snacks, such as cakes and
biscuits
, to the students of our school on behalf of our school authority. Since those days, I have always enjoyed their bakery
products
which include all kinds of bread, cakes and
biscuits
, as
well
as
many
other kinds of pastries and snacks.

As far as I
know
, this bakery
factory
remains open pretty much every day,
even though
it has a varied opening and closing hours throughout the week.
 
Located in one corner of my
town
, this bakery
factory
supplies its
products
not
only
in its hometown
but
also
to a
number
of other shops
outside of
its
own
town
.
Interestingly
enough
though, since the day the bakery had
started
its
business
, it never
really
extended its plant.
Instead
, what they have done, in
order
to
meet
the growing demand of their
products
, is that they have increased the
number
of working shifts
so
that more and more can
work
there, and that I would call a “smart”
move
.

However
,
even though
, it has increased production,
still
one would hardly find any of their
products
left
unsold at their store at the
end
of their
business
hours.
So
, based on their sales and their operation
outside of
their
own
town
, it is
fair
to conclude
that it is a
successful
company
.

Anyway
, to
answer
how the
company
became
successful
, I
think
that it did
so
by maintaining the
good
quality of their
products
.
Besides
, it is
successful
also
because
it never hesitates to diversify its
products
different
times of the
year
, depending on the taste and preferences of its customers.
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175Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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