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Describe a place near water where you enjoyed visiting. v.1

Describe a place near water where you enjoyed visiting. v. 1
Describe a place near water where you enjoyed visiting. You should say:  where this place was  with whom you went there  what you did there and explain how much you enjoyed visiting that place which was near water.   Model Answer 1: I am one of those people who like to find peace near water. So, whenever I get an opportunity, I try to visit a lake, river or ocean, especially, if they have some great landmarks or natural views. Today, I would like to talk about one such body of water, which I visited with a group of my office colleagues last year. The name of this is called “Ram Sagor National Park”, which is located at the village of Tejpur, about 8 km south of Dinajpur town, in the northern part of Bangladesh. By the way, the word “Sagor”, means a “lake”.   Named after a landlord called “Ram Nath”, this beautiful water body is considered to be the largest man-made lake in Bangladesh. Excavated between the year of 1750 and 1755, this national park has a size of about 44 hectares that stretches 1080 meters along north-south and about 193 meters along the east-west. Some say the lake is the biggest man-made water reservoir because it helped the people to meet their demand for clean drinking water more than a couple of centuries ago. Anyway, I and my co-workers visited this beautiful national park to enjoy our yearly picnic event. Apart from having our picnic, we also did fishing and riding boats. However, the best part of our activities was that we actually got to play with many different kinds of deer and Blue Bull while taking pictures of white-Breasted Water Hen, Jacanas, Moorhen, Ringed Plover and Grey/Purple Herons also. Anyway, I enjoyed visiting this place so much that wanted to come back to this place again and again. It was a nice place, with great natural beauty, and offered just a perfect measure of quietness to feel the nature around. A variety of ornamental and fruit trees, that has flourished and become lush forested areas around the lake, was good enough to captivate the hearts and minds of its visitors. Finally, the fun experience of catching fish from the lake and enjoying "fish barbecue" with them just can’t be described in any words. All in all, it was a fantastic place to visit.   Sample Answer 2: I have visited many places near a river or a sea and I enjoyed the scenic beauty and vast water very much. I would like to talk about a river I visited 2 years back. I chose to talk about it because I really enjoyed my visit there. The name of the river was (. . . say a river's name. . . ) and it was in (. . . say a place's name. . . ). One of our relatives invited us to visit their house and we decide to visit there. I went there with 4 of my family members including my parents. After we reach there, I was amazed to notice that our relative's house was near a big river. This was the first time I visited those relatives and I was very excited about the natural beauty there. After we reach our relative's house, my younger sister told me that she would like to visit the river. I restrained her by saying that we will all go there in the evening. In the evening we went near the river and the river was very calm at that moment. A sweet wind was blowing from the river and the weather was very pleasant. We sat near the river and had our tea. That was a kind of family picnic. I had my younger brother, sister, my parents and 3 of our relatives at this place. Since this was the summer season, we felt very comfortable being at the bank of the river. We noticed many boats were in the river and we planned to rent a boat for an hour. When we were in the boat, the wind suddenly started blowing heavily. We quickly came to the high land and left for our relative's house.
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Describe
a
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place
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near
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water
where you
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enjoyed
visiting. You should say:
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where this
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place
was
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with whom you went there
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what you did there and
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explain
how much you
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enjoyed
visiting that
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place
which was
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near
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water
.
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Model Answer 1: I am one of those
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people
who like to find peace
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near
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water
.
So
, whenever I
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get
an opportunity, I try to
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visit
a
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lake
,
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river
or ocean,
especially
, if they have
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some
great landmarks or natural views.
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Today
, I would like to talk about one such body of
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water
, which I
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visited
with a group of my office colleagues last year.

The
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name
of this
is called
“Ram
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Sagor
National Park”, which
is located
at the village of
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Tejpur
, about 8 km south of
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Dinajpur
town, in the northern part of Bangladesh. By the way, the word “
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Sagor
”, means a
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“lake”
.
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Named after a landlord called “Ram
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Nath
”, this
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beautiful
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water
body
is considered
to be the largest
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man
-made
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lake
in Bangladesh. Excavated between the year of 1750 and 1755, this national park has a size of about 44 hectares that stretches 1080 meters along north-south and about 193 meters along the east-west.
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Some
say the
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lake
is the biggest
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man
-made
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water
reservoir
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because
it
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helped
the
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people
to
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meet
their demand for clean drinking
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water
more than a couple of centuries ago.

Anyway
, I and my co-workers
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visited
this
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beautiful
national park to enjoy our yearly picnic
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event
. Apart from having our picnic, we
also
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did fishing
and riding
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boats
.
However
, the best part of our activities was that we
actually
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got
to play with
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many
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different
kinds of deer and Blue Bull while taking pictures of white-Breasted
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Water
Hen,
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Jacanas
, Moorhen, Ringed Plover and Grey/Purple Herons
also
.

Anyway
, I
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enjoyed
visiting this
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place
so
much that wanted to
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come
back to this
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place
again and again. It was a nice
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place
, with great natural beauty, and offered
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just
a perfect measure of quietness to feel the nature around. A variety of ornamental and fruit trees, that has flourished and become lush forested areas around the
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lake
, was
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good
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enough
to captivate the hearts and minds of its visitors.
Finally
, the fun experience of catching fish from the
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lake
and enjoying
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"
fish barbecue
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"
with them
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just
can’t be
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described
in any words. All in all, it was a fantastic
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place
to
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visit
.
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Sample Answer 2:

I have
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visited
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many
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places
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near
a
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river
or a sea and I
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enjoyed
the scenic beauty and vast
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water
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very
much. I would like to talk about a
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river
I
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visited
2 years back.
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I
chose to talk about it
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because
I
really
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enjoyed
my
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visit
there.

The
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name
of the
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river
was (.
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.
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.
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say
a river's
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name
.
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.
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.
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)
and it was in (.
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.
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.
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say
a place's
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name
.
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.
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.
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)
. One of our relatives invited us to
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visit
their
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house and
we decide to
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visit
there. I went there with 4 of my family members including my parents. After we reach there, I
was amazed
to notice that our relative's
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house
was
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near
a
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big
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river
. This was the
first
time I
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visited
those
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relatives and
I was
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very
excited about the natural beauty there.

After we reach our relative's
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house
, my younger sister
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told
me that she would like to
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visit
the
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river
. I restrained her by saying that we will all go there in the evening. In the evening we went
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near
the
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river
and the
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river
was
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very
calm at that moment. A sweet wind was blowing from the
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river
and the weather was
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very
pleasant. We sat
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near
the
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river
and had our tea. That was a kind of family picnic. I had my younger brother, sister, my parents and 3 of our relatives at this
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place
. Since this was
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the summer season
, we felt
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very
comfortable being at the bank of the
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river
. We noticed
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many
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boats
were in the
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river and
we planned to rent a
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boat
for an hour. When we were in the
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boat
, the wind
suddenly
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started
blowing
heavily
. We
quickly
came to the high land and
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left
for our relative's
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house
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
71Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
33Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a place near water where you enjoyed visiting. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
7 paragraphs
700 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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