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Describe a place where you would like to travel to. v.1

Describe a place where you would like to travel to. v. 1
Describe a place where you would like to travel to. You should say:  where and when you would like to go there  how you would go there  ith whom you would go there and explain why you would like to go to this place.   Model Answer 1: No doubt, Bangladesh, my homeland, is a very beautiful country as it has so many beautiful places to visit. Of course, I have already travelled to some of those beautiful places before. But today, I would like to talk about a place where I would like to travel to in the near future. The name of this place is “Sylhet”. Located on the picturesque “Surma” River (one of the major rivers of Bangladesh) valley, this hilly city is situated in the eastern part of Bangladesh and is also one of the best holiday destinations of my country. Laid between towering hills, called the “Khasia” and “Jainta” to the north and the Tripura hills to the south, Sylhet city breaks the monotony of the flat Gangetic plains (related to the area, drained by the Indus and Ganges rivers, especially the lowland plain south of the Himalayas) and is often termed as the Queen of Hills. Besides, while its terraced tea gardens, rolling landscapes, exotic flora and fauna set the breathtaking views, its thick tropical rain forest also adds just the perfect backdrop to the Sylhet landscape.   A large number of rivers, natural lakes and water bodies are also there in order to provide a sanctuary to millions of migratory birds. In fact, many people from all over the world travel to this place every year because of its stunning natural beauty. Anyway, I am also planning to travel to this place, sometime next year, but depending on the time of the year, I would either take a train or fly in order to go there. Anyway, I like to visit this place, primarily because of stunning natural beauty, including its gushing waterfalls, mountains and greenery. I also want to see the beautiful tea garden because it is one of our major exporting products, which helps us earn a very substantial amount of foreign currency. Finally, I want to travel to this place, because it has one of the best weather systems in my country, and I also want to be able to enjoy it for some times.   Sample Answer 2: I had a very close friend in my school level who is currently working as a doctor at (. . . say a place name. . . ) and I would like to travel to his living place. I have a plan to visit (. . . say the place name. . . ) whenever I will get holidays for 4-5 days. The friend has invited me to visit his place and in the meantime, he has visited my place twice. So my turn to visit his place has become mandatory. As he is living in a rural area where hills, tea gardens are available, I am sure I will enjoy my visit there. There are three options to visit the place- bus, train and aeroplane. For me, the aeroplane would be a bit expensive and I like travelling by train, so I will take the train to visit there. I have a few reasons to visit this particular place. First of all, this area is famous for its natural beauty and a good number of local and foreign tourists visit this place each year. I would be able to enjoy my stay and live close to nature during my stay there and that would be refreshing for me. Second, I would enjoy my friends accompany there and as he has already visited my place twice, I feel kind of obliged to visit his living place. Another reason I would like to travel there is to stay away from the busy life and busy city for dew days.
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Describe
a
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place
where you would like to
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travel
to. You should say:
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where and when you would like to go there
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how you would go there
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ith
whom you would go there and
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explain
why you would like to go to this
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place
.
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very
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beautiful
country as it has
so
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many
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beautiful
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places
to
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visit
.
Of course
, I have already travelled to
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some
of those
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beautiful
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places
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before
.
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But
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today
, I would like to talk about a
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place
where I would like to
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travel
to in the near future.

The name of this
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place
is “
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Sylhet
”. Located on the picturesque “
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Surma
”
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River
(one of the major
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rivers
of Bangladesh) valley, this hilly city
is situated
in the eastern part of Bangladesh and is
also
one of the best holiday destinations of my country. Laid between towering hills, called the “
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Khasia
” and “
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Jainta
” to the north and the Tripura hills to the south,
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Sylhet
city breaks the monotony of the flat
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Gangetic
plains (related to the area, drained by the Indus and Ganges
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rivers
,
especially
the lowland plain south of the Himalayas) and is
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often
termed as the Queen of Hills.

Besides
, while its terraced tea gardens, rolling landscapes, exotic flora and fauna set the breathtaking views, its thick tropical rain forest
also
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adds
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just
the perfect backdrop to the
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Sylhet
landscape.
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A large number of
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rivers
,
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natural
lakes and water bodies are
also
there in order to provide a sanctuary to millions of migratory birds. In fact,
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many
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people
from all over the world
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travel
to this
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place
every
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year
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because
of its stunning
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natural
beauty.
Anyway
, I am
also
planning to
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travel
to this
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place
, sometime
next
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year
,
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but
depending on the time of the
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year
, I would either take a
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train
or
fly
in order to go there.

Anyway
, I like to
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visit
this
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place
,
primarily
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because
of stunning
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natural
beauty, including its gushing waterfalls, mountains and greenery. I
also
want to
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see
the
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beautiful
tea garden
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because
it is one of our major exporting products, which
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helps
us earn a
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very
substantial amount of foreign currency.
Finally
, I want to
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travel
to this
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place
,
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because
it has one of the best weather systems in my country, and I
also
want to be able to
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enjoy
it for
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some
times.
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Sample Answer 2:

I had a
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very
close friend in my school level who is
currently
working as a doctor at (.
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.
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.
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say
a
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place
name.
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.
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.
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)
and I would like to
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travel
to his living
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place
. I have a plan to
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visit
(.
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.
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.
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say
the
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place
name.
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.
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.
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)
whenever I will
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get
holidays for 4-5 days. The friend has invited me to
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visit
his
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place
and in the meantime, he has visited my
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place
twice.
So
my turn to
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visit
his
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place
has become mandatory. As he is living in a rural area where hills, tea gardens are available, I am sure I will
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enjoy
my
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visit
there.

There are three options to
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visit
the
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place-
bus,
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train
and
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aeroplane
. For me, the
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aeroplane
would be a bit expensive and I like travelling by
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train
,
so
I will take the
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train
to
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visit
there. I have a few reasons to
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visit
this particular
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place
.
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First of all
, this area is
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famous
for its
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natural
beauty and a
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good
number of local and foreign tourists
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visit
this
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place
each
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year
. I would be able to
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enjoy
my stay and
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live
close to nature during my stay there and that would be refreshing for me. Second, I would
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enjoy
my friends accompany there and as he has already visited my
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place
twice, I feel kind of obliged to
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visit
his living
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place
. Another reason I would like to
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travel
there is to stay away from the busy life and busy city for dew days.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
63Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
30Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a place where you would like to travel to. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
657 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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