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Describe an important journey that was delayed. v.1

Describe an important journey that was delayed. v. 1
Describe an important journey that was delayed. You should say: where you were going why the journey was important what caused the delay and explain how you felt about the delay. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer: We have to go to different places because we have many needs in our life. Of course, not all those travels and journeys require planning in advance. Rather, it’s the only important journeys which require planning in advance, and today, I would like to talk about one such important journey which was delayed even after enough proper planning. The journey, I wanted to take, was to attend the graduation ceremony of one of my nephews about a few years ago. By the way, my nephew and I have a very close bond. In fact, it was because of my advice that my nephew chose to study engineering, and he told me that his graduation ceremony would remain incomplete if I didn’t attend his graduation ceremony. So, attending that graduation ceremony had great emotional value to me. Besides, I also didn’t want to miss that once-in-a-lifetime-event of my nephew. So, I made all the plans in advance as to what kind of transportation I would use, and when I would need to arrive at the destination. But, despite those plans in advance, I couldn’t exactly arrive at the destination on time because of the events that were not within my control. In fact, the journey was delayed because I was not able to get a taxi on time. And, the reason for which I couldn’t catch a taxi on time was that I needed to see one of my close friends at a hospital, who got injured in a terrible accident on the same day. Thankfully, my friend survived the crash, but my journey was delayed. Needless to say, I felt a bit disappointed after my journey was delayed. But, even though, it was delayed, I felt a little relief at the same time, knowing that the delay happened because of a valid cause. I also felt that my nephew wouldn’t mind that little delay because of the same reason. Besides, I felt confident that I could still attend at least a part of the graduation ceremony if I had tried to arrive at my destination by using some different routes.
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journey
that was
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delayed
. You should say: where you were going why the
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journey
was
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important
what caused the
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delay
and
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explain
how you
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felt
about the
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delay
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer:

We
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go to
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different
places
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because
we have
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many
needs in our life.
Of course
, not all those travels and
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journeys
require planning in advance.
Rather
, it’s the
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only
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important
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journeys
which require planning in advance, and
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today
, I would like to talk about one such
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important
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journey
which was
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delayed
even after
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enough
proper planning.

The
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journey
, I wanted to take, was to attend the
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graduation
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ceremony
of one of my
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nephews
about a few years ago. By the way, my
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nephew
and I have a
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very
close bond. In fact, it was
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because
of my advice that my
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nephew
chose to study engineering, and he
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told
me that his
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graduation
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ceremony
would remain incomplete if I didn’t attend his
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graduation
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ceremony
.
So
, attending that
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graduation
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ceremony
had great emotional value to me.
Besides
, I
also
didn’t want to miss that once-in-a-lifetime-
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event
of my nephew.

So
, I made all the plans in advance as to what kind of transportation I would
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use
, and when I would need to arrive at the destination.
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But
, despite those plans in advance, I couldn’t exactly arrive at the destination on
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time
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because
of the
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events
that were not within my control. In fact, the
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journey
was
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delayed
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because
I was not able to
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get
a taxi on
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time
. And, the reason for which I couldn’t catch a taxi on
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time
was that I needed to
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see
one of my close friends at a hospital, who
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got
injured in a terrible accident on the same day.
Thankfully
, my friend survived the crash,
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but
my
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journey
was delayed
.

Needless to say
, I
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felt
a bit disappointed after my
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journey
was
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delayed
.
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But
,
even though
, it was
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delayed
, I
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felt
a
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little
relief at the same
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time
, knowing that the
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delay
happened
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because
of a valid cause. I
also
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felt
that my
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nephew
wouldn’t mind that
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little
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delay
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because
of the same reason.
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, I
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felt
confident that I could
still
attend at least a part of the
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graduation
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ceremony
if I had tried to arrive at my destination by using
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some
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different
routes.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an important journey that was delayed. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
422 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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