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Describe a neighbour who helps other people. v.1

Describe a neighbour who helps other people. v. 1
Describe a neighbour who helps other people. You should say: who is s/he how you know him/ her how often you meet and explain how this neighbour helps other. Model Answer: I live in a metropolitan city where people mostly lead a busy life. We do not know all the neighbours in our locality and yet I am lucky to have many nice neighbours for their amiable behaviours, sense of responsibilities and benevolent mentality. Among them, Mr. Kruse (…or say a name you like…) is a person who frequently extends his helping hand to others. He is a doctor and in fact a very famous one. He is a devoted doctor who often helps people with his service and he has a good reputation as a good and kind doctor. I have noticed many times that he does not impose a fixed fee for the poor patients. He has been living in our community for the last 5-6 years and I often meet him in the evening while we both get out for a stroll in the nearby park. I visited his chamber for professional advice regarding the health issue I had and took my family members to him as well. To my surprise, he gave an utmost importance to our issues, unlike other doctors we have seen, and prescribed some really helpful therapy and medicines. Usually, the doctors in our city have a tendency to charge a large amount of money to the visiting patients and do not care for the paying capability of the poor patients. But Mr. Kruse is an exception to that. With his professional skill and reputation he could have amassed a fortune for him and for his family but because of his benevolent and kind nature, he is still leading a mediocre but happy life. From my conversation with him, I realised that he puts more priority in helping others than earning money. He sometimes even sacrifices his own conform and family needs to visit a patient who can’t come to his chamber. Thus he has sought to help others and that’s a great virtue we do not see very often. In my opinion, he is the most helpful neighbour I have ever had. Part 3: Details Discussion: Q. What are some of the ways people can help others in the community? Which one is most important? Q. Why do you think some people like to help other people? Q. Some people say that people help others in the community more now than they did in the past. Do you agree or disagree? Why? Q. What types of services, such as libraries or health centres, are available to the people who live in your area? Do you think there are enough of them? Q. Which groups of people generally need the most support in a community? Why? Q. Who do you think should pay for the services that are available to the people in a community? Should it be the government or individual people? Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a good neighbour you know about. Describe one of your neighbours. Describe a person who helps others. Describe a person you like.
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neighbour
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who
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helps
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other
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people
. You should say:
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who
is s/he how
you know
him/ her how
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often
you
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meet
and
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explain
how this
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neighbour
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helps
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other
. Model Answer:

I
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live
in a metropolitan city where
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people
mostly
lead a busy life. We do not know all the
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neighbours
in our
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locality and
yet
I am lucky to have
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many
nice
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neighbours
for their amiable
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behaviours
, sense of responsibilities and benevolent mentality. Among them, Mr.
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Kruse
(…or say a name you like…) is a person
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who
frequently
extends his helping hand to others. He is a
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doctor
and in fact a
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very
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famous
one. He is a devoted
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doctor
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who
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often
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helps
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people
with his
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service and
he has a
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good
reputation as a
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good
and kind
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doctor
. I have noticed
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many
times that he does not impose a
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fixed
fee for the poor
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patients
. He has been living in our
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community
for the last 5-6 years and I
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often
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meet
him in the evening while we both
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get
out for a stroll in the nearby park. I visited his chamber for professional advice regarding the health issue I had and took my family members to him as
well
. To my surprise, he gave an utmost importance to our issues, unlike
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other
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doctors
we have
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seen
, and prescribed
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some
really
helpful therapy and medicines.
Usually
, the
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doctors
in our city have a tendency to charge a large amount of money to the visiting
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patients
and do not care for the paying capability of the poor
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patients
.
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But
Mr.
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Kruse
is an exception to that. With his professional
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skill
and reputation he could have amassed a fortune for him and for his family
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but
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because
of his benevolent and kind nature, he is
still
leading a mediocre
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but
happy life. From my conversation with him, I
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realised
that he puts more priority in helping others than earning money. He
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sometimes
even sacrifices his
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own
conform and family needs to visit a
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patient
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who
can’t
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come
to his chamber.
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Thus
he has sought to
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help
others and that’s a great virtue we do not
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see
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very
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often
. In my opinion, he is the most helpful
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neighbour
I have ever had. Part 3:
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Details
Discussion: Q. What are
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some of the
ways
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people
can
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help
others in the
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community
? Which one is most
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important
? Q. Why do you
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think
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some
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people
like to
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help
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other
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people
? Q.
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Some
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people
say that
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people
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help
others in the
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community
more
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now
than they did in the past. Do you
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agree
or disagree? Why? Q. What types of services, such as libraries or health
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centres
, are available to the
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people
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who
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live
in your area? Do you
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think
there are
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enough
of them? Q. Which groups of
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people
generally
need the most support in a
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community
? Why? Q.
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do you
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think
should pay for the services that are available to the
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people
in a
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community
? Should it be the
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government
or individual
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people
? Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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Describe
a
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good
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neighbour
you know
about.
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one of your
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neighbours
.
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a person
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who
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helps
others.
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Describe
a person you like.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
55Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a neighbour who helps other people. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
547 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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