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Describe a naughty thing you did when you were a child. v.1

Describe a naughty thing you did when you were a child. v. 1
Describe a naughty thing you did when you were a child. You should say: how old you were then What you did Why you did it and explain how do you feel about it now. Sample Answer 1: Childhood is magical and we remember our childhood with great joy. Even the stupid things we have done in our childhood seems very exciting to us in our later life. The naughty things that I did in my childhood are many and I will mention a particular thing that I did when I was only 7 years old. I was in grade two at that time and one day on my way to the school I found that some of my classmates have gathered near a pond and they have planned to catch fish from that pond. I forgot about my school and put the school bag in a nearby tree. I was very excited about the whole idea of catching fish and then cooking it for the dinner. I stayed for around 3-4 hours to catch the fish with my bare hand and with some small nets my classmates had with them. After 2-3 hours I was tired and was convinced that it was not an easy job to do. I found that my classmates had become less interested in it by this time and they were planning to go home. By the time I realised that I have done a great mistake by skipping the school and I have made my dresses dirty in the pond, it was too late. I was afraid that my mother would be very angry if she finds out what I really did over here. Then I talked with my classmates and found that they got anxious as well. We were 3-4 in number and only one of us had been able to catch 2 small fishes. We then made a decision to steal some fishes from the other people who had already caught a good number of fishes and put them in their jars. We had been successful to steal some fishes from others and when I returned home, I had 3-4 fishes in my bag. I was lucky to get over with the things I had done and I still find it very funny and naughty thing to do in my childhood. I have done many other naughty things later part of my life but this was the event that still gives me real pleasure to think about.
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Describe
a
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naughty
thing you did when you were a child. You should say: how
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old
you were then What you did Why you did it and
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explain
how do you feel about it
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now
. Sample Answer 1:

Childhood is
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magical and
we remember our childhood with great joy. Even the stupid things we have done in our childhood seems
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very
exciting to us in our later life. The
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naughty
things that I did in my childhood are
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many
and I will mention a particular thing that I did when I was
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only
7 years
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old
. I was in grade two at that time and one day on my way to the
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school
I found that
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some
of my
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classmates
have gathered near a
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pond and
they have planned to catch fish from that pond. I forgot about my
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school
and put the
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school
bag in a nearby tree.
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I
was
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very
excited about the whole
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idea
of catching fish and then cooking it for the dinner.

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I
stayed for around 3-4 hours to catch the fish with my bare hand and with
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some
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small
nets my
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classmates
had with them. After 2-3 hours I
was tired
and
was convinced
that it was not an easy job to do. I found that my
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classmates
had become less interested in it by this
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time and
they were planning to go home.

By the time I
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realised
that I have done a great mistake by skipping the
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school
and I have made my dresses dirty in the pond, it was too late. I was afraid that my mother would be
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very
angry if she finds out what I
really
did over here. Then I talked with my
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classmates
and found that they
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got
anxious as
well
. We were 3-4 in number and
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only
one of us had been able to catch 2
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small
fishes. We then made a decision to steal
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some
fishes from the other
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people
who had already caught a
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good
number of fishes and put them in their jars.

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We
had been successful to steal
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some
fishes from others and when I returned home, I had 3-4 fishes in my bag. I was lucky to
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get
over with the things I had done and I
still
find it
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very
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funny
and
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naughty
thing to do in my childhood. I have done
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many
other
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naughty
things later part of my life
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but
this was the
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event
that
still
gives me real pleasure to
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think
about.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a naughty thing you did when you were a child. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
415 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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