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Describe a long journey/short trips you would like to make again. v.1

Describe a long journey/short trips you would like to make again. v. 1
Describe a long journey/short trips you would like to make again. You should say: where you went why you went there what you did during the trip/ journey and explain why you would like to make the journey/ trip again. Sample Answer 1: Two years ago I went to my sister’s father-in-law’s house and it was indeed a long and exciting journey that I would love to make again. I went there with my parents and my younger brother to meet my newly married sister and her in-laws. This was a suburban area called Villa Maloti and it was so beautiful that I initially couldn’t believe it. The serene and mesmerising nature, lake, picturesque roads and houses and simple and traditional lifestyle of people took my heart away. It was like a perfect world in someone’s dream. This area was more than 700 km away from our living place and we needed to change our vehicles 3-4 times to actually reach there. Interestingly instead of making us tired and bored, the journey actually revived us. I can think of three reasons for that. One – we were very excited to meet our relatives; two – the side view was unbelievably beautiful and pleasant; three- we had such a family tour after a long. I actually want to make this journey all over again only because this was quite a remarkable journey and I enjoyed it thoroughly. After we left our home, we took a taxi to reach the train station. The train was about 40 minutes late and during that time I read a newspaper. I also checked the news on my mobile phone. Our train journey was for 4 hours and during that time I mostly enjoyed the natural beauty of the passing villages. We had our breakfast on the train. After we left the train we had to take two different buses and finally a taxi to reach our destination. During the bus journey, I either talked with my mom or read the storybook I took with me. This was an interesting journey and I enjoyed most of it. I wish to visit that picturesque and beautiful suburban area again and meet my lovely younger sister who got married. The soothing experience of the train journey and the chance to stay away from the busy city life are the reasons I would love to make this journey again. In fact, I am very much looking forward to making the journey once again soon.
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Describe
a long journey/short trips you would like to
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. You should say: where you
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went
why you
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went
there what you did during the trip/
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journey
and
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explain
why you would like to
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the journey/ trip
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. Sample Answer 1:

Two years ago I
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went
to my sister’s father-in-law’s
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house
and it was
indeed
a long and exciting
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journey
that I would
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love
to
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make
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again
. I
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went
there with my parents and my younger brother to
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meet
my
newly
married sister and her in-laws. This was a suburban area called Villa
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Maloti
and it was
so
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beautiful
that I
initially
couldn’t believe it. The serene and
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mesmerising
nature, lake, picturesque roads and
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houses
and simple and traditional lifestyle of
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people
took my heart away. It was like a perfect world in someone’s dream. This area was more than 700 km away from our living
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place and
we needed to
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change
our vehicles 3-4 times to
actually
reach there.
Interestingly
instead
of making us tired and bored, the
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journey
actually
revived us. I can
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think
of three reasons for that. One
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–
we were
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very
excited to
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meet
our relatives; two
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–
the side view was
unbelievably
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beautiful
and pleasant; three- we had such a family tour after a long. I
actually
want to
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make
this
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journey
all over
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again
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only
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because
this was quite a remarkable
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journey
and I enjoyed it
thoroughly
. After we
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left
our home, we took a taxi to reach the
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train
station. The
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train
was about 40 minutes late and during that time I read a newspaper. I
also
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checked
the news on my mobile phone. Our
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train
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journey
was for 4 hours and during that time I
mostly
enjoyed the natural beauty of the passing villages. We had our breakfast on the
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train
. After we
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left
the
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train
we had to take two
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different
buses and
finally
a taxi to reach our destination. During the bus
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journey
, I either talked with my mom or read the storybook I took with me. This was an interesting
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journey
and I enjoyed most of it. I wish to visit that picturesque and
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beautiful
suburban area
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again
and
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meet
my lovely younger sister who
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got
married. The soothing experience of the
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train
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journey
and the chance to stay away from the busy city life are the reasons I would
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love
to
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make
this
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journey
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again
. In fact, I am
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very
much looking forward to making the
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journey
once
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again
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soon
.
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33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS speaking Describe a long journey/short trips you would like to make again. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
415 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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