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Describe a happy family event from your childhood that you remember well. v.1

Describe a happy family event from your childhood that you remember well. v. 1
Describe a happy family event from your childhood that you remember well. You should say: what the event was when and where it happened what you saw or did and explain why you remember this event so well. Sample Answer 1: Well, this is a very nice topic for me and I would love to talk about one of my most memorable childhood events that I had with my family members. The celebration was to welcome a new guest in our family- my nephew who was born on that day. My eldest sister gave birth to a beautiful and healthy baby boy on that particular day. I was around 8 years old then. After my father saw the newborn baby for the first time, he declared that this is a special occasion for us. As this is the first baby in our family, he decided that the occasion must be celebrated to welcome the new guest in our family. The event and the celebration both took place in our house which is in Danville. As soon as my father affirmed that we would celebrate this very special day, every one of our family got busy with the arrangement. My parents went to invite guests and to do some necessary shopping. I was so happy and excited that I also called some of my friends to enjoy the event. I wanted to be near the newborn baby all the time and when my mother told me to give some time to the mother and baby alone, I felt quite sad and depressed. I could not believe that such a beautiful baby is my nephew and I wanted to touch him and play with him all the time. However, the sad feeling was so momentary in this case and I forgot it in few minutes. Then I started playing and gossiping with my friends who by the meantime have come to visit us. It was a different day – in terms of happiness, amazement and celebration. The arrival of a gorgeous baby and a huge celebration to welcome the event brought us unbound happiness and reasons to smile. My mother, with her sister, cooked many delicious dishes and we enjoyed the foods with so many friends and relatives. The large cake that my elder brother bought from a pastry shop was another delight and surprise for us. This was a very happy event for all our family members, close friends, neighbours and relatives. I still remember this special family event very vividly for the immense joy and happiness it brought for us.
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Describe
a happy
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family
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event
from your childhood that you remember
well
. You should say: what the
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event
was when and where it happened what you
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saw
or did and
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explain
why you remember this
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event
so
well
. Sample Answer 1:

Well
, this is a
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very
nice topic for me and I would
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love
to talk about one of my most memorable childhood
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events
that I had with my
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family
members. The
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celebration
was to welcome a new guest in our
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family-
my nephew who
was born
on that day. My eldest sister gave birth to a
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beautiful
and healthy baby boy on that particular day. I was around 8 years
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old
then. After my father
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saw
the newborn baby for the
first
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time
, he declared that this is a special occasion for us. As this is the
first
baby in our
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family
, he decided that the occasion
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must
be celebrated
to welcome the new guest in our
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family
. The
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event
and the
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celebration
both took place in our
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house
which is in Danville. As
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soon
as my father affirmed that we would celebrate this
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very
special day, every one of our
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family
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got
busy with the arrangement. My parents went to invite guests and to do
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some
necessary shopping. I was
so
happy and excited that I
also
called
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some
of my
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friends
to enjoy the
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event
. I wanted to be near the newborn baby all the
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time
and when my mother
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told
me to give
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some
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time
to the mother and baby alone, I felt quite sad and depressed.
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I
could not believe that such a
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beautiful
baby is my nephew and I wanted to touch him and play with him all the
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time
.
However
, the sad feeling was
so
momentary
in this case
and I forgot it in few minutes. Then I
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started
playing and gossiping with my
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friends
who by the meantime have
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come
to visit us. It was a
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different
day
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–
in terms of happiness, amazement and
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celebration
. The arrival of a gorgeous baby and a huge
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celebration
to welcome the
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event
brought us unbound happiness and reasons to smile. My mother, with her sister, cooked
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many
delicious
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dishes and
we enjoyed the foods with
so
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many
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friends
and relatives. The large cake that my elder brother
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bought
from a pastry shop was another delight and surprise for us. This was a
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very
happy
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event
for all our
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family
members, close
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friends
,
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neighbours
and relatives. I
still
remember this special
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family
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event
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very
vividly
for the immense joy and happiness it brought for us.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a happy family event from your childhood that you remember well. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
430 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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